1、第22讲 书面表达二2012新题赏析题一：最近几年越来越多的大学生加入到打工的队伍，请根据下面最近的一次调查内容写一篇报道，并阐明你对此现象的看法。1. 比例：25%（暑假72%）2. 工作：家教、服务员、销售员等3. 原因：争取经济独立（学费、日常开支）注意：1. 词数100左右 2. 参考词汇：家教 tutor 学费 tuition 3. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。_题二：来自你市的中学生小记者最近进行了一次采访活动。请根据下面表格中的内容为你校的英语园地写一篇报道。时 间2007年1月15日地 点经济开发区采访人40名中学小记者被采访人开发区主任王庆海采访内容1. 过去一年的成绩2
2、. 如何吸引投资3. 三年后开发区的前景其他1. 除了笔、本，还用了数码相机、录音笔等现代设备2. 对一流的设计、漂亮的绿化、现代的建筑留下了深刻的印象注意：1.词数：100左右。 2. 参考词汇：经济开发区the Economic Development Zone; 小记者teenage reporter; 投资 investment; 数码 digital; 录音笔 recording pen_ 题三：根据下面的漫画，联系生活实际，写一篇120150词左右的英语短文。_题四：下图反映的是当前一些学生在学习上的做法。请你根据对下面这幅漫画的理解用英语写一篇短文，描述一下这种做法并发表你的看法
3、。注意: 1. 词数150左右。开头已经写，不计入总词数。2. 要适当发挥想象，不要做简单的描述。3. 作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。 4. 参考词汇：缸vat；漏出来leak out；漏洞 loopholeIn the picture, four people are trying to fill a vat with water. Two men are carrying water while two others are pouring water into the vat_题五：目前，学校存在少数学生考试作弊现象。某英文杂志社拟对此现象向中学生征文，标题是“My Opinio
4、n on Cheating in Examinations”。请根据下列提示用英语写一篇征文稿。内容要点如下：主要原因考试偏多、偏难不用功、懒惰取悦父母、老师个人看法作弊不对，违反校规要诚实，努力学习（其他看法）注意：1. 短文必须包括所有内容要点，可适当发挥； 2. 短文标题与开头已为你写好，不计入总词数； 3. 词数：100左右。 4. 参考词汇：作弊 cheat（v.）My Opinion on Cheating in ExaminationsIt is known to us all that some students cheat in examinations at school.
5、_题六： 某校附近拟建一座化工厂。请你该校学生的名义，写一篇短文，陈述反对兴建化工厂的理由。短文中要包括以下几点：（1）不仅你本人、大部分同学都表示反对兴建；（2）尽管该厂可为本市赚不少钱，但危害大于好处；（3）严重污染饮用水，防范措施不充分；（4）造成空气污染；（5）侵占学生们游戏、运动的场所。注意：还可补充若干理由，不要仅仅翻译各点。词数：120-150左右。_题七：假如你叫李华，是某中学学生。最近你校在为一批来自英国的学生征寻住宿家庭，你有意申请。请根据下表提供的信息用英语给校长写封信，说明你申请的理由。申请理由住房条件宽敞、整洁，环境优美语言优势擅长英语，父母是英语教授，不会有交流困难
6、接待经验上个月刚刚接待过两名美国学生参观游览父亲可驾车陪同参观附近的名胜其 他(内容由考生自己添加)注意：1. 文章必须包括所有要点。2. 词数：100-120。信的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数。Dear sir,Im writing to request a valuable chance to be one of the host families for the British students._题八：高三学生面临着沉重的学习压力，很多学生利用课间十分钟的休息时间学习,实际上没有什么效果。假如你是新华中学高三年级的学生李越，就此现象给中学生英语报写封信，发表自己的看法。信的内容须包括以
7、下要点： 1. 十分钟的课间休息很有必要（说明理由）； 2. 你是怎样利用这十分钟的。 注意：1、词数100-200； 2、信的开头已经给出（不计入总数）。Dear Editor, Im a Senior 3 student from Xinhua Middle School_ _题九：假定你是李华，从小喜爱大熊猫，一直通过有关网站关注三年前在美国圣迭哥动物园出生的大熊猫“苏琳”和她的母亲“白云”。现在苏琳即将三岁。请根据以下要点给动物园工作人员写一封信：1. 自我介绍；2. 祝贺苏琳生日；3. 感谢工作人员；4. 索取苏琳三岁生日照。注意：1. 词数100左右； 2. 可以适当增加细节，以使
8、行文连贯； 3. 开头语已为你写好。Dear Sir/Madam, Greeting from China! _ Yours truly, Li Hua题十：假设你是李华，曾在美国学习半年，现已回国。你想联系你的美国老师Mr. Smith,但没有其联系方式。请根据以下要点给你的美国同学Tom 写一封信： 1. 感谢Tom对你英语学习的帮助； 2. 询问Mr, smith 的近况并索要其联系方式；3. 邀请Tom在春节期间来中国感受中国文化。 注意：1. 词数120-150； 2. 可适当增加细节。 _题十一：假设你叫张林。你的英国朋友Andrew下月要来你校学些两个月。他来信请你对他上学期间的
9、交通方式提出建议。现在，请你用英语回一封信，按以下各点答复。1.建议骑自行车上学；2.自行车是学生常用交通工具；3.骑自行车的一些好处；4.骑自行车需注意的问题。注意：1. 词数100左右，信的开头和结束语已为你写好（不计入总词数）2. 可根据内容要点适当增加细节，使行文连贯。Dear Andrew, Very happy to hear from you and youre welcome to study in our school for the next two months. _Hopefully, what Ive mentioned above could be helpful
10、and wish you a fun time in our school. Yours sincerely, Zhang Lin题十二： 在紧张的高三备考阶段，英语老师为了提高复习效率，广泛征求学生意见。假如你叫张华，请根据一下提示，给英语老师写封信，表达你们的需求和建议。适当放慢脚步，留出思考试卷反复训练重复、易错知识点指导方法减少作业量以保证质量给予更多鼓励注意：1. 根据以上内容写一篇短文，不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯。2. 要准确使用语法和词汇；使用一定的句型、词汇，清楚、连贯地表达自己的意见；3. 词数：100个左右。开头已给出，不计词数。Dear Mr. WangWe
11、re so pleased that you are willing to share our views. _ Yours第22讲 书面表达二2012新题赏析主讲教师：林斌 北京八十中学英语高级教师题一：According to a recent survey, about 25 percent of college students have a part-time job. During the summer vacation, this figure will increase to 72 percent. College students are working as tutors,
