1、必修3Astronomy:the science of the starsUnit 4【写作任务】假设你是陈辉，近来感到很苦恼：你对到火星旅行很感兴趣，经常到网上查看最新的新闻和视频，并且和有相同爱好的人网聊，还经常到图书馆查阅相关资料，但是你的父母对此很不理解，以致你们近来相处不好。现在请你给你的美国好友Tom写一封信，表示希望得到他的建议和帮助。注意：1.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；2.词数：100左右；信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。Dear Tom,_Yours sincerely,Chen Hui一、审题：确定短文体裁、人称和时态该书面表达任务是给自己的美国好友写一封信，属于
2、应用文范畴；此处主要介绍自己当前遇到的问题，故人称以第一人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主。二、确定文章结构根据要点提示，此书面表达可分为三段。第一段：说明写信的目的求助；第二段：详细说明自己遇到的问题和苦恼；第三段：表示希望得到帮助和早日回复。【写作步骤】三、词语储备1.一个棘手的问题2.处理；解决3.对着迷；热衷于4.此外，而且5.在看来6.对有好处7.强烈反对8.浪费时间9.与相处10.盼望；期待 a tough problemdeal withbe crazy aboutin additionin ones opinionbe beneficial tobe strongly agains
3、ta waste of timeget along withlook forward to四、备用句型罗列1.Im writing to tell you about a tough problem.2.I dont know how to deal with it and need your help.3.Im crazy about traveling to Mars.4.I spend lots of time looking for the latest news and videos on the Internet.5.I often have a chat with some fr
4、iends who have the same interest on the Internet.6.My parents are strongly against it and they think that its a waste of time.7.I dont get along well with them.8.Can you offer me some suggestions?9.Im looking forward to your early reply.【学生习作】Dear Tom,Im writing to tell you about a tough problem.I d
5、ont know how to deal with it and need your help.As you know,Im crazy about traveling to Mars.So I spend lots of time looking for the latest news and videos on the Internet.And I often have a chat with some friends who have the same interest on the Internet.In addition,to find relevant something to r
6、ead,I often go to the library.In my opinion,this hobby is beneficial to me.However,my parents are strongly against it.They think that its a waste of time.Thus,I dont get along well with them.What shall I do?Can you offer me some suggestions?Im looking forward to your early reply.Yours sincerely,Chen
7、 Hui【名师点评】总评：该书信要点齐全，层次清晰，语气恰当，其中的拓展细节也合情合理。作者开门见山，首先表明了写信的目的，之后详细说明了自己遇到的问题和苦恼，最后表示希望得到对方的建议。但是文中存在个别用词错误和需要改进的地方。一、错误评析处应把relevant something改 somethingrelevant。something 为不定代词，其修饰语要后置。二、亮点展示1.第二段的第一句使用了as引导的非限制性定语从句。2.第二段的第四句使用了动词不定式作目的状语(to find)。3.最后一段的第一句使用了情态动词shall来征求对方的建议。4.衔接成分使用恰当，例如so,in addition,however,thus等。三、锦上添花处的划线部分为两个独立的句子，此处不妨合二为一，改为由who引导的非限制性定语从句However,my parents,who think that its a waste of time,are strongly against it则句子显得更上档次。
