1、2013高考英语书面表达02-01：文字提纲式练与评（3）练评三试题来源(江苏省石庄高级中学2013届高三学情调研检测)作为中学生，你经历过多次考试，体验过成功，也遭遇过失败。请你根据提示内容，简要概述中学生中普遍存在的对考试失败的两种态度，并结合自身实际，说明你的态度和理由。积极态度消极态度你的态度及理由分析失败原因改进学习方法增强自信心情绪低落丧失信心不再继续努力？注意：词数150左右。讲 评第二 头脑风暴快速搜索词组句型第一组have/take many tests or exams do well in the exams/fail (in) the exams achieve suc
2、cess/ enjoy successsuffer from failure/face(with) failureexperience both success and failure第二组take different attitudes towardsthere be different attitudes towardsWhen it comes to failure, different people have different attitudes.Faced with failure, different people have different attitudes.The att
3、itudes toward failure among people are quite different.have/take active attitudes have passive/negative attitudesfind out/ analyze the causesencourage oneselfbuild up self-confidenceavoid making similar mistakesbe in low spirits/be on bad moodbe in bad moods and upset lose heart/confidenceno longer
4、study hard no longer try ones best not work hard any longer(any more)第三 变点为句2.中学生中普遍存在对考试失败的两种态度。Faced with failure, different middle school students have different attitudes.There are two different attitudes towards failure among middle school students.When it comes to failure, different middle sch
5、ool students have different attitudes.The attitudes toward failure among middle school students are quite different.3.有些人考试失败时持积极的态度：分析失败的原因；改进学习方法；增强自信心。Other students have the positive attitude to failure.Others think quite the opposite. They have a positive attitude.Other students are positive ev
6、en if they have failed.They will spend some time analyzing the reasons why they failed in the exam.When they fail, what they will do is not to complain their bad luck, but to analyze the reason why they have made so many mistakes.They will analyze the reasons for their failure, which will help them
7、polish their study skills and strengthen their confidence.They will analyze the causes and polish their study skills so that they can build up confidence.They will improve their approaches to learning, and make themselves confident.They will find a better way that is suitable for them.5.我的态度及理由在谈我的态
8、度及理由时当然要从积极的方面去考虑。总体来说：对待“失败”如何正确处理的问题。具体的讲，我们中学生应该可以想到的起码有两点：一是“失败是成功之母”；二是“绝不言败，坚持就是胜利，也就是说：有志者事竟成”。Under no circumstances can we lose our confidence. As middle school students, we should use our intelligence to deal with all kinds of failure. In a word, we cant give up before having a try. As an
9、old saying goes, “where there is a will, there is a way.”Failure is the mother of success, which can teach us a lot in the process of reaching our goals, and only by tasting failure can we enjoy the fruit of success. I agree with those with active attitudes. As we all know, failure is the mother of
10、success. Even great men have failed many times before they succeeded. So we must deal with our failure correctly.第四 连句成篇As far as Im concerned, under no circumstances can we lose our confidence. As middle school students, we should use our intelligence to deal with all kinds of failure. In a word, w
11、e cant give up before having a try. As an old saying goes, “where there is a will, there is a way.”参考答案案例分析在我们做案例分析前，先来看一看高考书面表达评分标准中最高档次的要求：第五档 很好(21-25分)：完全完成了试题规定的任务，完全达到了预期的写作目的，覆盖所有内容要点；应用了较多的语法结构和词汇；语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力；有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。请看下面的考场学生习作 (8)However, t
12、here are some students show the opposite attitude. (9)They become upset and lack of confidence because of the shock. (10)They cant come up with a solution to the problem, only wait for others, taking no efforts. (11)It is obviously that they cant achieve success any more due to lack of working hard.
13、(12)As far as Im concerned, under no circumstances can we lose our confidence. (13)As we are a middle school students, we should use our intelligence to deal with it. (14)we cant give up before having a try. (15)As an old saying goes, “where there is a will, there is a way”.该习作中的下列句子各有什么特色？(3)Consid
14、ering carefully, I think what matters is not the outcome, but the attitudes towards texts, which have a great influence on it.(5)There is no doubt that many factors contribute to the result.(6)Therefore, they analyze the causes and polish their study skills so that they can build up confidence.(7)Be
15、sides, they value correcting the mistakes they made very much, which will help them achieve success in the next examination(11)It is obviously that they cant achieve success any more due to lack of working hard.(12)As far as Im concerned, under no circumstances can we lose our confidence.(15)As an o
16、ld saying goes, “ where there is a will, there is a way.”.由此可知作者运用了较多的语法结构。再读该习作，看看作者是否使用了较高级词汇？这些高级词汇是(2) as well as 也 (5)contribute to导致(6)polish 提高；build up建立 (7)value 重视 (10)come up with 想出；a solution to the problem这个问题的解决方法。由此可知作者运用了较多的高级词汇。再读该习作，看看作者是否恰当使用了连接词，以使文章更为流畅，更具可读性？(3)Considering car
17、efully, I think what matters is not the outcome, but the attitudes towards texts, which have a great influence on it.(6)Therefore, they analyze the causes and polish their study skills so that they can build up confidence (7)Besides, they value correcting the mistakes they made very much, which will
18、 help them achieve success in the next examination由此可知作者有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。再读该习作，看看有哪些可改进之处？(3)Considering carefully, I think what matters is not the outcome, but the attitudes towards texts, which have a great influence on it. 此句中的最后的it应改为us。(8)However, there are some students show the opposite
19、 attitude. students后应加who。(9)They become upset and lack of confidence because of the shock. lack of 应改为lacking in。(10)They cant come up with a solution to the problem, only wait for others, taking no efforts. 去掉句中的“, only wait for others”(11)It is obviously that they cant achieve success any more due to lack of working hard.将obviously改为obvious。(13)As we are a middle school students, we should use our intelligence to deal with it. 将a 去掉。思考：将这些错误改过来以后，这篇习作还有需要改进的地方吗？修改后的习作来源:学*科*网该习作符合第五档的要求。但文中有几处错误，几处错误中只有一处是大错，其它多数是因为想要使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇而造成的。因此阅卷老师给该习作评分为21分。*结束
