1、2021高考英语读后续写深度解读(十)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Washington is home to lots of treesit is the Evergreen State, after alland lots of fireplaces and wood-burning stoves too. With these, you can keep yourself from the freezing cold weather. But what if you lived there and couldnt chop (砍) wood or could
2、nt afford to pay someone to do it? Luckily, Shane McDaniel and his twin sons, Harrison and Henry McDaniel, 21, are happy to lend an ax. The three men chop truckloads of woodthen donate it to those people who need it. “I want people who are burning cardboard because theyve got nothing,” Shane explain
3、ed to the press. “Or someone with no money who has a broken shoulder and cant cut wood.”The idea started as a father-son bonding project, he told the press. “I had to cut wood with my dad. He just loved doing it,” says Shane, 48, a divorced father of six. He wanted to pass along that feeling, so he
4、and the twins spent the whole summer of 2018 chopping wood. The result was a great wall of wood piled up around their house in Lake Stevens, 35 miles outside of Seattle. Technically, it was 40 cordsa cord measures four feet high, four feet wide, and eight feet deep. To buy that much would cost about
5、 $10,000.It was too much for the McDaniels to use themselves. When the weather turned colder and colder that November, Shane started thinking of others. He wanted to keep as many people warm as possible. So he posted on the Internet: “IF YOU ARE IN NEED OF FIREWOOD AND CANNOT AFFORD IT, PLEASE PM pe
6、rsonal message ME!.If you know someone who BURNS WOOD, and theyre looking at a cold house this holiday season, please help us help them. Please help me and my boys make sure NO ONE GOES COLD IN OUR HOOD.”续写要求:1. 所续写短文词数应为150左右;2. 至少使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词
7、语。Paragraph 1:The response was immediate. _Paragraph 2:However, not every receiver was as grateful. _【思路点拨】1. 文本细解读,确定续写结局本文是一篇记叙文,讲述了Shane McDaniel和他的双胞胎儿子乐于砍柴无偿奉献给社区居民过冬御寒的故事。Shane McDaniel父子利用2018年夏天砍了价值一万美元的木柴,到了十一月,天气越来越冷,他们自己御寒用不了这么多木柴,Shane McDaniel就想到无偿捐赠给那些需要的人们,并在互联网上发起倡议,让爱心人士都能帮忙援助。续写部分是
8、倡议后的反响,根据常识以及续写部分的段首句可知,不同的人群看待这件事的观点也不相同。2. 段首句解读,确定续写方向续写第一段首句写道“很快有了反响”,第二段首句写道“然而,并不是所有受赠者心怀感激”。由此可知,第一段应该着重讲述那些感恩的受赠者和称赞这种行为的人们,可以适当发挥想象,进行举例阐述。第二段开头的However笔锋一转,讲述一些不懂感恩的受赠者,但是基于文章的故事情节可知,要体现Shane McDaniel乐于奉献的高尚品格,就要写明负面舆论没有影响到他的乐善好施。3. 划线词解读,规划续写细节1)分类划线词人物Shane McDaniel, others事物wood-burnin
9、g stoves, wood动作donate, help, need感觉cold时间holiday媒介Internet2)构思具体细节第一段情节:很快有了反响有人愿意捐献(donate)熔炉(a wood-burning stoves)(取暖用具,前文有画线)有人愿意捐献木柴(wood)有人节假日(holiday)前受赠得益(可以展开想象,举例说明)不少人对此赞叹褒奖(承接下文)。第二段情节:然而有些受赠者并不感恩不感恩的心理(他们憎恨世界不公平、受赠是无可奈何等)写明主人公(Shane McDaniel)对此的态度,进一步体现主人公乐善好施(help)、施恩不图报的高尚品格。【范文欣赏】Pa
10、ragraph 1:The response was immediate. One man offered to donate a wood-burning stove. Others raced over to contribute more wood for the pile. A single mom and her four-year-old daughter, who relied on a wood-burning stove as their only source of heat, couldnt be more thankful to receive a truckload
11、of firewood from the McDaniels before the holidays. They were moved to tears, saying that to get that much wood was a relief and so much stress and anxiety was off their shoulders. Even people who didnt need the wood appreciated the action.Paragraph 2:However, not every receiver was as grateful. Som
12、e werent even friendly. They were mad at the world and mad that they had to ask for help. They just had no other option than freezing. But Shane McDaniel was OK with that. “I am just doing what I think is worth doing. Giving is the reward,” he said. “It has nothing to do with how well its received;