12、 waiters or salesmen, etc.Why do college students want part-time jobs? The main reason is that they hope to be economically independent. If so, they can buy whatever they need in daily life. And meanwhile, they may help cover their increasing college tuition.I think that it is good for college stude
13、nts to do part-time jobs. By doing part-time jobs, they can gain some society experience and broaden their outlook. Whats more, part-time jobs can provide them with a valuable opportunity to know the outside world. 点评：本篇新闻报道条理清晰、结构合理：作者首先对“最近几年越来越多的大学生加入到打工的队伍”的现象的调查进行报道，然后阐明自己对这一现象的看法；此外，作者使用了一些高级词
14、语、复合句和过渡词，如 According to, Whats more, If so, I think that it is good for college students to do part-time jobs.等，这无疑增强了文章的表达力及流畅性。题二：Forty teenage reporters from different middle schools in our city paid a visit to the Economic Development Zone and had an interview with Wang Qinghai, head of the Zon
15、e, on September 15 th, 2010.At the interview, the reporters asked Mr Wang about what achievements they made last year, how they were to attract more investment and how the zone would be developing over the next three years. Mr Wang gave them satisfactory answers.They used modern equipment, such as d
16、igital cameras and recording pens besides pens and note books at the interview. They were deeply impressed by the first class design of the zone, as well as beautiful trees and grass and modern buildings there.点评：本文条理清晰、结构合理、符合新闻报道的特点;此外，作者还使用了pay a visit to, have an interview with, such as, as well
17、 as等这样一些精彩的短语和三个并列的宾语从句Mr Wang about what achievements they made last year, how they were to attract more investment and how the zone would be developing over the next three years”，这就增强了文章的表达力。题三：In the cartoon，the man enjoys being clever and wishes to do a great job. However，regretfully，he is firml
18、y fastened to his original position by the nature of laziness and certainly achieves nothing. In fact, you Can see many such examples in life. Just as the old saying goes, diligence leads to success while laziness results in failure. Every task requires hard work, from learning English to building a
19、 house. Some of my classmates are definitely clever, and they have a strong desire to go to a famous university, but unfortunately, they ate wasting time talking or playing. And consequently, they end in failure. Therefore, in my opinion, diligence plays a very important role in life. Only by workin
20、g hard and practicing a lot, are we able to overcome difficulties and achieve our goals. No one can succeed just by thinking without any actions. 点评：本文结构合理、脉络清晰：作者首先描述图画中的内容，然后解释自己对这幅画的理解，把图片和实际结合起来，谈论图片的深层意义；作者使用了状语从句、并列句、倒装句、高级的词汇短语和过渡词。题四：In the picture, four people are trying to fill a vat with
21、water. Two men are carrying water while two others are pouring water into the vat. However, with so many loopholes at the bottom of the vat, theyll never store any water, because no one tries to fill the holes.It reminds me of the problems in our studies. While studying, we always go to great length
22、s to read more books, and to do more exercises. However, after we finish the exercises, we seldom pay attention to the mistakes weve made, nor do we try to correct and avoid them. Therefore, a “hole” is left. Day by day, the “holes”, or rather the shortages, get more and more. No matter how many boo
23、ks weve read, we have never accumulated any knowledge. They have leaked out because of the hole.So thats why we say learning is a way to accumulate. We should pay attention to the mistakes weve made and the holes we have in our studies as well as the new knowledge. Only in that way can we accumulate
