1、热考话题8关爱动物2023浙江1月I was invited to a cookout on an old friends farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention， so I entered it. It was a hummingbird（蜂鸟）， desperately
2、 trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs（蛛网） and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.With the bird in my cupped hand， I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth in
3、to the hole and took her outside， closing the door securely behind me.When I opened my hand， the bird did not fly away； she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still， she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling aga
4、inst the window too long and was too tired？ Or too thirsty？As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle， she began to move. I stopped， and she soon took wing but did not immediately fly away. Hovering（悬停）， she approached within six inches of my face. For a
5、very long moment， this tiny creature looked into my eyes， turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.During the cookout， I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing， my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by
6、the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes， then let out a squeaking call and was gone. For a moment， all were speechless. Then someone said， She must have come to say go
7、od-bye.A few weeks later， I went to the farm again.I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.人物主要角色I：从文中的描述With the bird in my cupped hand stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings可知，我善良、细心、关爱动物，为续写第一段我重回旧地，想念蜂鸟，想知道它是否安好，埋下了伏笔
8、。主要角色a hummingbird：从文中的描述ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up sat looking at me with her bright eyes Hovering（悬停）， she approached within six inches of my face She must have come to say good-bye表明蜂鸟相信人类，亲近我，心怀感恩，为续写第二段蜂鸟的再次出现做好了铺垫。情节及情感线我去朋友农场野餐，发现一只被困的蜂鸟（好奇它是怎么被困的）我把它解救出来，它却没有飞走（疑惑它是否累了或者
9、渴了）我告诉朋友蜂鸟事件（担心再有蜂鸟受困）我离开之际，蜂鸟前来相送（惊讶又感动）主题原文讲述了我在朋友的农场外意外救下一只被困的蜂鸟，在我要离开农场时，这只蜂鸟又来到了我的面前，似乎在和我告别。再通过续写两段的提示语可知，文章展现的是关爱动物、人与动物和谐共处的主题。续写第一段衔接原文最后一段，蜂鸟深情相送，再衔接本段首句，几周后我重访农场，应该是希望再次见到蜂鸟。续写的情节发展可以是：漫步黑莓小路（呼应前文）想起蜂鸟（主要角色再现）很想再见那只可爱的小鸟（情感流露）与朋友烧烤、谈心直到日落我该离开了（衔接下文）。续写第二段衔接本段续写提示语我正要离开时，蜂鸟出现了可知，该段主要讲述我和蜂鸟
10、的和谐互动。续写的情节发展可以是：蜂鸟向我飞来（情景复现）我的反应我的感受人与动物应该和谐共处（主题升华）。1.I remembered the hummingbird.将句子改写为无灵主语句，使表达更为生动。Memories of the hummingbird occurred to me.为句补充时间状语从句，呼应原文我第一次发现蜂鸟时的场景，使上下文衔接更紧密、更流畅。Memories of the hummingbird occurred to me when I walked past the milking house.2.We roasted meat， chatted and
11、 laughed.用形象的气味描写和with复合结构改写句子，使表达更生动形象。With the smell of roasting meat floating in the air， we chatted and laughed.为句中的畅聊和欢笑补充情感副词、地点状语以及时间状语从句，使表达更加具有画面感。With the smell of roasting meat floating in the air， we chatted and laughed merrily around the picnic table till the sun set.3.She flew to me.用动
12、词dive， hover， stop将蜂鸟朝我飞来的动作细化，使表达更加准确、生动。She dived towards me，hovered before my face and then stopped on my left shoulder.为句蜂鸟俯冲和盘旋时的动作补充它当时的神态描写，体现蜂鸟看到我时的兴奋和喜悦。She dived towards me， hovered before my face looking at me with her bright eyes， and then stopped on my left shoulder.Afewweekslater，Iwent
13、tothefarmagain. Having parked the car， I wandered on the blackberry-lined path again. Memories of the hummingbird occurred to me（我想起） when I walked past the milking house. Was she all right？ How I wish I could see her again！ I murmured to myself with a sense of loss（失落感）. I was lost in the memories（
14、沉浸在回忆中） when my friends interrupted me， inviting me to the cookout. With the smell of roasting meat floating in the air（空气中飘着烤肉的味道）， we chatted and laughed merrily around the picnic table till the sun set. The evening glow spreading across the farm（晚霞洒满整个农场）， it was time for us to say goodbye， so we
15、 went to the parking lot together.Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared. With a squeaking call， she dived towards me， hovered before my face（向我俯冲下来，在我面前盘旋） looking at me with her bright eyes， and then stopped on my left shoulder. I patted her on the back which was covered by colorful feathe
16、rs. And I took out my water bottle， trying to give her some water. Content and joyful（满足又快乐）， she flew about 2 meters above the ground， turning her head from side to side as if expressing her gratitude for saving her life to me again. At that moment， I felt a mixture of happiness and excitement welling up in my heart， tears rolling down my cheeks（幸福和激动一起涌上我的心头，泪水顺着我的脸颊滚落）. The sinking sun cast a warm glow over（落日温暖的光照射在上） me and the bird， witnessing the wonderful connection between humans and animals.
