1、考点33 读后续写（试题特征与句式策略）一、试题特征读后续写原文所提供短文词数在350左右，划线词语涉及到名词(词组)、动词(词组)、介词(词组)和形容词等，其中，以名词(词组)为主，在续写中至少要使用5个关键词语，需要注意：在使用关键词语时根据时态和语态的需要，可以改变动词的形式，可以改变名词的单复数，但不要改变关键词语在原文中的含义和词性；多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。1.创造性：即发挥想象力，该题型具有一定的开放性，考生需用自己的语言对故事情节进行内容创造；2.逻辑性：即根据已提供的关键信息，按照可能的合理的方向续写，使文章
2、逻辑结构完整；3.丰富性：即语言能力的充分体现，词汇句法的准确与复杂程度，细节描写的生动性等都将让故事更加立体饱满。读后续写操作简便，通常的做法是从外语读物中截留一篇结尾缺失的材料，让学习者读后写全内容。此法用于外语学习，大致有以下优点(王初明，2012)： （1）释放想象力，培养创新思维能力。在理解阅读材料的基础上创造性地构思续写内容，必须发挥想象力，而想象力是创新的源头，续写有助于培养创新思维能力。（2）理解与产出紧密结合。如前所述，这是提高外语学习效率的重要条件。若要完成好续写任务，必须充分理解阅读材料的内容，同时接着续写，记忆新鲜，模仿容易，协同效应佳。（3）与阅读材料及其作者互动。续
3、写时，学习者需要回读原文，以保持所写的内容和语言与原文连贯，因而迫使产出和理解协同，如同与比自己语言水平高的本族语者互动，产生拉平效应。（4）创造性地模仿和使用语言。续写必须生成新的内容，在表达新内容遇到语言障碍时，可直接使用阅读材料中出现的词句，为写作纤困。这是一种语言模仿，但具有创造使用的特征：模仿阅读材料中的词语句型，表达自己创造的内容。学习者马上运用新学到的词语或进行熟词新用，不仅学得好记得牢，而且容易产生成就感，增强外语学习兴趣和动力。（5）在接触语篇中使用语言。语言的交际使用通常发生在语篇中，语篇提供语言使用不可缺少的恰当语境。在正确语境中学习语言能够抑制母语语境知识补缺，不仅使语
4、言学得地道，而且有助于语言的后续运用。（6）阅读材料有助于学习者自我纠错。阅读材料提供语言正确使用的样板，续写产生的协同效应使习作的语言向阅读材料的语言看齐，致使语言错误相对减少，教师批改作文的负担减轻。（7）适用于不同水平的外语学习者。阅读材料的难易程度弹性较大，适应性强。最易的读后续写可用于训练小学生，最难的可用于培训研究生。随着学习者阅读理解能力和写作能力提高，可不断调整阅读材料的难度以促学。（8）对外语学习和教学几无负面作用。坚持读后续写一两个学期，定能显著改善学习者的外语运用能力。（9）杜绝抄袭。续写使学习者难以抄袭，若有抄袭，很容易被发现。二、写作步骤 1.通读全文，读懂原文通读全
5、文首先要解决好五个W和一个H的问题，即理清人物who、地点where、时间when、事件what、原因why及怎样发展how。2.构思情节，谋篇布局按照原文中事件发生的逻辑性，构思好情节发展，这个发展须符合情节内在的逻辑。因为这不是写科幻小说，不是写神话，因此应该符合现实发生的真实性。所以这个环节的主要任务是谋篇布局。布局谋篇最关键应利用好两方面的信息：（1）十个标有下划线的关键词语（2）续写部分所给的两段落的首句。这两句话起到很关键的作用，无论从时间的先后、情节的发展都要以这两句话作为内在逻辑关系。在情节的安排中，必须按照叙述的顺序，继续紧密结合原材料中五个W和一个H的逻辑顺序发展下去。第一
6、段和第二段要衔接紧密，相互关联，不能独立存在。3.理清逻辑，优化语言 第一：侧重点为语言逻辑，词句结构都必须符合当时人狼大战的情景。第二： 要提炼有思想性、体现价值观和传递正能量的元素（例如珍爱生命，学会合作，学会感恩等）第三：注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性第四：要注意连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯。写作不必追求高大上的词汇，相反，朴实自然、地道、贴切的词语便是好的词语。按照情节的发展进行延续，写作手法上必须以叙为主，描写上以心理、动作描写为重心，场景的描述合乎逻辑地推进。4.检查，划出关键词，誊写务必保证划出5个以上所应用的划线词，检查文章的连贯性、逻辑性，规范性。最后誊写要做到字迹工整
7、，清晰美观。【注意事项】1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；2.内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；4.上下文的连贯性。三、应试技巧（一）准确理解原文，把握主题。文章的主题或主旨是作者想要表达的中心思想，反映了他的写作意图，是全文的灵魂，贯穿全文的始末，统领故事的发展，是学生续写的依据和方向。只有抓住原文的主题，续写的内容与原文主题才能相一致且合乎逻辑。否则续写部分就会与前文不一致，从而偏题。学生一定要准确理解所提供的材料，确保自己的理解与作者意图表达的相一致。在续写时，要紧紧把握主题，使文章主题前后一致，高度融合。这就需要学生了解记叙文的常见主题
8、并学会判断主题。可以通过文章的标题、背景、主要情节、首尾判断，也可以从文章中的议论抒情句进行推敲。（二）理清人物事件及脉络要点。要续写所提供的阅读材料，必须理清文章的脉络线索及人物事件，要对文中线索进行有根据、合乎情理又合乎逻辑的创造性推测，把故事续写下去。要抓住一篇记叙文的脉络要点，通常可从记叙文六要素着手，即：时间、地点、人物、事情的起因、经过、结果，也就是when，where，who，what，why，how。这样可以了解故事的梗概，对文本的脉络走向有个基本定位。通常情况下，前面4个要素已经浮出水面，事情正处于发展中，悬念已经浮现。学生需要找出阅读文本中的悬念，并根据悬念发挥合理想象，顺
9、应原文的情节发展进行预测，解开悬念，创作一个意料之外又情理之中的结局。（三）根据段落开头语确定续写方向，根据画线词语确定细节。找到悬念之后，并非可以天马行空、随心所欲地想象，学生还需要仔细阅读后面两个续写段落的开头语，这两句开头语对续写起着方向性的指引作用，又有限制作用。因此，在预测情节发展时，必须紧跟原文内容，紧密衔接段落开头语，才能保证续写内容的融洽度。学生通过研读这两句话，可大致预测出接下去会发生什么，而且第二段的开头语往往隐含第一段的信息，所以第一段的续写方向相对第二段会更明确。读后续写的画线关键词对续写起着限制和引导的作用，所以，在预测了故事的大致走向之后，学生需要将这些关键词结合到
10、预测的情节中，勾勒出更加丰富的故事细节。（四）注意语言表达的准确性和丰富性。情节构思完成，细节敲定之后就是语言表达的问题。跟任何写作一样，读后续写要求语言表达准确、流畅，上下文之间逻辑紧密，通顺连贯，结构和词汇丰富。这是一个长期积累的过程，但鉴于读后续写的特殊性，学生可以有意识地积累。1.增强语法结构和词汇的丰富性英语语法在读后续写中有着非常重要的作用。丰富准确的结构、句式对于读后续写起着重要的保障。学生可以整理提炼读后续写常用的语法结构，如分词做壮语，独立主格，倒装句，强调句型，which引导的非限制性定语从句，虚拟语气等，在平时写作中要有意识地加以应用，使得句式更丰富。由于读后续写中大量涉
11、及动作，尤其是肢体动作、情感及环境风景等的描写，平时要注意积累这方面的词汇和表达。例如哭这个动作，sob，weep，wail，tears well up in ones eyes，burst into tears都比cry形象生动得多。此外，阅读一些名著的简写本或当代小说，摘录其中的相关句子加以背诵或者背诵一些美文佳句，运用在续写中，可以起到画龙点睛的作用。2.保持与原文在语言风格上的一致性既然是续写，就应该是一篇完整的记叙文，需要在各个语言层次的表达风格上和原文保持一致，达到水乳交融的效果。由于所提供的续写材料的语言风格各不相同，有的质朴，有的华丽，有的欢快，有的忧伤。不同的语言风格会用不同
12、的语言，学生在平时训练过程中就要学会判断原文的语言风格并进行模仿，尽可能与原文用词相仿，句式相近，语气相通。总之，在续写时要注意词汇的不同时态搭配、用词的新颖和变换及语气的强弱，避免过于口语化的词汇。四、素材例析与情感有关的表达害怕 He turned to me, with his eyes full of horror. Fear slowly creeps （爬，蔓延）upon her. She was struck with horror when. She was choked by fear. Her face turned pale and stood there tongue-
13、tied. A flood of fear welled up in him. / Fear flooded over him. Her heart beat so violently that she felt nearly suffocated sfkeitid （窒息）. She shook all over, feeling like sitting on pins and needles（如坐针毡）. He froze in horror. 感动&羞愧Touched deeply/immensely, weTears filling her eyes, she offered her
