1、读后续写课件家庭亲情+惊讶篇阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。2021新高考1卷A MOTHERS DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mothers Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast an
2、d chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.Read for who,when,where,what and problemswho(characters)whenwherewhatproblemsmaking breakfast for mother Jenna and Jeff(twins)，mother,fatherat 6 a.m on Mothers Day in the ki
3、tchenthe porridge boiled over,bread turned black,Jeffs hand got burnedthe kitchen was in a messRead for themeThe twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mothers DayHow pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.The twins
4、carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as wellgratitude to mothers hard workHousework should be learned and masteredclimaxplot mountainRead for plots and emotionsTip 1 利用plot mountian，根据原文主要人
5、物梳理原文情节发展线和情感发展线the twins planned to make breakfastexcitedthe twins thought they knew how to makeconfidentThe plan began wellThe bread got burnt The porridge boiled overthe second bread turned blackJeffs hand got burnedfinepanickeddisappointed,upset,discouragedendingRead for language 注意观察动作细节描写The b
6、ig day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the
7、 bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in th
8、e other slice of bread.This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.注意观察情感和场景细节描写Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas qui
9、ckly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeffs hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pa
10、n had turned black as well.利用间接引语描写人物对话简单直白利用形容词、副词、动词表达人物情感极具画面感的描写：有动作、声音（粥溢出的声音、Jeff手被烫疼的叫声、味道（糊了）Read the given sentences 推测续写情节As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father appeared.父亲的出现使双胞胎面临的尴尬局面出现转机，他会做什么？What would their father do?Would their father be willing to help them
11、 out?How did the twins feel?Result-who made the breakfast at last?The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.ProblemsSolutionThe kitchen was in a messthe porriage boiled over not good at cooking the bread got burntclean up make them again(father or the twins helped by their fa
12、ther)began to learn under their fathers guidance The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.What did the twins say?How did their mother react and feel?What did their father do and say?What did the twins do?What did the twins realize from the experience?双胞胎向妈妈献上母亲节惊喜的时刻到了罗列续写要点
13、续写第一段 plotemotions父亲了解了情况父亲建议双胞胎打扫厨房父亲帮助做早餐或父亲指导双胞胎做好早餐双胞胎的反应双胞胎布置早餐托盘走出厨房disappointed cheered up 续写第二段 plotemotions双胞胎祝母亲节日快乐母亲看到早餐后很惊喜母亲吃了早餐母亲赞扬了双胞胎 surprised，movedjoyful、proud捕捉和对应原文续写点特定细节和物品原文主题原文标题、首段和结尾续写续写捕捉续写点A MOTHERS DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the
14、 surprise they were planning for Mothers Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.标题的照应：续写第二段添加细节
15、描写妈妈见到早餐后的惊喜特定物品的照应：French toast and chicken porridge 二段描写 孩子们将吐司和鸡肉粥端给妈妈二段可描写妈妈看到早餐端到床前时很快乐，又为孩子能做早餐而为孩子们骄傲The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it
16、 to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The
17、pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.特定物品的照应：rice,egg,milk,fire,bread一段添加细节描写孩子们和父亲利用鸡蛋、牛奶等再次做早餐与特定物品的衔接与特定情节的衔接Then Jeff noticed steam shooting o
18、ut of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But
19、Jeffs hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.一段添加细节描写父亲让双胞胎打扫厨房（解决厨房一团糟的问题）二段添加细节描写妈妈看到Jeff的被烫伤的手指，心疼感动的情节情感细节描写：高兴、激动、惊喜，吃惊、感动、骄傲动作细节描写：添加人物肢体
20、动作适当的对话细节描写：父亲交代双胞胎打扫的话可利用间接引语场景细节描写：父亲和双胞胎在厨房忙碌的场景母亲享受早餐的场景添加细节描写动作+语言细节描写1.看到他们失望的表情，他建议他们把厨房打扫干净，而他帮他们给妈妈做早餐。He _,and advised them to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother._,he advised them to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother.（非谓语动词
21、做状语）saw their disappointed facesSeeing their disappointed faces2.双胞胎准备好早餐托盘，加上一张他们做的漂亮的卡片，走出厨房。The twins prepared the breakfast tray,added a beautiful card they had made,and _.(三连动词构成动作链）stepped out of the kitchen神态情感细节描写3.当他们的母亲看到眼前美味而完美的早餐时，她的脸上闪过一丝惊喜。When their mother saw the delicious and perfec
22、t breakfast in front of her,_.(无灵主语句）4.空气中弥漫着诱人的早餐香味，她的目光落到了早餐托盘上。An inviting smell of breakfast filled the air,and her eyes landed on the breakfast tray.（无灵主语句）_,her eyes landed on the breakfast tray.(独立主格结构）a spark of surprise flashed across her faceAn inviting smell of breakfast filling the air5.
23、她惊喜极了，于是兴奋地摇醒正在假装睡觉的父亲。The surprise was so sweet that she excitedly shook Father,who was pretending to be asleep.（so.that.结果状语从句）_,who was pretending to be asleep.(倒装句）6.他看到早餐时装出惊讶的样子。He faked _ when he saw the breakfast.So sweet was the surprise that she excitedly shook Fatherastonishment满分结尾句活动场景9
24、.詹娜与她父亲目光相遇，他们偷偷地互相眨了眨眼。Jenna caught her fathers eyes and they each other secretly.10.得知事情经过后，她立刻站起来看了看男孩的手，感动的泪水滑下脸颊。“谢谢你，亲爱的!”妈妈说。After learning about what happened,she rose quickly to gaze at the boys hand with.Thank you,my honey!“said the mother.winked atmoved tears rolling down her cheeks与段首句衔接
25、照应首段给母亲准备breakfast in bed 的细节，衔接二段首句中的关键信息carried their breakfast与特定细节的照应照应原文首段双胞胎计划给妈妈做吐司和鸡肉粥的细节。细节的照应照应原文厨房粥溢出，面包糊了，厨房一团糟的细节细节的照应与首段衔接照应标题中的Mothers Day 细节的照应与标题的衔接与标题中surprise的照应衔接与一段中细节breakfast tray的照应衔接与一段细节的衔接对父亲眼神、动作、情感的描写，突出一个成全了孩子们准备母亲节惊喜的计划，体现一家人之间的爱1.多描写，少说话。过多对话会显得文章零碎、啰嗦，并限制细节描写的空间。加了冒号引号让阅卷老师看着眼花缭乱，影响得分档次。2.不捏造人物。原文给了你哪几个人物，最好就用哪几个人物。3.高级词汇并非越多越好，句子也并非越复杂越好。4.根据生活常识或社会经验丰富续写的细节，不可闹出不合常理的笑话
