1、Section 写作园地 |读后续写健康故事本单元的写作任务是读后续写中的“健康故事”主题。读后续写是阅读理解和书面表达的沟通桥梁。读后续写考查的是学生在阅读文章的基础上,分析文章的逻辑,运用准确丰富的语言,展现创造力和想象力。一、解题步骤读后续写一般遵循以下四个解题步骤:1准确理解材料,理清人物事件。2根据段落开头语,确定续写方向。3根据画线词语,确定续写细节。4调整写作语言,完成读后续写。二、注意事项1仔细揣摩原材料作者所表达的意图和主题。注意前后照应,注意隐含的情感因素。2一定要注意与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接。千万不可忽略所提供的段落首句的限制而肆意创作。3切忌大篇幅对白;应尽可能巧妙
2、地设置情节,多关注动作描写和心理描述。4在完成续写后,务必用下划线标出所用上的关键词语;不要因此而失分。一、开头常用语1People are beginning to attach much more importance to their health these days than ever before.现在人们开始比以往任何时候都更加重视自己的健康。2In current society, people have known the importance of keeping healthy and good life habit.在当今社会,人们已经意识到健康和良好生活习惯的重要性。
3、3When it comes to heath, everybody has his own way to keep healthy, doing exercise, keeping a balanced diet, etc.说到健康,每个人都有自己的方式来保持健康,锻炼身体,保持均衡的饮食等等。二、正文常用语1To begin with, exercise is the most important factor. Doing exercise can not only build peoples body but also relax themselves.首先,锻炼是最重要的因素。锻炼不
4、仅可以保持良好的身体健康也可以放松自己。2Regular exercise strengthens our hearts and lungs. In addition, it prevents us from putting on weight.有规律的运动能强壮我们的心脏和肺。此外还能防止我们增加体重。3It is also necessary to keep a good diet. There is a saying, “An apple a day keeps the doctor away.”还必须保持一个良好的饮食习惯。俗话说,“一天一苹果,医生远离我。”4Avoid foods
5、with lots of sugar and fat. Eat plenty of high protein foods, vegetables and fruits.避免高糖高脂肪的食物。多吃高蛋白食物、蔬菜和水果。5We should get proper amount of sleep, because without enough sleep, we will often feel tired and irritable. 我们应该保持适量的睡眠,因为没有足够的睡眠,我们会经常感到疲倦和易怒。三、结尾常用语1So if you keep those ways you will be m
6、ore and more healthy.因此如果你能保持这种方式,你会越来越健康。2I think a strong will is necessary if we want to keep healthy.我认为如果想要健康,强大的意愿是必须的。3We have to get rid of those bad habits that damage our health, such as drinking and smoking.我们必须戒掉那些损害我们健康的坏习惯,比如喝酒和抽烟。4Last but not least, always keeping a good mood can mak
7、e half the work with double results. 最后但并非最不重要的是要经常保持一个好心情,这样做起事来才可以事半功倍。5If you really love life, follow these suggestions and start a healthy lifestyle.如果你真的热爱生活,那就遵循这些建议,开始健康的生活方式吧。阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Michelle was 8 years old when she heard her mom and dad talking about her little_broth
8、er Jack, now, only an infant (婴儿). He was very sick and they were completely out of money. Only a very costly operation could save Jack now, but there was no one to whom they could turn for the money needed. She heard her daddy say to her tearful mom, “Only a miracle can save him now.”Hearing the wo
9、rds, Michelle went to her bedroom and took all the coins from her little money box. After counting the coins three times, she slipped out of the back door and made her way to the_drug_store 6 blocks away . She waited for a long time before the pharmacist (药剂师) turned around and asked her, “And what
10、do you want?” “Well, its about my brother,” Michelle answered, “hes really really sick. And I want to buy a miracle.”“I beg your pardon?” said the pharmacist.“His name is Jack. And he has something very bad growing inside his body. And my daddy says only a miracle can save him now. So how much does
11、a miracle cost?”“We dont sell miracles here, little_girl. I am sorry. But I cant help you.” The pharmacist said.“Listen, I have the money to pay for it.” With these words, Michelle poured out all the coins from her pocket.At this time, a welldressed_man behind Michelle stooped down and asked the lit
12、tle girl, “I am selling the miracle you want. Tell me how much money you have.”“One_dollar_and_eleven_cents.” Michelle answered in a_low_voice,_“Thats all the money I have. But I can get some more if I need to.”“Well,” smiled the man, “a dollar and eleven cents. The_exact_price of a miracle for you
