1、Section_(自修课)Writing_人物描写本单元的写作任务是描写人物。人物描写主要是介绍人物的外貌、生平、成就等。人物描写的体裁一般是记叙文,有时也以看图作文、表格、书信、新闻的形式出现。一、基本结构1开头(the beginning):先总体描写,即对该人物进行简要地介绍,如年龄、性别、出生地、家庭、身份、职业教育背景、外表、性格特点和特长爱好等。2主体(the main body):详细介绍所描述人物的特点及生平大事(成就),可以按照时间顺序或在事件中的主次地位进行描述。3结尾(conclusion):对此人的评价或感想。二、增分佳句1开头常用句式:. was one of the
2、 greatest . in the 20th century.He/She studied at . and graduated . is the one who impresses me most.2主体常用句式:. is such a learned/strongwilled person that we all admire/respect him/her.He/She devoted all his/her life to .3结尾常用句式:He/She was highly thought of .In my opinion .He/She will live in the hea
3、rts of . forever.题目要求请写一篇关于钱学森的介绍,要求包含下文中的所有内容。注意:词数100左右。钱学森自小就受到良好的家庭教育,长大后渴望献身于祖国的科学事业。大学毕业后,他赴美留学,获得航空博士学位,成为美国知名的火箭专家。新中国成立后,他急切地盼望回到祖国,但是受到美国当局的百般阻挠。经过他的斗争,终于回到了祖国,并一心投入到中国的科学事业中。他所从事的火箭、导弹研制获得巨大成功,被誉为中国的“航天之父”。参考词汇:航天aerospace航天学cosmonautics学位degree不屈不挠的unyielding导弹missile_第一步:审题构思很关键一、审题1确定体
4、裁:本文属于记叙文中的人物介绍;2确定人称:本文的主要人称应为第三人称;3确定时态:本文主要介绍其学习经历和取得的成就,故时态以一般过去时为主。二、构思第一部分:介绍钱学森的家庭背景及留美经历。第二部分:介绍钱学森的回国经历及取得成就。第二步:核心词汇想周全1bring_up培养,教育2have_a_desire_to_do_sth.渴望做某事3devote_oneself_to献身于4graduate_from毕业于5get_a_doctors_degree获得博士学位6care_about关心7prevent阻止8struggle斗争9in_terms_of就而言10deserve应得,值
5、得第三步:由词扩句雏形现1钱学森自小就受到良好的家庭教育。(主谓结构;现在完成时的被动语态)Qian_Xuesen_has_been_well_brought_up_since_his_childhood.2他长大后渴望献身于祖国的科学事业。(主谓宾结构;after 引导的时间状语从句)He_had_a_great_desire_to_devote_himself_to_the_science_cause_of_his_motherland_after_he_grew_up.3大学毕业后,他赴美留学,获得航空博士学位,成为美国知名的火箭专家。(并列谓语)After_graduating_fro
6、m_college,_he_went_to_study_in_America,_got_a_doctors_degree_for_cosmonautics,_and_became_a_great_rocket_expert_in_the_USA.4新中国成立后,他关心中国的发展。(after引导的时间状语从句)After_New_China_was_founded,_he_cared_about_the_development_of_China.5他急切地盼望回到祖国,但是受到美国当局的百般阻挠。(but连接的并列句) He_was_eager_to_return_home,_but_was_
7、prevented_by_the_American_government.6这件事使他很难过。(形容词作宾语补足语)This_made_him_upset.7经过他的斗争,他终于回到了祖国,并在中国一直从事科学事业。(并列谓语)Through_his_struggle,_he_finally_came_back_and_had_been_working_on_scientific_work_in_China.第四步:句式升级造亮点1用过去分词作状语连接句1和句2Well_brought_up_since_his_childhood,_Qian_Xuesen_had_a_great_desire
8、_to_devote_himself_to_the_science_cause_of_his_motherland_after_he_grew_up.2用which引导的非限制性定语从句连接句5和句6He_was_eager_to_return_home,_but_was_prevented_by_the_American_government,_which_made_him_upset.第五步:过渡衔接联成篇Well_brought_up_since_his_childhood,_Qian_Xuesen_had_a_great_desire_to_devote_himself_to_the_
9、science_cause_of_his_motherland_after_he_grew_up._After_graduating_from_college,_he_went_to_study_in_America,_got_a_doctors_degree_for_cosmonautics,_and_became_a_great_rocket_expert_in_the_USA.After_New_China_was_founded,_he_cared_about_the_development_of_China._He_was_eager_to_return_home,_but_was_
10、prevented_by_the_American_government,_which_made_him_upset._Through_his_struggle,_he_finally_came_back_and_had_been_working_on_scientific_work_in_China._His_research_on_rockets_and_missiles_was_a_great_success,_and_in_terms_of_his_achievement_and_ability,_he_deserved_the_honor,_Chinas_“Father_of_Aerospace”