13、its about how much its needed.”亮点积累:1. 词汇:relief n. 安慰、轻松;grateful adj. 感谢的;reward n. 报答、酬谢2. 短语:offer to do 主动提出做;be off ones shoulders (重担、负担)卸下肩头be mad at 对生气3. 提分句式: It has nothing to do with how well its received; its about how much its needed.分析 It has nothing to do with. 与无关,句中两个how都引导宾语从句,分别
14、作介词with和about的宾语。译文 受赠后是否收效好(受赠人是否感恩)并不重要,重要的是他们究竟多么需要(捐赠活动的帮助)。自主练习阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Success is a greedy want. Its victories are pleasant, its defeats are disastrous. It is a small, seven letter word that can only truly be defined inside each one of us individually.The path to achieving
15、 it, in our minds, is clear, but its the invisible that test our will. Failure is its shadow, always following close behind.Second born to a poor family, my mother defined, “Food on the table and a roof over our heads” as success. School work never gave me the instant satisfaction that sports did. A
16、thletic achievement, fueled by my increasing popularity, placed me on top of a mountain surrounded by clouds.After graduation, I didnt know where I was going. Wherever it was, I am sure that I would be outstanding; I was attracted by Kevlar. In High School I had many opportunities to express my manh
17、ood. But I couldnt claim her as mine, although I admired her dearly. I could not get her out of my head.Uncle Sam was looking for a few good men and I was looking for him. Ranger (骑警) School was the most challenging thing I had ever done in my life and I was determined not to fail. When I graduated,
18、 my fuel tank of invincibility (无敌) was full.I was a successful Army Airborne Ranger.However, something was lacking in my life. After some deep soul searching, I found out it was her.I left the Army to find her, sweep her off her feet and carry her off into wonderland. She was living in Brooklyn. Wh
19、en we met, it was as if we both had found the missing pieces to our lives. After a short courtship, we fell in love, then we were married.For twenty-four years now we have lived together. We have two beautiful boys. I have worked for three Fortune 500 companies, and currently, run three businesses.
20、I feel a great sense of accomplishment. But the inspiration through it all has been her.Our personalities are so different, it is truly amazing weve been together this long. She is a water lily and Im a lion. Shes elegant and Im crude. She cries and I shout.续写要求: 1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右; 2. 至少使用 5 个以上短
21、文中标有下划线的关键词语; 3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好; 4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1:Sometimes, that feeling of being “superman” still overwhelms me. Paragraph 2: Today, if someone were to ask me if I consider myself a success, without hesitation Id say “yes.” 【范文欣赏】Paragraph 1:Sometimes, that feeling of b
22、eing “superman” still overwhelms me. During my last birthday, we were sitting in the sofa where I am determined to make this statement to her, “Honey, Im as trained as Im ever going to be.” She looked at me with those big, sparkling, brown eyes and simply replied, “Oh, you think so, do you?”I pulled
23、 my lips together and turned my head, realizing I was in no way ready to back up such a heavy statement and that I never would be.Paragraph 2:Today, if someone were to ask me if I consider myself a success, without hesitation Id say “yes”. But its not for my bank account or my homes, my boat or my cars, or my businesss, its because of the one success that has always made me want to do my very best.It is because of her and her unconditional love for me, that I am what I am and, to me, that amount of success is much more than I deserve.