13、little brother. Show me the place where your brother lives.”注意:1所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Holding the mans hand firmly, Michelle took him home. Paragraph 2:When asked why he chose to help the family, the man detailed, 精彩范文Paragraph
14、 1:Holding the mans hand firmly, Michelle took him home. The little_girl walked in such a hurry that she even forgot to introduce herself to the man. Her parents were too surprised to believe their eyes. That welldressed_man turned out to be a surgeon, specializing in neural surgery. Later, the litt
15、le_brother was taken away. The operation was completed with payment of one_dollar_and_eleven_cents. And it wasnt long before Jack was home again and doing well. Michelle was more than happy. Now she knew the_exact_price of a miracle:_one dollar and eleven cents, plus the faith of a little child.Para
16、graph 2:When asked why he chose to help the family, the man detailed, “When I was young myself, I was once in the same situation as the little baby. The little girl reminded me of my own sister. It was she who saved my life. Deeply impressed by her innocence, I was determined to help the family out
17、of trouble. It doesnt matter how much money she actually had with her; what matters is her faith, a faith that miracles do exist.”总评原文主要讲述了小女孩的弟弟病重,因家贫而无法救治。她听父母说只有奇迹可以救弟弟,于是天真地去药店买奇迹,恰好遇见一位陌生人,自称可以把奇迹卖给她。续写部分描述了小女孩的善良纯真带来了奇迹,医生来到她家竭力救治,遵循原文的情节发展,展现了人性的光辉。同时,续写部分与两段所给的开头段落语衔接也十分紧密。亮点呈现(1)本文运用了非谓语动词(
18、deeply impressed by her innocence)、名词性从句(what matters is her faith)等语法结构,更是准确运用了specializing in, with payment of 等高级短语,使得全文十分出彩。(2)衔接词Later, And, Now等用来承接故事情节的发展,行文流畅、连贯、自然。(3)本篇合理地使用了10个关键词语里的8个,符合要求。阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。My_mother used to ask me what the most important part of the body is.
19、 Through the years I would take a guess at what I thought was the correct answer. When I was younger, I thought sound was very important to us as humans, so I said, “My ears, Mommy.”She said, “No. Many people are deaf. But they are doing well in their life. You keep thinking about it and I will ask
20、you again soon.”Several years passed before she asked me again. Since making my first attempt, I had contemplated (深思) the correct answer. So this time I told her, “Mommy, sight is very important to everybody, so it must be our eyes.”She looked at me and told me, “You are learning fast, but the answ
21、er is not correct because there are many people who are blind.”Over the years my mother asked me a couple more times and always her answer was, “No, but you are getting smarter every year, my child.”Then last year, my grandpa died. Everybody was hurt. Everybody was crying. My mom looked at me when i
22、t was our turn to say our final goodbye to grandpa. She asked me, “Do you know the most important body part yet, my dear?”I was surprised when she asked me this on this occasion. I always thought this was a game between her and me. She saw the confusion on my face and told me, “This question is very
23、 important. How you answer it shows whether you have learned about life. For every body part you gave me in the past, I have told you were wrong and I have given you a reason why. But today is the day you will know the answer.”I looked puzzled.“All your previous answersears, eyes, hands, heart . The
24、y are all very important to yourself. But this time I need you to think of something that is important to others.”注意:1所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:“My dear, the most important body part,” she said, Paragraph 2:“Mom, I understand. And you can cry on my shoulder too.” 写前导读:本文是一篇记叙文。作者的母亲过去常问作者,身体上最重要的部位是什么。在不同的时间作者给出的答案不一,但都不是正确答案。最后在祖父葬礼这天,母亲告诉了作者正确答案。精彩范文Paragraph 1:Paragraph 2: