1、The Day When Everything Went WrongPeriod 1In this lesson you will be able to1.Learn to polish by comparing two writings2.Write a story;3.Use linking wordsLead-in Do you love stories?What factors should be included in a story?Story WhoWhenWhere What Lead-in What will you write about when you see the
2、title A Day When Everything Went Wrong?Sample:tell what happened in the picturesLast Monday,my alarm clock didnt ring,so I got up one hour late.When I hurriedly ran to the bus stop,the bus had left.As a result,I was late for school.Write three or four sentences on one bad event that you have experie
3、nced,including who,when,where and what.Read Draft A of a students composition on the topic A Day When Everything Went Wrong.Question:How many events are mentioned in the story?Events in Draft A I Walked to school;I came last in the poetry reading competition;I spilled water on my pillow Write two or
4、 three events on the topic A Day When Everything Went Wrong.You can write about every bad thing you have experienced,such as losing something important,hurting your leg,being late for school,failing an exam Share your writing with your partner.What other factors should be included in a story?Story W
5、hoWhenWhere What Why How How to endHow you feel Why:Feelings:No school bus;not prepared the competitionTiresome;awkwardRead Draft A and find the other factors of the story Put why and feelings in your writings.Share your writing with your partner.Read Draft B and tell which one is better.What does t
6、he writer add in Draft B?In Draft B,the writer uses linking words and adds some details and specific information to attract the attention of the reader.Besides,the order of events is clearer and the language is more vivid.Order of events:A:1.Because the school bus did not 2.At school,Mr.fan 3.When I
7、 got into bed that night,I B:1.First,I had to wait 30 minutes for the school bus 2.The next problem happened when I arrived at school.3.The last problem of this terrible day happened when I got intoFirst,next,lastWhenVivid language:A:1.It was hot and tiresome.2.Mr.fan,the English teacher reminded me
8、 of the This surprised me 3.I came last in the competition.B:1.The day was hot and tiring.2.Mr.Fan,the English teacher,a large but friendly man,gave me a nasty surprise.He reminded me in his loud voice that 3.I was not surprised when I came last in the competition.Adjectives are used.Use linking wor
9、ds and adjectives in your writing,referring to information on page97.Linking words1.并列2.转折3.因果4.其他and,bothandbut,however,so,because when,suddenly,as soon as,unfortunately,sothat,first,in the end,as a result1.体裁：2.时态：3.人称：4.主题：记叙文体一般过去时第一人称描述过去个人经历 Write your story A Day When Everything Went Wrong,us
10、ing colourful language.(referring to Writing Help1 on P97)1、几天前 the other day;several days ago 2、使人感到意外 to ones surprise 3、就在这时 at that moment;at that time 4、两小时后 two hours later常用表达法aspectsYour evaluation 评价人contents Excellent Good Acceptableorder of eventsExcellent Good AcceptablelanguageExcellent Good AcceptablelinkingExcellent Good AcceptableEvaluation(评价）