24、 much more knowledge, which can be put to use in the future. 点评：本文结构合理、脉络清晰：作者首先描述图画中的内容，然后解释自己对这幅画的理解，把图片和学生的学习实际结合起来，谈论图片的深层意义；作者使用了定语从句、状语从句、省略、高级的词汇短语和过渡词。题五：My Opinion on Cheating in ExaminationsIt is known to us all that some students cheat in examinations at school.As students, we often take
25、examinations at school, but sometimes we have too many examinations which are too difficult for us. On the other hand, some of us are lazy and dont work hard at their lessons. So when taking examinations, they sometimes cheat in order to get better results to please their parents and teachers.In my
26、opinion, it is wrong to cheat in examinations because it breaks the rules of schools, we students should be honest and try to get good results by studying hard instead of cheating in examinations. Whats more, we should improve our study methods and get well prepared for examinations.点评：本篇议论文条理清晰，结构合
27、理：作者首先提出一些学生在考试中作弊这种现象，接着分析了产生这种现象的原因，最后阐明了自己观点；此外，作者使用了一些精彩的词语、复合句以及过渡词，如get well prepared for, In my opinion, Whats more, it is wrong to cheat in examinations because it breaks the rules of schools, we students should be honest and try to get good results by studying hard instead of cheating in ex
28、aminations等，这样就增强了文章的表达力和流畅性。题六：Most students of our school, including me, are against the construction of a chemical works near our school.Although the works will make a lot of money for our city, we do think it will do us more harm than good. The drinking water will be badly polluted. Of course, t
29、hey have promised to do something to prevent the water from being polluted, however, it is far from enough. On the other hand, the air over the city will be polluted too. We will never be able to breathe fresh air. How can we live here any longer? Last but not the least, the site of the works to be
30、built has been the only place where we students play games and have sports after school. Where would we go if it were occupied?点评：本文开篇量明观点，然后从几个角度加以分析，为典型的总分结构。Although, of course, however, on the other hand, last but not the least等过渡词的运用，有效地连接了上下文，使论证严格、结构紧凑。结尾的两个问句，感染力很强，增强了文章的论证力度。全文观点鲜明，条理清晰。题七：
31、Dear sir, Im writing to request a valuable chance to be one of the host families for the British students. We have a large and clean house, which lies in a beautiful area of the city. I m good at English and my parents axe both professors of English, so I m sure we won t have any difficulty communic
32、ating with English speakers. My father is an excellent driver and we will be very glad to show foreign students around some nearby places of interest in our own car. Last month we received two American students. We had a great time. Besides, my mother cooks well, so the students will be able to enjo
33、y delicious Chinese food. I would greatly appreciate it if I could have the chance to make friends with them. Looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua 点评：要点齐全，语句流畅，表达深刻，无语法错误；使用了定语从句、宾语从句、并列句；使用了一些高级词汇短语和过渡词。题八：Dear Editor, Im a Senior 3 student from Xinhua Middle School. As is known to all, sen
34、ior 3 students are suffering heavy pressure of study. As a result, many students are trying to spare every minute to study, even during the ten-minute break between classes. In my opinion, taking the ten-minute break between classes is definitely necessary, which makes us relaxed both physically and
