1、第4讲 读后续写 【典例】(2020新高考卷)The Meredith family lived in a small community.As the economy was in decline,some people in the town had lost their jobs.Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet.People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.Mrs Meredith was a most kind and thoughtf
2、ul woman.She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor.She knew they had problems,and they needed all kinds of help.When she had time,she would bring food and medicine to them.技法探究素养提升One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before.There was a man sick in bed,his w
3、ife,who took care of him and could not go out to work,and their little boy.The little boy his name was Bernard had interested her very much.“I wish you could see him,”she said to her own children,John,Harry,and Clara.“He is such a help to his mother.He wants very much to earn some money,but I dont s
4、ee what he can do.”After their mother left the room,the children sat thinking about Bernard.“I wish we could help him to earn money.”said Clara.“His family is suffering so much.”“So do I,”said Harry.“We really should do something to assist them.”For some moments,John said nothing,but,suddenly,he spr
5、ang to his feet and cried,“I have a great idea!I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”The other children also jumped up all attention.When John had an idea,it was sure to be a good one.“I tell you what we can do,”said John.“You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us?Well,we can
6、 make popcorn(爆米花),and put it into paper bags,and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。When Mrs Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too._ _ _ With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business._ _ 【审题谋篇】1.初步审题(1)
7、体裁:记叙文(2)时态:一般过去时(3)人称:第三人称(4)要点:故事主线和线索:Meredith一家人所在社区的一些人由于经济衰退而失业了善良体贴的Mrs Meredith经常拜访并帮助穷人Mrs Meredith拜访了穷困交加的Bernard一家Bernard很想赚钱帮助妈妈,但无赚钱门路Mrs Meredith告诉了自己的孩子们Bernard的情况孩子们想到了用玉米做爆米花,让Bernard在社区卖爆米花的主意 2.情节构思 第1段:根据所给首句When Mrs Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.
8、可知,Mrs Meredith同意了John的主意。该段应该写_ _。第2段:根据所给首句With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business及前文Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it可知,Bernard开始卖爆米花了。该段应该写_。孩子 们的具体分工及做法 爆米花的销售情况及Bernard的感受【要点盘点】1.第一段:孩子们的分工及做法你们自己给他爆玉米。You will _.你们可以每星期六早上给他送去。You _every Saturday morni
9、ng.很快孩子们就忙着爆玉米了。Very soon the children _.pop the corn for him yourselvesmay send himwere busy popping the corn他们的母亲则出去买纸袋。Their mother _the paper bags.伯纳德到了。Bernard _.玉米全爆好了,纸袋装满了,放在篮子里。The corn was all popped,the paper bags _,and arranged in the basket.went out to buyarrivedfilled2.第二段:爆米花的销售情况及Ber
10、nard的感受比预期的要快得多,他带着一个空篮子回来了。_,he returned with an empty basket.他这辈子从来没有挣过这么多钱。He _before in his life.当他发现这一切都是他的时候,他高兴得几乎说不出话来。When he found that it was all to be his,he was quite delighted and he _.Much sooner than could be expectedhad never earned so much moneycould hardly speak【我来升级】1.将句和句连接成含有条件
11、状语从句的复合句。_.2.将句和句连接成一个并列句。_.You may send him every Saturday morning,if you will pop the corn for himyourselvesVery soon the children were busy popping the corn,while their mother wentout to buy the paper bags3.将句和句连接成一个复合句。_4.将句改写成倒装句。_.5.将句改写成so.that.复合句。_.The corn was all popped,the paper bags fil
12、led,and arranged in the basketwhen Bernard arrived.Never had he earned so much money before in his lifeWhen he found that it was all to be his,he was so delighted that he couldhardly speak【五档满分范文】When Mrs Meredith heard of Johns idea,she thought it was a good one,too.Then she said,“You may send him
13、every Saturday morning,if you will pop the corn for him yourselves.John,will you agree to take charge of the work?”“Indeed,I will,”replied John,and he kept his word.Very soon the children were busy popping the corn,while their mother went out to buy the paper bags.When she came back,she brought Bern
14、ard with her.The corn was all popped,the paper bags filled,and arranged in the basket when Bernard arrived.With everything ready,Bernard started out on his new business.And much sooner than could be expected,he returned with an empty basket.Never had he earned so much money before in his life.When h
15、e found that it was all to be his,he was so delighted that he could hardly speak,but his bright smiling face spoke for him.People began to watch for the“little pop-corn boy”,and every week he had at least fifty cents to take home,and often more.All this was because of Johns bright idea,and the way h
16、e carried it out.【阅卷老师点评】1.梳理文章脉络不清晰,主要线索覆盖率低。2.续写内容与所给短文及段落开头语衔接不合理。3.文章续写后情节不完整。【技法点金】1.读后续写的选材特点、考查角度和注意事项 选材特点(1)所需阅读的短文词数在350以内;(2)多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主,故事情节有曲折、有起伏,但是,故事线索的逻辑性比较强。考查角度(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度;(2)内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况;(3)应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;(4)上下文的连贯性 注意事项(1)所续写短文的词数应为150左右(词数少于130的,从总分中