14、 heartfelt gratitude.With tears streaming down her face, she. Moved to tears, she failed to utter a word. I felt my face burning with shame. I was overcome by a wave of guilt and words failed to express my regret. 愤怒I was seized by anger.He was fuming fjumi （冒烟的 ）with rage.His anger boiled over（沸溢 ；
15、(情绪) 失去控制 ）.He could hardly/scarcely contain his rage（愤怒 ）.He was breathing fire and fury（激怒的感情）fjr .Hisvoicetrembledwithanger.He gave me a look of burning anger.He glared at me with burning eyes.He flared up （发怒；爆发 ）at the word.His face clouded with anger.They sat there with glum glm（闷闷不乐的 ）looks o
16、n their faces.The news cast a cloud of gloom over his face.He brimmed over with （满溢；充满）sorrow when.They were immersed in（沉浸于）sorrow.These days he was in low spirits.喜乐The smile on her face shone like a diamond.A simile of understanding flashed across his face.A ripple （涟漪 ）of excitement ran through
17、them.Laughter lingered around (萦绕 ) the room.His eyes twinkled with pleasure.A wild gaiety （快乐）took hold of her. Unforgettable were her eyes that shone like diamonds and lips held in a steady smile.I was wild with joy/ on the top of the world.与动作有关的表达心理动词 These events constantlyremind me ofmy father
18、s absence.I immediatelypicture/imagine himwalking through the door, wearing a shining smile.Most daysI hope thatmaybe he will turn up at my doorstep one day.At that very moment, hewonderedwhether he would be sentenced to death for killing people.Hewas determined totell people the truth, but no one c
19、ould hear his voice.So the young manrealizedthe police had arrested the wrong person, and hetook the great courageto expose the real criminal.Ifocused my thoughts onevery part of myself.We nodded our headsin agreement,understandingeach other.Somehow Igot the ideait would be fun to waken my father by
20、 firing it.Iwas wonderingwhere he was. I had a new joke to tell him.I was afraid to go to sleep,for fear thatI would wake up the way I had been before.Then I tried tofigure outwhat I should do. Follow my friend to the hospital?There was nothing I could accomplish there, Iconvinced myself.All I could
21、 do at the hospital,I decided, was to get in the way.As I started my car, Irealized thatmy friend had left his truck and keys at the courts.From that one experience Ilearned thatthe most important thing in life isnt the money you make.I willcherish the fond memoriesfor the rest of my life.Hefelthe c
22、ould not continue and sat down on the lawn.At this dark and hopeless moment,a wonderful idea came to him.It filled his mind with a great, bright light.Tomthought for a moment, was about to agree; but hechanged his mind.手的动词 Stunned, I stood up andgave her an awkward hug / hugged her in an awkward wa
23、y.Speechless, she smiled radiantly andgathered her son into her arms. The nearer it got, the more shewavedthe yellowblousewildly.The mantookthe sacks,reached intohis pocket andplacedfour coins in Reubens hand.Then,clutchingthe tin can, he headed for the shop.Heparkeddown the street from Bobbys house
24、, and rushed tohis front door, tremblingwith excitement.The man gentlywrappedthe gift in brown paper andplacedthe parcel in Reubens hands.Doraliftedthe lid, tears beginning to blur her vision.Seeingno other people noticeus, I placedthe Christmas present down andpoundedhis doorbell.She didnt say a wo
25、rd, but smiled a watery smile andheld my hand tightly.As weshook hands withthe new owners, I told them how fortunate they were.Hepatted my head, and inquired: “Is there anything particular you want?”Shestroked her fingers through my hair, and said: “Of course there is a Santa Clause.”He wassqueezing
26、 my wristso hard that it ached.Shehandedthe napkinto me, and three $20 bills fell onto my desk when Iopenedit.Stevie looked at me, and then at his mother, thenpulled outone of the napkins.“Im Nancy Drew,” she said,holding outher hand.The classclappedwarmly as Mr. Leepresentedme with the reward.Herea
27、ched intohis pocket andwithdrewa note.Mrs. Damonpointed tothe quotation from Albert Einstein hanging on the wall.Calmly hepicked upthe brush and started again to whitewash.脚的动词 Then Lisastood up and made her way throughthe crowd toward me.Lisaplanted her feet firmlyin front of me.Shemanaged to climb
28、 onto itand waited patiently.Tomran/rushed downWater Street, trembling with great panic.The shadows were lengthening when Tomarrived at（动作）the factory.Then, clutching the tin can, heheaded forthe shop. Racinghome, Reubenburst throughthe front door.Disappointed and frustrated, the poor manmade his wa
29、y back tohis family.Suddenly, the womanstood upandenteredthe house in tears.And yet, they all juststoodthere staring at me,motionless.Belle Ringer nodded thoughtfully, and Franniehurried offto wait on the rest of her tables.Iledthemtowarda large corner booth. I could feel the rest of the stafffollow
30、ing behindas wemarched throughthe dining room.Idragged myself throughdaily chores, feeling exhausted.The elderly manfledawaywith great panic.The manstepped back/stepped ontothe platform to take a good look at the paintings.眼的动词 We all gather in front of the television, praying tocatch a glance/glimp
31、se ofhis face. Seeingno other peoplenoticeus, I placedthe Christmas present down and pounded his doorbell. Singing happily, shegazed ather surroundingswith large, innocent eyes.The woman wasstaring eagerly atthe girl, trying to make a conversation.Iwatchedhelplessly, as the woman felt more and more
32、frustrated and hopeless.Then I crept downstairs andexaminedthe tags attached to each of the packages.Her eyes fell onthe photos of her and me at my fourth birthday party.When he finished heraised/liftedhis eyes and looked out the window. She hadspotteda man pacing down the hall.When the students ste
33、pped off the bus, Jamesseyes widenedin surprise.Werecognizedthe famous comedian on his arrival.Meghan nodded seriously,eyes glistening with held-back tears.Swallowing hard, Istared intoMeghans eyesfor a long moment, wondering how I could cope with it.Then he jumped up,eyes twinklingas he ran to fetc
34、h some of his prized Matchbox cars.I was taking my time, strolling in the park andlooking in shop windows.口的动作 Tommurmured a thank youand ran home all the way.“Here, Mum! Here!” Tomexclaimedas he ran to her side.A young man came to the police station, surrounded by a group of journalists,declaring t
35、hathe had spotted the murderer.I was getting ready toblow outall the candles and shes getting ready to help me in case I ran out of air.“Time to go.” Iwhispered tothe girl, wishing she could follow me right away.My teammates were allscreamingas I dashed toward the finish line.I picked up the ball on
36、e last time andgrumbled, “Please just come to get the damn ball.”Frannie quicklytoldBelle Ringer and the other two drivers about Stevies surgery, and then sighed.The house got really noisy at that time, with everybodyhollering and shouting at the top of his voice. “How can I let you throw away the t
37、hing that means the most to you?” Ipleaded withhim.Theylet out asurprisinglyloud voice. The smilefrozeon his face;his mouth fell wide open. Heinterrupted the silence with an announcement: “The deadline to enter for the Competition is tomorrow.”“I havent finished; I need more time,” hebegged. “Thats
38、what Michelangelo said.” Mr. Edgar joked.ShegreetedJames andinquired. “Are you ready for our field trip?” James didntrespond. “What do you think matters for a bird?” Mrs. Damonquestioned.身的动作 Shefelt asleepand dreamed of seeing Tom.Suddenly a tall figure dressed in a dark cloakappearedbefore him.Dea
39、th spoke with a threatening voice, anddisappeared.Dr. Urssenbeck suddenlyfound himself ina large room where thousands of candles were burning.The little girl slowly pushes herselfon the swing.Theyare sittingoutside in the cool night on a wooden porch, talking quietly.One of themapproachedand asked p
40、olitely if I would throw the ball back to him.Wanting to appear agreeable, Ibent down, picked up the ball and, eyes half-shut, threw it back as hard as I could.Once I was on the bus, Icrouchedin a seat and shut my eyes.In a flash my friend was in the car andgone,disappearingin a cloud of dust.For a