35、 mentally. The ten-minute break is meant for us to relax and prepare for the next class. Only by doing so can we have more energy to study effectively in class. My ten-minute break is always pleasing as well as relaxing. Sometimes I do some simple exercises. Sometimes I have a free chat with my clas
36、smates or just take walk outside. Therefore, I always feel energetic and listen attentively in class. 点评：要点齐全，语句流畅，表达深刻，无语法错误；使用了定语从句、倒装句；使用了一些非谓语动词，高级词汇短语和过渡词。题九：Dear Sir/Madam,Greetings from China!Im Li Hua ,a student in Sichuan. Ive been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I
37、was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and Ive been watching her grow on your website. Now shes going to be three. Id like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healt
38、hy life in the US. By the way , could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance. Yours truly,Li Hua点评：要点齐全，语言简明，过渡自然，结构紧凑，行文流畅； 使用了状语从句， 定语从句、并列句；使用了非谓语动词、高级词语和过渡词。题十：Dear Tom, It has been half a year since we parted last time. Now Im getting on well with ev
39、erything and have been missing you all the time. Ive been missing the days in America when you helped me a lot with my English study. Thanks to your kind help, I have improved my English a lot. But to my regret, I have lost contact with my teacher Mr. Smith. Would you please tell me something about
40、him and tell me how to get in touch with him? In addition, it would be a great honor for me to invite you to my country during the Spring Festival when you will experience colorful Chinese culture. Im looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Hua点评：要点齐全，语言简明，过渡自然，结构紧凑，行文流畅；使用了状语从句、并列句；使用了非谓语动词、高级词语和过
41、渡词。题十一：Dear Andrew,Very happy to learn from you and youre welcome to study in our school for the next two months. As for the question about the transportation to and from school, Id like to recommend your riding a bicycle. Here are some reasons. Firstly, riding a bike to and from school is very comm
42、on among the students, for buying or repairing a bicycle doesnt cost a lot. Next, parking a bicycle is easy and convenient in our school, no matter who busy the traffic could be. Actually, bicycle-riding is also a practical way to do exercise and protect the environment. What you should do carefully
43、 is just to keep an appropriate speed while riding and lock it after youre off it. In this way, youll feel it simple and relaxing to ride a bicycle while youre here.(112 words)Hopefully, what Ive mentioned above could be helpful and wish you a fun time in our school. Yours sincerely, Zhang Lin点评：要点要
44、点；语言简明，过渡自然，结构紧凑，行文流畅；使用了状语从句、主语从句、并列句；使用了非谓语动词、高级词语和过渡词。题十二：Dear Mr. Wang,Were so pleased that you are willing to share our views. In the course of the general revision, what we need is solid foundation. As you know, we didnt learn well enough in the first two years, so please slow down and make su
45、re we have really mastered everything. Besides, we need a little more time to think for ourselves. As for those important points which also make us confused, would you please give us more practice in case we forget? Meanwhile, we need your instruction, for example, in how to write in natural English
46、. I still have another request: assign us less homework in order that we can do it mor e efficiently.By the way, we often feel frustrated, which has a very bad effect on our study. We would appreciate it if you would give us some encouragement from time to time.Yours点评：要点要点；语言简明，过渡自然，结构紧凑，行文流畅；使用了宾语从句、定语从句、状语从句、并列句；使用了非谓语动词、高级词语和过渡词。