17、减去2分);(2)应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;(3)续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;(4)续写完成后,用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语 2.写作步骤(1)通读文本,理清文章的脉络关系。重点抓住记叙文的基本要素,即时间、地点、人物和事件。(2)整合信息,定位情节的核心矛盾。构建叙事框架,延续情节的基本要素。(3)仔细审题,明确续写要求。(4)细读文本,把握文本的语言特征,传承文本的遣词用句。(5)拟写草稿,修改错词病句。(6)标出续写部分中使用到的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语。3.注意事项(1)掌握所给文章的主旨意图及故事情节的发展方向。这点至关重要。只有把握了文章的主旨意
18、图,才能很好地完成续写。(2)正确理解故事的脉络线索和段落结构,设计续写内容的基本框架。只有对原文的脉络线索和段落结构有正确的和深刻的理解,续写的内容才能和原文骨肉相连,契合紧密。(3)感知文章的用词特点,以便使续写的内容在语言色彩上和所给文章保持一致。(4)注意语言的使用。考试说明中非常明确地指出,写作中要准确使用语法和词汇,清楚、连贯地表达自己的意思。所以,在考虑文章结构的同时,一定要注意使用比较“高级”的词汇和语法结构。Passage 1 (2020山东新高考模拟)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Though it is
19、 one of the faded memories of my life today,there are times when I remember his face clearly,especially his eyes.As he had yellow spots on his eyes we called him Spotty.He would have been a stray(流浪)dog,until he came to me.新题精练素养应用I was seven years old.My dad had just got a new job in Nasik.We had m
20、oved into a rented house.It was raining very heavily on the day we moved.It was a cold dark night.We had our meal and went to sleep.Somehow in the midnight I heard some strange sounds outside the main door.I gathered courage and looked out through the window and I was really amused with what I saw o
21、utside.There was a small puppy lying on an old doormat which my mother had put outside the door.It was wet and trembling.At first it was difficult to see the little one.It was the yellow spots on its eyes that made me realize its presence.It was trying to get under the doormat to avoid the cold air
22、outside and it had managed to get in as I could see only its head outside the doormat.Was it sick or injured?I felt pity for the poor soul.I went in and came out with an old towel.I went near the innocent one and held it in my hand and wiped the puppy till he had become dry.I took him into my room a
23、nd made a bed for him with a woolen blanket and a small pillow.He seemed very healthy and comfortable in his new bed as he went to sleep immediately.The next morning,everyone in the family came to know about the unusual guest.“Shall we keep him with us?”I questioned my mom.Like any other parents wou
24、ld,my parents first totally refused my idea but my sister and I convinced them to keep Spotty.Slowly Spotty got on with everyone and became one of the family members.注意:续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。One day,Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg._ _ _ Almost a year later,one midnight we heard
25、Spotty barking breathlessly._ _ _【参考范文】One day,Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg.He came to my room and sat near me.It was then that I saw his hind leg was injured and was bleeding.I called out my mother and she quickly tied a bandage around his leg and gave him food to eat.I was
26、 very upset.But the next day,Spotty was up to his usual pranks though he limped a bit.After this incident my relation with Spotty became more intense.I really admired him a lot for his courage.Almost a year later,one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly.We came out and saw that he was barki
27、ng continuously heading somewhere.After some time Spotty became quiet.I patted him on his back and came inside.The next day morning,my heart skipped a beat when I didnt see Spotty.I searched for him in each and every corner but he was nowhere.And this time he had gone and would never come back.I cri
28、ed and waited for him.We waited for one long week.But there were no signs of him.Then one day my dad got transferred to Mumbai.We shifted back to Mumbai.What would have happened to Spotty?Would he have died?These were the only questions in my mind,but they all remained unanswered forever.Passage 2(2
29、020山师附中三模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。It seemed Id done everything Id ever wanted to do in my life,but I had one regret.I was born in 1898,the oldest of five kids.Papa couldnt spare me to go to school,so I worked in the fields with him till I was 21 years old.Everywhere I went,
30、I learned some hard lessons about what happens to a man who even cant read the alphabet.People cheat you out of wages.They sell you a ticket to one city,take your money and hand you a ticket to somewhere else.By 1928,Id been wandering for nine years.I met a woman named Elzenia.We fell in love,marrie
31、d and moved to Dallas,where I got work fixing roads for the city.When Amelia,the oldest of our seven children,first went to school,I took my wife aside.“Elzenia,”I said.“I dont want the kids to know I cant read or write.”In 1938,one day my boss called me in.“George,”he said.“No one knows those machi
32、nes like you do.Id like to promote you.”But my thrill and surprise were cut short when he said,“Fill out this application and well get you a raise.”I couldnt admit the truth.I thanked him and walked out of his office.I did stay right where I was,until I turned 65 and my boss made me retire.But I did
33、nt stop working.For the next 25 years,I lived a happy life,but it still seemed to me like something was missing.A young fellow handed me a piece of paper.Its information about adult education classes.People can learn to read and write.Now Im 102.I thought of my friends and neighbours and what they m
34、ight think if they found out I couldnt read.After all these years,my secret would be out.But all my life Ive wanted to read.It was high time for action.注意:续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。The young man drove me to a huge building and led me into a spacious classroom,which was crowded with elderly people like me
35、._ _ _ Im still going to school._ _ _ _【参考范文】The young man drove me to a huge building and led me into a spacious classroom,which was crowded with elderly people like me.Through chatting,I learned that they had all been longing to read and write but never had the chance to go to school.As the bell r
36、ang,in came the teacher,a woman well past forty.After a warm and brief greeting,we started our lesson.First we learned to read the alphabet and though I made mistakes at times,no one laughed at me.Everyone helped each other with open-hearted enjoyment.Im still going to school.Though faced with the m
37、ost challenging event of my life,Im full of courage and confidence.With the generous help of my teacher,friends and my children,I have made huge progress in study.Now Im never shy about admitting the truth that once I was not able to read and write at all.Besides,Im eager to encourage more elderly p
38、eople to attend the adult education classes,because its never too late to learn.Passage 3 (2020潍坊三模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。There was something in the elderly womans grace that caught my eye.Although slow and unsure of her steps,the woman moved with deliberation(从容),and the
39、re was no hesitation in her gestures.It was a few years ago,and I had taken a part-time holiday-season job in a video store at the local shopping mall.From inside the store,I could see the people outside rushing by.The elderly woman entered the store,along with her daughter,who was displaying a seri
40、ous case of impatience,rolling her eyes,sighing and checking her watch every few seconds.I guessed if she had possessed a rope,she would have fastened it to her mother to drag her along to keep step with the rush of other shoppers.The elderly woman separated from her daughter and began to seek throu
41、gh the DVDs on the nearest shelf.After the slightest hesitation,I walked over and asked if I could help her find something.The woman smiled up at me and showed me a title written on an old piece of paper.Rather than rush off to locate the DVD for the woman,I asked her to walk with me so I could show
42、 her where she could find it.Looking back,I thought I wanted to enjoy her company for a moment.Something about her deliberate movements reminded me of my own mother,whod passed away the previous Christmas.I missed my mom and still felt regretful about the moments when Id used my impatience to make h
43、er life unhappy.As we walked along the back of the store,I introduced its floor plan:old television shows,action movies,cartoons,science fiction.The woman seemed glad of the unrushed company and casual conversation.We found the DVD and she thanked me,saying that it was the one shed enjoyed when she
44、was her daughters age.Unwillingly,I accompanied her to the cash register,realizing I had to return the elderly woman to her daughter,who was still tapping her foot at the front of the store.注意:续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register,I walked over to he
45、r daughter._ _ _ _ Together they made their way toward the stores exit._ _ _ _【参考范文】As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register,I walked over to her daughter.“Mind some advice?”I asked.She rolled her eyes and said,“of course not.”I smiled to show her I wasnt criticizing.“Cheri
46、sh her and cherish every single moment you can stay with her,”I said.And then I answered her curious expression by saying,“When shes gone,its these little moments that will come back to you.Moments like this.I know.”Having finished saying this,I noticed the elderly woman moving with her deliberation
47、 back to her daughter.Together they made their way toward the stores exit.Then the daughter glanced over her elderly mother.And slowly,almost unwillingly,she placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mothers shoulders and gently guided her back into the crowd.Tears filled my e
48、yes when I watched them disappearing in the crowd.Passage 4 (2020威海二模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Danger at Scituate LighthouseRebecca stood by her father,looking out the windows of Scituate Lighthouse.Low sand dunes(沙丘)with sea grass topped the Massachusetts beach.There were n