41、moment I juststoodthere,paralyzed (呆若木鸡).(2018年6月浙江卷)It was summer, and mydadwanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon.Uncle
42、 Paul, my dads friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos. His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of thefarm houselistening to the frogs and water rolling down therivernearby.
43、 Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feedthe chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take thesheepout to graze(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horse
44、s. They looked really cool. In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains
45、. “Dont belatefor supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to thetrackso that you dontget lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out ofsight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mi
46、xed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse._Paragraph 2:We had n
47、o idea where we were and it got dark._【续写分析】前文提要：父亲带儿子去“西部荒野”，喂鸡牧羊，体验农场生活；见父亲和叔叔骑马很是潇洒，儿子心生向往，于是亲身上马体验【续写线索】 第一段所给首句：Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. 这一句是故事发展的转折点，可从rabbit出现后带来的结果入手扩展开去，可以写马受到惊吓狂奔而去，也可以写人的反应，无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应。第二段所给首句：We had no idea where we were and it
48、was getting dark. 这一句呼应前文Uncle Paul的嘱托不要误了晚饭，可从如何寻路返回入手去写续文。【续写词汇】已给提示词汇：dad，Uncle Paul，farm house，river，feed，sheep，late，track，get lost，sight话题激活词汇：情感：panic，relief，nervous，worried动作：run，cry，think to oneself环境：scenery，mountain，range，valley，river，lake，forest，sun，set，wind，blowOne possible version: Para
49、graph 1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.This unexpected appearance frightened my horse, which made it run wildly. I tried my best to control it, but in vain. Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off. Fortunately, minutes later, the h
50、orse stopped before ariver, out of breath, and so did I. At that moment, my dad also came up. Seeing I was OK, he was quite relieved. But it was clear that wegot lost.Paragraph 2:We had no idea where we were and it got dark.We didnt know where the farm housewas. What we could do was to go back along
51、 the previoustrack slowly. But it was really difficult for us in such a dark situation. Just as we were at the point of desperation, we heard a faint voice from the distance. “It must beUncle Paul,” I said. So we cried back with excitement. Finally, Uncle Paul safely brought us back home. What an am
52、azing ride!1.（2020年7月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。One fall，my wife Elli and I had a single goal:to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world”-the town of Churchill in Manitoba，Canada.Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but al
53、so dangerous. Polar bears-like all wild animals-should be photographed from a safe distance. When Im face to face with a polar bear，I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes，that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.As Elli and I cooked dinner，a young mal
54、e polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed，and smelled our garlic bread.The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp，which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.Terrified，Elli and I tried all the be
55、ar defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear，hit pots hard，and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though-he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws(爪子).I radioed the camp manager for help. He
56、told me a helicopter was on its way，but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter(相遇)，I took some pictures of the bear.Elli and I feared the fence wouldnt last through 30 more minutes of the bears punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The
57、spray burns the bears eyes，but doesnt hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and，through the fence，sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar(吼叫)，the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。P
58、aragraph1:A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp._Paragraph2:At that very moment, the helicopter arrived._2.（2020年，新高考全国I卷，山东）阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jo
59、bs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had ti
60、me, she would bring food and medicine to them.One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very
61、much.“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I dont see what he can do.”After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn
62、money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”The other chil
63、dren also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn(爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”注意:
64、1. 续写词数应为150左右:2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。 When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too._ With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business._3.（2020年1月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。“Im going to miss you so much, Poppy, said the tall, thin teenager. He bent
65、down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions(情绪)get the better of him.His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living a
66、nd studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile.” I guess this is it, “he said.” Ill see you back home in a month, okay？His parents nodded, and they wa
67、tched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boys mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didnt seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or ev
68、en in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didnt.They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasnt her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. What s
69、hould we do to cheer Poppy up？asked Dad. “Weve tried everything.”“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy, “smiled Mom.” Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Lets get a little dog for Poppy.It didnt take long before they walked through the front door ca
70、rrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging(摆动)ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Para 1. Dad
71、 opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared._Para 2. A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university._4.（2017年11月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。A Vacation with My MotherI had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother-loving, swee
72、t, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of
73、 our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if wed ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. W
74、e bravely drove off again two hours later after wed returned home to get the purse and travelers checks Mom had forgotten.David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout(放哨) while I go, and Ill
75、 stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, GoshI thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we werent about to take any chances.On the fourth or fifth nigh
76、t, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didnt we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never c
77、ould understand our objections(反对). If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划
78、线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. _ Paragraph 2:We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. _ 5.阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。It was somewhere between spring and summer, my mom and I were driving through the
79、 countryside. Back then, I was 13 years old, and always felt unhappy with Mom. But little did I know that this trip was going to be a special one. A pot of flowers sat in the back seat, whose heavenly scent filled the car. Suddenly, in the middle of nowhere, my mom pulled over. What are you doing? I
80、 cried, fearing that the car had broken down and wed be stuck there, so far from home. But that wasnt the case. My mom hopped out of the car, grabbing the flowers from the back seat. Itll just be a minute, she called back through the open windows. My eyes impatiently skimmed the edge of the road bef
