1、年级：高三版本：北师大版课题：Unit 24 Communication Workshop Writing 姓名：张莉职称：中小学二级单位：三门峡市灵宝市实验高级中学WelcomeWriting:How Can We Write A Beautiful Composition?Objectives To attach great importance to the handwriting;To learn some skills to beautify our essays;To write a beautiful composition.书写潦草、字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息，得分0Wor
2、se!卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得分8Neat!卷面整洁;语言错误少;层次不明显;得分14beautiful handwriting衡水写作堪称天下第一，咱们来欣赏一下What makes a good composition?A good compositionContent structurelanguagebeautiful handwritingBeautiful content:All the details should be stated and everything should be to the point.(内容要完整)What is a good co
3、mposition？切题Beautiful structure:*Good beginning and ending (好的开头结尾)*Well organized and smoothly developed(结构合理,行文流畅)What is a good composition？Beautiful language:*No Chinglish(避免中文式英文)*No Grammatical mistakes(没有语法错误)*With exactly used words and relatively changed sentence patterns(词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化)Wh
4、at is a good composition？1.Use advanced words3.Use proper linking words2.Adopt a variety of sentence patterns使用较丰富的句式使用恰当的连接词skillsHow to write a good composition？How to beautify our essay？使用较高级的词汇1、phrases priority词组优先原则2、avoid repeating避免重复原则3、the new,advanced and long phrases priority 后、高、长原则后学到、
5、较高级、较长词汇。How to use advanced words?skill 1principles1、词组优先原则原文A new railway is being built in my hometown.修正A new railway is under construction in my hometown.2、避免重复原则原文I like reading while my brother likeswatching television.修正I like reading while my brother enjoyswatching television.three principl
6、esphrases priorityavoid repeating3、后高长原则后学到、较高级、较长词汇。the new,advanced and long phrases priority 原 词替换词be important be of great importancevery extremely/unbelievablypay attention to attach great importance tohappy delighted/be wild with joy more and more an increasing number ofthree principles1.感叹句 e
7、.g.How happy I was when I received your letter!2.强调句 e.g.It was this young boy that helped the old lady.Adopt a variety of sentence patterns.skill 23.倒装句e.g.Only in this way can you solve this problem.4.省略句e.g.Come to me if necessary.5.with短语e.g.I saw a young lady walking slowly in the street with a
8、 handbag in her hand.Adopt a variety of sentence patterns.skill 26、定语从句 e.g.In my opinion,cyber cafes should be a place _ we can find much useful information.Lets come to the main teaching building,at the back of_stands the school library.7、各种名词性从句 e.g.Thats _ I should do.We should do a favour to _n
9、eeds help at present.Adopt a variety of sentence patternswherewhichwhoever whatskill 28、各种状语从句 e.g.Time passed quickly before we knew it.So long as we work harder at our lessons,well catch up sooner or later.Do call me in advance so that I can pick you up at the airport.skill 2Adopt a variety of sen
10、tence patterns.1.表示递进;在同一话题上补充内容另外，还有：what is more;besides;also;moreover;in addition(to)2.表示转折关系但是，然而，相反：but;however;yet;instead;on the other hand;on the contraryUse proper linking words.skill 33.表示因果关系因为，因此，所以:since;as;because(of);so;thus;therefore;as a result4.表示条件关系如果，只要:if;on condition(that);as
11、long as;除非:unless 否则:or elseUse proper linking words.skill 35.表示时间关系当 的时候:when;while在之后:after;在之前:before;直到:until一就:as soon as后来，然后:later;afterwards;不久:soon近来:lately;recently;自从:since;从那时起:from then onUse proper linking words.skill 36.表示特定的顺序关系首先，最主要的:above all其次:secondly 然后:then;next最后:finally;in t
12、he end7.换一种方法表述换句话说:in other words;that is to say;Use proper linking words.skill 38.进行举例说明例如，比如:for instance;for example;like;such as9.用于陈述事实实际上:in fact;actually;as a matter of fact说实话:to tell you the truthUse proper linking words.skill 310.对一个话题进行总结总而言之，总的来说:on the whole;in short;all in all;in gene
13、ral;in a word11.其它常用到的副词Therefore;otherwise;finally;furthermore;Thus;namely;although;afterwards;personally;Use proper linking words.skill 3最后两个不容忽视的“小”问题就是：一、正确使用标点符号关于标点符号的使用，我省高考评卷的评分细则中有以下表述：“标点符号错误影响到文章的理解应以重要语法错误处理(每个扣1分)，其它的(标点符号)错误每个扣0.5分。”二、书写问题虽然没有明确规定扣分的标准，但书写的好坏直接影响评卷老师的准确度。往往吃亏的是考生。学会使用复
14、合句和非谓语动词你来试试现象学生作文中出现很多错别字原因1.上网聊天时经常使用网络语言。2.每天有很多作业做，没有记住生字。参考词汇：错别字:wrongly-written characters网络语言：web language要求：1、用两句话表达表格内容2、两句话要有连贯性步骤1：信息分组2：分解成最基本的句子单位3：简译关键结构4：整合信息（翻译成文）第一句（两个信息点）：1、学生作文中出现很多错别字2、（他们）上网聊天时经常使用网络语言。There are many wrongly-written characters in students compositions.The reas
15、on why there are many wrongly-written characters in students composition is that they often use web languages when chatting on line.合并句子：They often use web languages when chatting on line.1.They have so much homework to do every day that they fail to memorize the new characters.第二句:1.每天有很多作业做2.没有记住生
16、字。They have much homework to do every day.2.With so much homework to do,they fail to memorize the new characters.3.Because they have so much homework to do,they fail to memorize the new characters.合并句子：They fail to memorize the new characters.连接两句话（连贯性）：The reason why there are many wrongly-written
17、characters in students composition is that they often use web languages when chatting on line.Moreover,they have so much homework to do every day that they fail to memorize the new characters.1、一个乞丐在路边讨钱(ask for money)。李先生匆忙赶路上班，没有注意到那个乞丐。2、乞丐很生气，伸出(stick out)拐杖，差点把李先生绊倒了(trip over)。3、李先生意识到他是个残疾人，便
18、在口袋里找钱给他。4、李先生拿出了一张百元钞票(a 100-yuan note)。突然一阵风把钞票吹到了空中。5、乞丐迅速跳起来去追那张钞票。李先生站在那里，惊得合不拢嘴。实战演练实战演练：以下是你根据图画内容和题目要求，经过观察、整理排列成的五个信息块，请分别用一个句子表达出来，并组成一篇连贯性的短文。beggar(1)一个乞丐在路边讨钱(ask for money)。李先生匆忙赶路上班，没有注意到那个乞丐。步骤：二、分解信息（基本句子单位）：李先生匆忙赶路上班；没有注意到一个乞丐；那个乞丐在路边讨钱。三、简译：go to work in a hurry fail to notice was
19、 asking for money on the roadside.go to work in a hurry fail to notice was asking for money on the roadside.四、整合信息(1)One day,Mr.Li went to work in such a hurry thathe failed to notice a beggar who was asking for money on the roadside.(2)乞丐很生气，伸出(stick out)拐杖，差点把李先生绊倒了(trip over)。步骤二：分解信息乞丐很生气；伸出拐杖；把
20、李先生绊倒了。步骤三：简译 got angry stuck out his walking stick tripped Mr.Li over步骤三：整合信息(2)As a result,the beggar got angry and stuck out his walking stick,which almost tripped Mr.Li over.(3)李先生意识到他是个残疾人，便在口袋里找钱给他。(3)Realizing the beggar was disabled,Mr.Li began to search for some money in his pocket to give
21、him.(4)李先生拿出了一张百元钞票(a 100-yuan note),突然一阵风把钞票吹到了空中。(4)When he took out a 100-yuan note,it was suddenly blown into the air by the wind.(5)乞丐迅速跳起来去追那张钞票。李先生站在那里，惊得合不拢嘴。(5)Seeing this,the beggar jumped quickly to run after the note,leaving Mr.Li standing there with his mouth open,surprised.(1)One day,M
22、r.Li went to work in such a hurry that he failed to notice a beggar who was asking for money on the roadside.(2)As a result,the beggar got angry and stuck out his walking stick,which almost tripped Mr.Li over.(3)Realizing the beggar was disabled,Mr.Li began to search for some money in his pocket to
23、give him.(4)When he took out a 100-yuan note,it was suddenly blown into the air by the wind.(5)Seeing this,the beggar jumped quickly to run after the note,leaving Mr.Li standing there with his mouth open,surprised.目前，许多学校对学生采取封闭式管理，学生对此看法不一。请根据下表所提供的信息，写一篇英语短文，谈谈自己的看法。有的同学认为有的同学认为学校限制我们的自由；学生和社会接触少；
24、学生的兴趣和爱好不能得到充分的发展。因此 学校是学习知识的地方：学生应该安心在学校里学习；学生缺乏自觉性，离开了老师，可能会 你的看法：注意：1.字数120左右;不要逐字翻译。2.短文开头已给出，不计人总词数。Nowadays a lot of schools keep their students in school all day longHomeworkPlease learn toYour compositionafter finishing it.书面表达评价表项目自评 1.书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划?2.将文章分段了吗?分成了几段?3.有单词拼写错误吗?几个?4.有时态错误吗?误用了哪种时态?5.注意主谓一致了吗?6.有没有语态的错误?7.有没有使用关联词?使用得当吗?8.有没有词性的错误?哪一种?9.简单句表达正确吗?10.是否注意使用了复杂的句子结构?11.表达方式是否多样化?注意长短句搭配了吗?12.有没有用好词好句?用了哪些?Thank you