49、o clouds in the skynothing at all to give warning of the danger that was sailing toward them.“Now,Rebecca,”Mr Bates began,gazing out across the open sea,“I want you and Abigail to help your mother and take care of things while I go to town for food and supplies.I wont be gone long.”“Well help,”Rebec
50、ca promised.“I know I can count on you.”Still,Mr Bates looked a little worried about leaving the lighthouse.After all,peace between the US and the UK had not yet been declared,even though the war of 1812 was nearly over.Although English warships used to frequently attack towns along the coastincludi
51、ng Scituateno English soldiers had been sighted for a long time.Besides,Rebecca thought as she watched her father set off,the family would soon starve if he didnt go for food.Her father hadnt been gone long when Rebecca happened to look out the window at the ocean.What she saw nearly made her heart
52、stop.It was an enemy ship:a small,light-gunned British warship.Calling for her mother,she grabbed her fathers telescope and could just make out the name painted on the side:La Hogue.Rebecca,Abigail,and their mother stood together,frightened,as they watched the ship sail closer.Mother told the girls
53、to watch the ship while she tried to sound the alarm and warn the home guard in the nearby village.The girls watched helplessly as the great ship drew near.Two small boats were lowered off the side,and Rebecca knew the boats would come ashore quickly.It was time to run.As they ran down the lighthous
54、e stairs,Rebecca suddenly stopped when she saw her fife(横笛).Oh my!She thought.It just might work.Rebecca grabbed the fife and the drum(鼓)that Abigail had been learning to play.注意:续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。She and her sister hurried out of the lighthouse and over to the large sand dunes that lay behind it
55、._ _ The English soldiers looked nervously at one anotherthe music of“Yankee Doodle”had to be coming from the confident American soldiers._ _【参考范文】She and her sister hurried out of the lighthouse and over to the large sand dunes that lay behind it.They hid themselves among the trees.Peering through
56、the trees,they saw the boats coming closer and closer.Taking a deep breath,Rebecca held her sisters trembling hand and handed her the drum.“Weve got to play Yankee Doodle.You know the home guard always marches to a drum and fife.Lets make the British soldiers believe our troops are coming to fight.”
57、Abigail nodded.Her face was white,but she gripped her drumsticks firmly.The lively rhythm of“Yankee Doodle”soon filled the air.The English soldiers looked nervously at one anotherthe music of“Yankee Doodle”had to be coming from the confident American soldiers.They hesitated and slowed down the boats
58、.The captain listened tensely fearing that if his men landed on the beach,they would be walking into a trap,so he fired as a retreat signal.The sailors quickly turned the rowboats around.When the home guard arrived,they were amazed to find the La Hogue had already set sail.They congratulated Rebecca
59、 on her quick thinking to trick the British into leaving.Rebecca and Abigails bravery and lively music had defeated the enemy.without a single shot having been fired.Passage 5(2020温州二模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。“Will you give my kite a lift?”said my little nephew to his siste
60、r,after trying in vain to make it fly by dragging it along the ground.Lucy very kindly took it up and threw it into the air,but,her brother neglecting to run off at the same moment,the kite fell down again.“Ah!now,how awkward you are!”said the little fellow.“It was your fault entirely,”answered his
61、sister.“Try again,children,”said I.Lucy once more took up the kite.But now John was in too great a hurry;he ran off so suddenly that he twitched the kite out of his hand,and it fell flat as before.“Well,who is to blame now?”asked Lucy.“Try again,”said I.They did,and with more care;but a side wind co
62、ming suddenly,as Lucy let go the kite,it was blown against some shrubs,and the tail became entangled in a moment,leaving the poor kite hanging with its head downward.“There,there!”exclaimed John,“that comes of your throwing it all to one side.”“As if I could make the wind blow straight,”said Lucy.In
63、 the meantime,I went to the kites assistance;and having disengaged the long tail,I rolled it up,saying,“Come,children,there are too many trees here;let us find a more open space,and then try again.”We presently found a nice grass plot,at one side of which I took my stand;and all things being prepare
64、d,I tossed the kite up just as little John ran off.It rose with all the dignity of a balloon,and promised a lofty flight;but John with delight,found it pulling so hard at the string,stopped short to look upward and admire.The string slackened,the kite wavered,and,the wind not being very favorable,do
65、wn came the kite to the grass.“Oh John,you should not have given it up,”said I.“Remember the motto,try again.”注意:续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。“I wont try any more,”replied he,rather sullenly._ _ _ After enjoying the sight as long as he pleased,little John proceeded to roll up the string slowly;_ _ _【参考范文】“I