81、ore settling on a little sign showing that it was a nursing home. I looked back to the building, somewhat annoyed, as my mom reappeared-empty-handed. Before she started the car, curiosity drove me to ask, Do you know someone there? She shook her head. Then what did you do with the flowers? She smile
82、d slightly, I gave them to the receptionist. What? She laughed at my confusion. I told the receptionist to give the flowers to whoever needed them, especially who hasnt gotten any in a while. I kept silent for a moment. Not long after we continued our driving, I spoke again, Did you leave your name?
83、 To this she answered instantly, No. Leaving flowers there for someone who will appreciate them makes me feel good, which is enough of a thank for me. Suddenly, still thinking about Moms deeds, I heard something burst loudly. It was our car that broke down! Nothing could be worse, because neither my
84、 mom nor I understood how to repair it, and we didnt know where the garage was. It also seemed impossible to wait for any passer-by, since we had seen so few along the way.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:We were worrying about wh
85、at could be done. Paragraph 2: As we drove along, a flower shop came into sight 6.阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。A Special AppointmentYears ago I moved to Woodland Hills to take a job in a small hospitals emergency department. No one wanted to work on Christmas Eve, so the shift(轮班)went to me. I kiss
86、ed my family goodbye and went off to spend the night in the hospital. It was a thankless job.At 9 pm, the ambulance brought in a man in his 60s who was having a heart attack. His face was pale, and he was frightened. The whole night I did my best to save his life. Before I left in the morning to spe
87、nd Christmas with my family, I stopped by to see how he was doing. It was still tough, but he had survived the night and was sleeping.The following year I got Christmas Eve duty again. At 9 pm sharp, the ward clerk told me there was a couple who wanted to speak with me. When I approached them, the m
88、an introduced himself as Mr. Lee and said, “You probably dont remember me, but last Christmas Eve you saved my life. Thank you for the year you gave me.” He and his wife hugged me, handed me a small gift, and left.The following year a new doctor had joined the group, but I wanted to see if Mr. And M
89、rs. Lee would return. This time, I volunteered for the shift. I kept an eye on the door. Once again, at exactly 9 pm, the Lees appeared, carrying a warmly wrapped bundle. It was their new grandchild.Mr. Lee, his family and I spent 13 Christmas Eves together. In the later years the staff all knew abo
90、ut the story and would work to give me time with him in the break room, where we spent a half-hour each Christmas Eve.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Last year I saw Mrs. Lee alone in the hospital with a gift for me. _Paragraph
91、2:I carefully opened the package and found a crystal(水晶)bell inside with the word “Friendship” engraved(雕刻)on it. _ 1【解析】本文主要讲述了人与熊对抗，之后成功脱险的故事。主人公的感情线变化为：兴奋渴望惊恐放松。剧情线以主人公如何与北极熊周旋并成功摆脱它展开。由第一段的段首提示句可知：几分钟后，熊又回到营地。接下来可通过场景渲染，描写当时令人颤栗惊恐的画面，例如“Roars and screams pierced the silence with needle-like shri
92、llness.”这不仅合理地描写了熊的反应，也描绘出让人战栗的场景。由第二段的段首提示句可知：此时，直升机到了。如果想要进行续写两段的合理衔接，第一段的结尾可描写成“After thoroughly scrutinizing the area, the bear trotted forward a few steps.”这样可以营造出危急的场景。“我们”看到直升机的到来，感到绝处逢生的喜悦，可以以人物心理描写作为第二段的开头，重点描写喜极而泣的状态，例如“My heart leaped with joy as I knew we were likely to be saved.”最后，结尾部分
93、需要迅速收束，并说明成功逃脱的结局。关于画线词：Elli作为女主人公，是续写内容中应该出现的画线词，noises, pictures, fence, spray与熊有关，也在两段续写内容中出现。最终，两人回归安全状态，因此画线词safe也可自然而然地出现在续写内容中。由此划分画线词，可迅速锁定需使用的画线词范围，辅助构思。【范文】A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Roars and screams pierced the silence with needle-like shrillness. The noises t
94、urned Elli and I pale with horror. I feared that the giant would destroy our whole fence. He roared repeatedly, shattering what was left of the silence. Elli seized this opportunity to take some pictures of the bear. The animals noises echoed all around us. We betrayed our feelings by huddling toget
