1、读后续写09：历险型Part1：经典例文（森林遇险）1Part2：历险类细节描写3海上遇难3洪水5地震5火灾5受伤6丛林逃生7Part3：历险类故事构造“三大套路”8套路一：恶劣环境要烘托8套路二：转折思维技巧好8套路三：万能升华要牢记9Part4：灵活应用10例1：山洞遇险10Part5：高考真题再现12真题1：爸爸与我森林遇险【2018年6月浙江卷】12真题2：旅游途中遇狼【2017年6月浙江卷】14Part1：经典例文（森林遇险）Bradywas a recently retired search andrescuedog.He was not happy and missed his
2、owner Al because Al had gone out on a rescue mission without him. Als nephew Steve took Brady along when he and his friend Zach went on a overnight hike. But suddenly Steve and Zach smelled something burning and they realized that lightning had set the woods onfire.Wind-blown flame had leaped from t
3、he top of one tree to another. The long dry summer had turned the forest into a tinderbox(火绒箱) and the thunderstorm wasnt helping much. It had more wind and lightning than rain. ZachpulledSteve s arm. “Lets go! We can make it back tothe riverwe crossed today.” Steve pulled Bradys leash（皮带）and their
4、heads down against the strong fire-wind, they hurried down the path they had followed earlier. The air wasfull of smoke，and pine branches broke from burning trees with a crisp sound. Steve kept his eyes on the route. All they had to do was to make it down to the riverBradybarked a sharp warning. Ahe
5、ad of them lay a dense curtain of smoke across the path. Theyd never make it through that. They would have to find anotherescape route. The dog was pulling at his leash trying to draw them away from the smoke. This was what Brady wastrainedto do, and yet Steve was uneasy. It seemed to him they were
6、moving away from the river.Brady lifted his head and smelled the smoky wind. Suddenly, the dog ran away and disappeared. The boys yelled and shouted for him，but he didnt come back.They had no choice but to leave him behind. Heartsick, Steve and Zach went up a slope（斜坡）. He couldnt blame Brady for pa
7、nicking and escaping. He himself wanted to run even though he didnt have a clue which way.They hadnt gone far when there was a familiar bark, and Brady came running toward him.注意：1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为二段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：“Whereve you been?” S
8、teve cried. Paragraph 2：Brady led them back down the slope and into the trees. 参考范文:Paragraph 1“Whereve you been?Steve cried Brady stopped directly in front of him and started pushing him back toward the slope theyd just climbed. When Steve still didnt get it, Brady grabbed the boys jeans and pulled
9、 harder. The message was clear, but Steve hesitated. Of course he remembered what his uncle had said about Brady saving his life, but that had been a long time ago. Was he still sharp enough to get them through this? Brady pulled again,urgently, “0K,big guy,” Steve decided.Paragraph 2Brady led them
10、back down the slope and into the trees. Several times the big dog stopped to get his escape route. Often he changed direction. How long theyd walked Steve had no idea. He just held onto Bradys leash with one hand and kept putting one foot in front of the other. He was almost numb when he heard the w
11、onderful sound of rushing water. The river! With a yell the boys ran unsteadily forward until they jumped in cool,running water. “Brady, you did it!”第1段： “你去哪儿了？ 史蒂夫叫道，布雷迪直接停在他面前，开始把他推回他们刚爬上去的斜坡。 当史蒂夫仍然没有得到它，布雷迪抓住男孩的牛仔裤，并拉得更用力。 信息很清楚，但史蒂夫犹豫了。 他当然记得他叔叔说过布雷迪救他的命，但那是很久以前的事了。 他还能让他们度过难关吗？ 布雷迪又紧急地拉了一下，“0
12、K，大个子，”史蒂夫决定. 第2段： 布雷迪带领他们回到斜坡上，进入树林。 这只大狗停了好几次，以获得他的逃跑路线。 他经常改变方向。 他们走了多久，史蒂夫不知道。 他只是用一只手抓住布雷迪的皮带，继续把一只脚放在另一只前面。 听到哗哗的水声，他几乎麻木了。 河流！ 孩子们大喊一声，摇摇晃晃地向前跑，直到他们跳进凉爽的流水里。 “布雷迪，你做到了！”Part2：历险类细节描写海上遇难天气*The sky is darkened with gloomy clouds. Lighting flashed across the sky, followed by a clap of thunder.