66、 wont try any more,”replied he,rather sullenly.It is of no use,you see.The kite wont fly,and I dont want to be plagued with it any longer.“Oh,fie,my little man!Would you give up the sport,after all the pains we have taken both to make and to fly the kite?A few disappointments ought not to discourage
67、 us.Come,I have wound up your string,and now try again.”And he did try,and succeeded,for the kite was carried upward on the wind as lightly as a feather;and when the string was all out,John stood in great delight,holding fast the stick and gazing on the kite,which now seemed like alittle white speck
68、 in the blue sky.“Look,look,aunt,how high it flies!and it pulls like a team of horses,so that I can hardly hold it.I wish I had a mile of string:I am sure it would go to the end of it.”After enjoying the sight as long as he pleased,little John proceeded to roll up the string slowly;and when the kite
69、 fell,he took it up with great delight,exclaiming that it was not at all hurt,and that it had behaved very well.“Shall we come out tomorrow,aunt,after lessons,and try again?”“I have no objection,my dear,if the weather is fine.And now,as we walk home,tell mewhat you have learned from your mornings sp
70、ort.”“I have learned to fly my kite properly.”“You may thank aunt for it,brother,”said Lucy,“for you would have given it up long ago,if she had not persuaded you to try again.”Yes,dear children,I wish to teach you the value of perseverance,even when nothing more depends upon it than the flying of a
71、kite.Whenever you fail in your attempts to do any good thing,let your motto be,try again.Passage 6(2020舟山三模)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。Every night after dinner,my grandparents would turn on TV for the 6 oclock news.No matter how hard I tried to act the grown-up and watch with
72、them,I would inevitably(不可避免地)get distracted until 6:30 when Wheel of Fortune came on.My grandma would play along,trying to guess the answers before the players.Her shouts of excitement when she succeeded could be heard across the house.As I grew older,my love of reading and writing blossomed,and I
73、would join my grandma in yelling out letters.Soon,I was experiencing the thrill of solving the puzzles faster than the contestants(选手)and even my grandma.I was hooked.Due to constant moving around with my mom and father,I started to spend less time with my grandparents,but our bond remained strong.M
74、y grandparents provided me with the stability,love and support that I desperately needed when I grew up.When I was in a bad mood,I would remember those sweet nights.A few years later,I was living with my grandpa in Chicago.While watching an episode(集)of Wheel of Fortune,we had a wave of nostalgia(怀旧
75、).With application,I didnt think much of it until I received a mail months later,announcing that the Wheel of Fortune casting team would come to Chicago.Inorder to be considered for an in-person audition(试 演),applicants would need to submit a sixty-second video explaining why they wanted to be a con
76、testant.All my childhood memories of watching the show came flooding back,and I knew I was meant to spin(旋转)the wheel for real.Immediately,I recorded a video and submitted it.A couple of weeks later,I received an e-mail inviting me to audition in person.I was very nervous on the audition day.I could
77、nt believe I was trying out for“Americas Game”!After two rounds of intense auditioning,with half of the hopefuls letting go after the first round,it was over.All of us applicants were told we would receive a letter in the mail within two weeks if we were selected.注意:续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好。I ran to the
78、 mailbox every day but there was nothing._ _ _ Then one morning while getting ready for work,I checked my mail and let out the loudest scream ever._ _【参考范文】I ran to the mailbox every day but there was nothing.After one week,I became very frustrated and even thought the mail had been delivered to the
79、 wrong department.My grandma came and comforted me,“Laura,wait patiently.”Feeling defeated,I replied,“I wasnt good enough.They didnt want me.”She said with a confident tone,“You will be selected and receive the mail.Trust me.”Though I didnt believe I would receive the mail,I was not so anxious.I cal
80、med down and lived my life as before.Then one morning while getting ready for work,I checked my mail and let out the loudest scream ever.There it was:a mail from Wheel of Fortune stating that they had a tape date for me.I had to read it several times before I truly believed it.I was going to be a contestant on Wheel of Fortune!I ended up filming my episode a few months later,and the entire experience was amazing.From meeting Pat and Vanna,to spinning the wheel and,most importantly,saying those magical words,“Id like to solve the puzzle.”It was a day I will never forget.