95、her, shivering with fear. After thoroughly scrutinizing the area, he trotted forward a few steps.At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. My heart leaped with joy as I knew we were likely to be saved. Elli used pepper spray again to buy us enough time. But this time the bear became more alert. H
96、e regarded us with the merciless necessity of hunger, so we throw all the food we have. He then turned away and started devouring. As we were climbing the rope ladder, Elli prayed like thousand times to show thankfulness of being safe and sound. 2【答案】When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thoug
97、ht it was a good one, too. So, they went to the local supermarket together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home, they made a lot of popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn, they went to Bernards home. They told Bernard how to sell the popc
98、orn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this family.With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. He took the popcorn around to the houses and sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then, he wanted to be self-de
99、pendent. Therefore, he asked Mrs. Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that, not only did he sell popcorn, but he also added cream and salt to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He did not forget the help of Merediths family, and he also did what
100、 he could to help those in need.【解析】【分析】本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。【详解】1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意-制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花。2.根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的。3.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致
101、，故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。4.根据第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard of Johns idea, she thought it was a good one, too.(当Meredith太太听到John的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意)可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.(一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意)可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。5.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语
102、言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。 3【答案】Para 1. Dad put the box on the ground and opened the top. A shiny little wet nose popped up. Then two fluffy paws. Next the box tipped over sideways, and
103、out tumbled a mass of wiggly golden silliness.Poppy was amazed. She wagged furiously. She barked with joy. She smiled, her tongue lolling out as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was not shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping around the older dog.“That didnt take long,” remarke
104、d Mom, as both dogs went roaring around the house in an impromptu game of chase. Dad laughed.Para 2. A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. He had missed Poppy and was looking forward to seeing her. When he bent down to give her a big hug, he fell over in surprise as a small golden
105、 cloud came racing up to lick his face too.“Oh my gosh, who is this?” he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the look of shock on his face.“Thats Pee-wee,” said Dad.“I cant believe you got yourselves a puppy!”“We didnt,” replied Mom. “This puppy is for Poppy!”【解析】【分析】这是一篇读后续写作文。【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了男孩要
106、去上大学，和自己的狗Poppy道别。而没有了男孩在家里，Poppy也非常想念男孩，于是男孩父母决定给Poppy买一条小狗作伴。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：爸爸打开盒子，一条可爱的小狗出现了。所以后文应该是描写买来的小狗的样子以及这两只狗的相处情况；第二段开头是：几个星期后，男孩从大学回到家里。本段应该写男孩回到家以后看到两条狗的反应，以及父母告诉男孩这条狗是买给Poppy的。续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
107、【点睛】本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：a mass of，with joy，look forward to等高级词汇；非谓语动词的运用The little pup was not shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping around the older dog.；时间状语从句When he bent down to give her a big hug, he fell over in surprise as a small golden cloud came racing up to lick his face to