13、Minutes later, there came a downpour.*The wind was howling and the waves smacked repeatedly against her face.海上*The sea boiled in the storm.*The angry waves crashed against the side of the boat, with water splashing here and there.船*Leaned sideways*The ship was rocking up and down in the restless se
14、a.*The crashing waves filled their boat with water faster than they could empty it.救援人*But then, as I looked in the distance, I discovered a series of three or four big waves heading towards the shore.*Without thinking, I ran down into the street, holding my body board on the way and shouted at a st
15、ranger to call the police.*Patting their faces to wake them up, I continuously told them to be strong.遇难者*She calmed down to keep the rhyme of breathing so that she could breathe evenly.*I felt extremely exhausted（apparently worn-out）*Looking at the vast sea, I felt a sense of fear surging through m
16、y whole body.*Salt stinging my eyes, I could hardly tell how long I could hold on.*But I still shouted in my head: keep on.*He saw an airplane flying overhead. But with no flashlight, he was invisible in the vast ocean.*He took off his yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and f
17、lagged them if they came back.*In sheer desperation, I finally caught sight of some boats with lifeguards on them heading towards us. Thank you, lord.*Quite soon, I felt strong arms pull me out of the sea onto the board.(摘自杭二中参考答案)救援过程*Then he dragged her upper from the water,.救人未遂*He held her hand
18、tightly but a huge wave separated them.*He fought the waves and strove to catch her, but failed, she was drifted away.其他*Energy returning magically, he rose to his feet and took immediate action.*They waved the flag and screamed for help.*Bear Grylls caught sight of the shabby boat and two men in ra
19、gs.*They were taken on board and thanked Edward over and over again.*From them on, he made up his mind never to take any risks unless he could ensure tight safety. Because it was simply his stubborn conducts and his ignorance of.that.洪水*The water kept rising. Two hours passed. He did not dare to mov
20、e an inch for fear of slipping.*Another two hours later, he noticed that the water level went down enough that he could try an escape. *Stiff from keeping in one position for hours, he slowly unfolded his bodies.*Cautiously and steadily, he made his way forward to the entrance.地震*Deep cracks opened
21、up in the streets.*The wall caved in.*Huge buildings collapsed, sending clouds of dust into the air.*The animals grew restless as if in anticipation of a disaster.火灾屋子*Fanned by the wind, the house was bathed in an immense stream of flames.*The house was bathed in an immense stream of flames.*The ro
22、aring fire swallowed the whole house.烟*Dense smoke swirled and billowed and the fumes made her choke for a moment.*The thick smoke caused him to stumble blindly around, burned his eyes, and made it impossible to breathe.人的反应*Through the office door, she saw flames climbing up the wall.*Both of them
23、were coughing and their eyes were stinging.*She clung to her, terrified by the leaping flames.*Turning, he fought through the smoke and ran out of the house.*Shielding her noise from the smoke, she prompted him to run for safety.*When he opened the front door of their flat to investigate, a thick cl
24、oud of smoke greeted him.*By then, with their mouths choked with smoke, both of them feel the heat engulfing everything.受伤*She turned around, only to find Tim beaten to the ground in extreme danger.*Afraid and merely desperate, she rushed towards him.*With all her strength, she instantly seated him
25、onto the car.*He pulled her towards him with full strength.*Her body was limp and she was not breathing.*He scooped her into his arms and struggled to feet.伤情*He was attacked violently and covered with scratches.*There was a trickle of blood from the wound.治疗*She applies a clean towel to the wound a
26、nd press firmly on it to stop the bleeding.*Wash and stitched the wound*Apply some medicine to his wound丛林逃生意识到不见了*He scanned around the forest for her. “Eurus?” he shouted again.*her heart dropped as he realized that she was gone.*he spared no effort to find her, but it was all in vain.*Thinking ba
27、ck to all of the good times that he had shared with her, he realized that he loved her and he wanted nothing more than for her to come back.逃生*He tried to get on faster, but he could not find the way out of the bush.*He was getting tired because Ceil was too heavy to carry for a young boy.*At last h
28、e came into an open space with a large pool in the middle.*He quickly soaked his clothes, for the approaching smoke could choke them.救援*He immediately ran out for searching, sb running after him.*My poor children, the flame could have burnt them to death. thought sb desperately.*While they walked on
