1、读后续写亲密友谊愤怒篇1R Read for the characters I Coretti I was in the wrongI got angry,and said a rude word to him.he was good he had worked and helped his sick motherhe had been welcomed in my househe had pleased my fatherI saw his coat ripped on the shoulder-he had carried too much wood.good,kind hardworki
2、ng caring enviousmean2R Read for the plot and emotional changes At last the moment of dismissal arrived.plot mountainI quarreled with Corettienviousangry,displeasedagreed to meet outsideashamed,not angryclimax 冲突最大化，也是情节转折点conflict 不断升级He hugged me,and said:“Well have no more quarrels,will we?”a goo
3、d ending solution，为呼应原文提到的父亲的看法，父亲对“我”的做法如何回应情节转折点，应该出现conflict的解决办法gave Coretti a jog on purpose thought myself in the wrong but was ashamed to apologize upset,regretful Coretti Read for the conflicts I Coretti 获奖，我出于嫉妒与他争吵找茬弄坏Coretti的本子内心纠结没勇气道歉准备好尺子等待放学 Read for themeStill I was in the wrong.If o
4、nly I had not have said that word to him!If only I hadnt have insulted him!I thought of the advice that my father had given to me:“If you have done wrong,beg his pardon.”He replied with a smile,“I did not do it on purpose.”brave to admit mistakes forgivenss Read for language 具体的肢体动作描写固定句式be doing.wh
5、en.“正在做.这时.“强调句式，说明二人争吵的起因“生气”、“故意找茬”的描写手的动作描写利用神态描写表现Coretti的愤怒具体手部动作描写+定语从句，表现两人的冲突升级情感描写+心理活动描写，表现“我”很不开心观察人物的动作、语言、情感和心理活动描写upset-not angry-regretful,直接用情感词汇描写情感继续纠结大篇幅描写“我”内心的纠结：认识到自己的错误，却没勇气承认和道歉“我”的眼睛的动作，凸显“我”的纠结关于“内心纠结”描写1.She was twisting her hands together nervously as if there was somethi
6、ng she didnt want to have or something she didnt want to have to believe.2.She opened her mouth to say something and then closed it again just as quickly.生动描写了“我”和Coretti的眼睛打架的场面，凸显“我”的“不示弱、生气”和Coretti的难过和大度“我”的内心活动描写，回忆父亲的话，考虑自己的做法两个朋友相同的话语，使两人之间的冲突再次升级Read the 2 given sentences 推测续写情节At last the m
7、oment of dismissal arrived.Did Coretti and I meet outside?What did I do and say?How did Voretti react?He hugged me,and said:“Well have no more quarrels,will we?”如何与二段首句中的huggged呼应衔接人际交往中朋友之间冲突的时刻He hugged me,and said:“Well have no more quarrels,will we?”How did I respond?What happened when I reached
8、 home?Did I tell my father about the quarrel?How did my father react?可用语言、情感或动作描写表达父亲的愤怒捕捉续写点续写第二段应与首句衔接，交代“我”和Coretti 是否和好？01一段应描述在校门外的情况续写第一段可交代作者是否说了“pardon me”续写第二段可交代父亲对我的做法的反应父亲对Coretti的评价这么高，续写第二段可交代父亲因为我和这么好的Coretti吵架却不道歉的愤怒续写第一段应交代“我”如何defend myself，是否用my ruler?特定物品my ruler的出现，应注意衔接呼应添加细节描写
9、（与原文语言特点一致）动作细节描写1.我停下来等他，手里拿着一把尺子,心里有点害怕。I stopped and waited for him,with a ruler in hand，feeling a little afraid.(两连动词)I stopped and waited for him,ruler in hand，a little afraid.(独立主格结构+形容词短语做状语)2.“不”，他还是微笑着，用手把尺子撩开。“No”he said,with his kindly smile,and waved the ruler aside with his hand.(手部动作)“
10、No”he said,with his kindly smile,waving the ruler aside with his hand.（分词做状语）3.我一时呆住了，然后感觉有人将手放在我肩上。我被他抱住了。I stood still in amazement,and then I felt what seemed to be a push on my shoulders,and I found myself in his arms.（动作+情感词汇）4.他从我手里夺过尺子，折成两半，扔在一旁。He snatched the ruler from my hand,broke in two
11、,and hurled it against the wall.（三连动词）Snatching the ruler from my hand,he broke in two,and hurled it against the wall.(分词短语做状语)情感细节描写（表现人物的愤怒）1.他脸色突变，一股怒火像乌云一样笼罩着他的脸。His color came up,and a heavy rage came over him like a dark cloud.(无灵主语句+比喻)2.他脸色阴沉得像大雷雨天一样，生气地说:“你不是应该道歉吗，这原是你的不是呢。”He frowned like
12、a thunderstorm,and said angrily:“You should haveapologized,since you were wrong.”（神态描写+修辞）Frowning like a thunderstorm,he said angrily:“You should have apologized,since you were wrong.”(分词做状语)与段首句衔接段首句的衔接与特定物品的衔接与原文尾句ruler的呼应与二段首句关键信息hugged的衔接与特定物品的衔接与特定细节的照应和原文“我”不好意思道歉，感觉丢脸情节的呼应衔接呼应原文父亲对Coretti评价高的细节与段首句衔接段首句的衔接父亲折断尺子，与原文物品“尺子”的照应