108、o.等高级句式。4【答案】The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Thinking of this tent, Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. When the door of our car opened, Mom stormed out instantl
109、y and urged us to put up the tent. David and I were asked to pick up some branches to build a fire. And when we came back, Dad and Mom had already lain down the grass comfortably in front of the tent, talking merrily with a local boy at our age, who kept glancing at this tent curiously. Soon we lear
110、nt that the boy in rags even didnt have a home to live in. Of course, Mom “forgot” to take this tent with us again.We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. And we also had a nice time living with my grandparents during that trip. But what impressed me most was that
111、 tent, which was forgotten deliberately by Mom. Though she did love going camping, she presented that poor boy with this tent out of sympathy. It was Mom that made my childhood colorful. And it was also she that showed me the true meaning of giving.【解析】这是一篇读后续写。短文叙述了作者的母亲很健忘，一家四口自驾旅游去祖父母所居住的地方，途中发生了
112、有趣的事情。【详解】首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事(尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个forgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事)(也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点);其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景： 此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只能有景色描述；例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色(同时回忆往事)，最终把故事的落脚点放在“家人的感情”“亲情”“生活的乐趣”
113、“与妈妈一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题;总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多;再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度;高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断;说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。【点睛】文章思
114、路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式: 虚 拟 语 气 和 with 复 合 结 构 Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. what引导的主语从句和which引导的非限制性定语从句But what impressed me most was that tent, which was forgotten deliberately b
115、y Mom.高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。5答案Paragraph 1: We were worrying about what could be done. But after waiting in vain for a considerable time, Mom and I decided to walk back the road to the nursing home and seek help. God knows how far we had driven! When we arrived, the receptionist was s
116、urprised, but warmly helped us contact the garage. There, the old men who had received the flowers were excited to meet us, talking about how great that day was. It amazed me what random actions of kindness could mean to the people who received it. While we were laughing and talking merrily, the gar
117、age got our car repaired.Paragraph 2: As we drone along, a flower shop came into sight on the road. I paced quickly into the flower shop, where a bunch of flowers glowing red in full bloom caught my eye. Having witnessed the effect of kindness, I decided to send Mom the sweet flowers. Soon, the heav
118、enly scent filled the car again. Mom tried to conceal her excitement, but the glittering tears failed her. Through this trip, I discovered that, despite my occasional anger towards her, I actually felt proud of her. This was the trip of my life.6答案Paragraph 1:Last year I saw Mrs. Lee alone in the ho
119、spital with a gift for me. Mrs. Lee looked pale. She told me Mr. Lee died from another heart attack two days ago. But he had never forgot our appointment. He prepared the last gift days ago. They lived with a grateful heart and had a meaningful life for as long as 13 years. The appointment is a remi
120、nder of the fortune they got from me and the God.Paragraph 2:I carefully opened the package and found a crystal bell inside with the word “Friendship” engraved on it. Now, my family, my friends and I ring that bell on every Christmas Eve at exactly 9 pm and offer our best wishes to the man who we wont forget. The bell always reminds us of being helpful to others and thankful to people who have helped me.