29、 without hope, there came a sweet voice. ”Dad!”it was from sb. *Sb jumped with joy and hugged his kids.*She could hear water tricking somewhere at a distance.Part3：历险类故事构造“三大套路”套路一：恶劣环境要烘托1. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats， got on our horses， and headed slowly towards the mountains（慢慢地向山
30、走去）. （17年11月浙江高考 ）2. Never had I seen such a lovely creature in my life, so I followed its track without thinking twice（不假思索地追随它的足迹）.（17年11月浙江高考 ）3. In the process of seeking for it, I was totally immersed in the charm of nature（完全沉浸在大自然的魅力中）. （17年11月浙江高考 ）4. Whats worse, he didnt have any food or w
31、ater with him, let alone his cell phone or other supplies（更不要说他的手机和其他日用品）. （江苏省如皋中学2021届高三第一学期教学质量调研试）5. We were in the middle of nowhere, wearing only underwear, with our supplies burnt into ashes（把我们的物品烧成灰烬）, including our cellphones. （湖北省宜昌市第二中学2021届高三起点考试英语试题）套路二：转折思维技巧好例如，故事中我们迷路了，正在想办法如何脱离困境。S
32、uddenly it occurred to us that we could keep to the track to guide us back.But it was getting darker and darker, thus making it increasingly difficult for us to make out the road.（突然我们想到我们可以坚持小路引导我们回去。但天色越来越暗，使我们走道路越来越困难。）解析：这个例子属于“正”变“负”的模式。迷路后，想到了办法，属于“正向”，但是外在环境不允许：天色太晚。属于“负向”。【素材积累】1. Ultimately
33、, we were back, safe and sound（安然无恙）. （17年11月浙江高考 ）2. We jumped into the warm vehicle and the forester drove us to the ranger station（开车送我们去巡逻站）, where we were given clothes and were able to call our parents.（湖北省宜昌市第二中学2021届高三起点考试英语试题）套路三：万能升华要牢记需要牢记，历险类的文章不要无缘无故拔高主题，一般的主题词是“勇敢”、“克服困难”，当然还有一个万能的表达“这
34、是一次难忘的经历”。万能句1：That day was so unforgettable that it would stay in my memory forever. 那天是如此难忘，它将永远留在我的记忆。 遇到危险并且最终成功脱险的经历，想必对我们每个人来说一定是一生中难忘的经历。所以这个句子使用的场合还是挺多的。句子中使用了so.that的句式结构：如此.以至于。unforgettable是一个形容词，表示“无法忘记的”。万能句2：Only then did I realize that it was bravery that can conquer whatever difficul
35、ty came in the way. 直到那时，我才意识到，正是勇敢才能克服一切困难。遇到危险后，勇敢面对，才能解决问题。这个句子突出了“勇敢”这个核心，这在“脱险型”的故事里，是非常恰当的。这句话使用了倒装的结构和强调结构结合的方式，也属于高分亮点句。【素材积累】1. Sitting in the guestroom, I found it really blissful to be accompanied by our beloved ones（有我们所爱的人陪伴真的很幸福）.（17年11月浙江高考 ）2. Despite feeling weak, Nicholas was gener
36、ally in a good condition,and he was really happy as he was carried back to the ski resort to reunite with his family（和他的家人团聚）.（江苏省如皋中学2021届高三第一学期教学质量调研试）3.As our van chugged(发动机缓慢运转时)发出突突声) down the freeway, I thought this trip might not be so bad after all. Good-bye, regular old summer vacation. He
37、lloTrip of a Lifetime（一生一次的旅程）?（2021.03 十校联盟续写讲评）Part4：灵活应用例1：山洞遇险阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Two months ago, my friend Lisa, Harry and I, planned to do something adventurous, so we decided to explore a deep cave in the outskirt of our city with some food, water, torches and most importantl
38、y our cell phones. But things were not going well. We could not find any vehicle to drop us there. At long last, we managed to find a taxi which took us to the outskirt of the city. Another evidence of bad luck was that Harry had left his cell phone at home.After we got out of the taxi, some of the
39、locals told us the way to the cave. The cave looked very attractive yet still mysterious: the cave was so dark, and the tiny sounds made by the insects and animals could be heard properly, pulling us into the cave with some unknown supernatural power. As we were moving forward we made marks on the r
40、ocks along our path to remind us of the exit of the cave. And we always kept our mobiles in switch on mode to contact each other in case we got separated and even worse, lost in the cave.As we were moving forward, Harry felt that somebody was following our footsteps but he left his intuition to a jo
41、ke. When we reached in the deep of the cave, we lost our way and gradually the fog spread everywhere and we were not able to see each other properly. All of us got very scared of what was happening around us. Suddenly, we noticed that Harry was not with us and then we vaguely heard a shout from the
42、depth of the cave and we thought it was Harry, so we started searching for him. But our torches were left no use in such thick fog.续写词数应为150左右Paragraph 1:So we groped our way towards the direction of the shout._Paragraph 2:After we reunited with Harry, we tried to find the way out._【答案】So we groped
43、our way towards the direction of the shout. Frightened as we were, we still made up our mind to search for Harry. Hardly can we see anything in the completely dark situation, so we had to feel our way to search Harry with all strength. Slowly and cautiously moving forward, we held our hands tightly
44、in order not to be separated. With the voice approaching, we realized we would meet Harry immediately. Fortunately, when finding Harry sitting on the ground, we sighed with a relief.After we reunited with Harry, we tried to find the way out. Without hesitation, we decided to hunt for these marks whi
45、ch we had made before. “I get it!” Harry screamed. Looking up quickly, we found these clear marks easily. It was with the help of these marks that we quickly found the exit. When walking out of the cave, we knew we were saved. From this experience, what we learnt was that it was dangerous to explore
46、 the unknown word without a fully detailed plan.【解析】【分析】本文是一篇记叙文，讲述了作者和小伙伴们一起去探索一个位于城市郊区的山洞。山洞里面太黑又有雾，所以Harry和我们走散了。当听到Harry的呼救后，我们一起找到了Harry，最终逃离了山洞。【详解】1.段落续写：由第一段首句内容“所以我们摸索着朝着呼喊的方向走去。”可知，第一段可描写我们是如何在山洞中寻找Harry的。由第二段首句内容“我们和Harry重逢后，我们试图找到出路。”可知，第二段可描写我们利用之前所做的记号逃离山洞的过程。2.续写线索：听到声音寻找Harry找到Harry寻
47、找出口逃离山洞领悟感受3. 词类激活行为类寻找：hunt for/search for/ find大叫：scream/cry接近：approach/draw near情感类小心：cautious/ careful害怕：scared/ frightened【点睛】高分句型1. Frightened as we were, we still made up our mind to search for Harry.(运用了as引导让步状语从句时的倒装结构)高分句型2. Without hesitation, we decided to hunt for these marks which we h
48、ad made before(运用了which引导的限制性定语从句)高分句型3. It was with the help of these marks that we quickly found the exit.(运用了强结构)Part5：高考真题再现真题1：爸爸与我森林遇险【2018年6月浙江卷】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the W
49、ild West.We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dads friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and
50、 Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning. Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the
51、chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasnt going to ta
52、ke a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Dont be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you dont get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm ho
53、use were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键
54、词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. _Paragraph 2We had no idea where we were and it got dark._Possible Version:Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Dad and I found it was so cute
55、that we decided to chase it. After a while, we were completely lost in the forest. There was nothing left in our sight but the trees. “We may not be able to make it back to the farm house in time for supper.” I thought to myself. After a series of fruitless attempts to find a way out, we felt hungry
56、 and tired.Paragraph 2:We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. We got stuck in the forest. And an unexpected shower added to the difficulty of us in finding a way home, for all the tracks we had made disappeared because of the rain. I was almost on the edge of breaking down when my fat
57、her said, “Dont worry, my son. I remember there is a river near the farm house. Find the river and we will be back home.” Finally, we found the river and got back to the house along it. Needless to say, we ate a late dinner. 真题2：旅游途中遇狼【2017年6月浙江卷】第二节 读后续写（满分25分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bri
58、ght, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought f
59、ondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday. Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, thats a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasnt a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up
60、with him. Macs heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Macs relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Macs bik
61、e, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase (追赶).Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill,
62、 hed be easy caught up and the wolfs teeth would be tearing into his flesh.At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didnt think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assu
63、med was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你
64、写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1The car abrubtly stopped in front of him._Paragraph 2 A few minutes later,the other two cyclists arrived._Possible versions:1Paragraph 1:The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Mac jumped off his bicycle and rushed to the door of the car. But before Mac coul
65、d open the door, the wolf had caught up and jumped to attack. Luckily, the magic spray saved Mac a third time. Seeing the wolf back off, Paul quickly unlocked the door, and the frightened man climbed into the car in no time, shutting the door behind him heavily. Becky looked out of the back window a
66、nd saw the wolf standing over Macs bicycle as if it were a kill. Soon after, the animal ran off. Paragraph 2:A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. Mac got out of the car and hugged his friends. “It was really a nightmare and I thought I was going to die,” said Mac in a shaky voice, tears gathering in his eyes. For him, life could never be more beautiful. After saying goodbye to Paul and Becky with gratitude, the three men continued their trip, agreeing never to separate again. (续写词数：158)
