1、第九节如何写记叙文的主体出现在读写任务型作文中的记叙文要求学生描述一件与原阅读材料有关联的事件，并说出自己从事件中得到的启示或对所描述现象发表自己的看法。1写作步骤概括原文衔接过渡描述事件发表看法2过渡语句This reminds me of the similar experience.This story brings me back to an event many years ago.I had a similar experience.3注意事项(1)注意时态的运用。记述经历类的记叙文，无论写人还是记事，通常以过去时态为主。如果所写的内容不但有过去的人和事，而且还有现在的人和事，那么
2、对过去的人和事应采用过去时态，对现在的人和事应采用现在时态。(2)注意人称的一致性。要根据题目的要求选用合适的人称，做到上下文人称一致。(3)篇章结构。通常以时间或事件发展的顺序为线索，有时也可采用倒叙手法。详写主要情节，略写次要情节。(2017江苏仪征中学月考)请阅读下面短文，并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。The Elephant and the FlyAn elephant was standing and picking leaves from a tree.A small fly came，flying and buzzing near his ear.The elepha
3、nt waved it away with his long ears.Then the fly came again，and the elephant waved it away once more.This was repeated several times.Then the elephant asked the fly，“Why are you so restless and noisy? Why cant you stay for a while in one place？”The fly answered，“I am attracted to whatever I see，hear
4、 or smell.My senses pull me constantly in all directions and I cannot resist them.What is your secret? How can you stay so calm and still？”The elephant said，“My senses do not rule my attention.Whatever I do，I get involved in it.Now that I am eating，I am completely absorbed in eating.In this way I ca
5、n enjoy my food and chew it better.I rule and control my attention.When you are in charge of your senses and attention，your mind will become calm.”【写作内容】1以约30个单词概括短文的内容；2然后以约120个单词就“专注”这一主题发表你的看法，包括以下要点：(1)看完故事后的感受及启发；(2)描述一次你或他人因受太多干扰而使学习、生活或工作受到影响的经历； (3)你打算在高三这一年里如何保持专注。【写作要求】1可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用
6、原文中的句子；2作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。【评分标准】内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。【审题】本文为寓言性短文，要概括故事的内容，就要读懂故事的寓意。结合题目要求“就专注这一主题发表你的看法”，从而确定文章写作应围绕“专注”这一主题。审题时应做到：(1)定时态：本文在概括内容和描述经历时用过去时，在写打算时用将来时；(2)定人称：描述自己的经历用第一人称，他人的经历用第三人称。【谋篇】第一段：概括短文内容。第二段：衔接过渡语引出主题句。第三段：描述一次受干扰的经历。第四段：保持专注的打算。 【满分范文】An elephant was constantly disturbed b
7、y a restless fly，who wondered about the secret of remaining calm.The elephant revealed that calmness would be obtained when ones senses and attention were focused.Inspired by what the elephant said，I realized the ability to focus ones attention is the key to success.Any person, if easily distracted,
8、 is unable to achieve his success.This reminds me of what happened in my primary school.I once signed up for too many various afterclass activities.As a result，I didnt spend enough time on my studies.Consequently，I fell behind and failed in exams.Since then I have known that one should focus on one
9、thing before it is well done.As a Senior Three student，having set a clear goal，I will give priority to it，trying to resist any temptation.Im fully aware that only with a determined mind can I achieve my goal.满分缘由1.行文架构(1)概括短文内容(2)通过衔接过渡语(Inspired by what the elephant said.)引出主题：专注是成功的关键(3)描述经历：自己初中时
10、参加多种课外活动导致考试不及格(4)打算：在高三阶段如何保持专注2.亮点词汇constantly，obtain，focus ones attention，distract，sign up，consequently，give priority to，set a clear goal，achieve ones goal3.亮点句式句含有who引导的非限制性定语从句；句、句、句含有宾语从句；句、句使用了过去分词和现在分词作状语；句含有状语从句的省略。句式改写1.用only倒装句改写句中的宾语从句The elephant revealed that .2.用强调句改写句Inspired by what
11、 the elephant said，I realized .【答案】1.only when ones senses and attention were focused would calmness be obtained2.it is the ability to focus ones attention that is the key to successA(2017苏州中学测试)请阅读下面短文，并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。There was once a farmer who had a fine olive orchard (果园)He was very hardwor
12、king，and the farm always prospered (蒸蒸日上)under his care.But he knew that his three sons did not like the farm work, and were eager to reach the goal at a single leap.When the farmer felt that his time had come to die，he called the three sons to him and said，“My sons，there is a pot of gold hidden in
13、the olive orchard.Dig for it，if you wish it.”After the farmer was dead，the sons went to work to find the pot of gold.Since they did not know where the hidingplace was，they agreed to begin in a line，at one end of the orchard，and to dig until one of them should find the money.They dug until they had t
14、urned up the soil from one end of the orchard to the other，round the tree roots and between them.But no pot of gold was to be found.It seemed as if someone must have stolen it，or as if the farmer had been wandering in his wits.The three sons were bitterly disappointed to have all their work for noth
15、ing.The next olive season，the olive trees in the orchard bore more fruit than they had ever given；when it was sold，it gave the sons a whole pot of gold.And when they saw how much money had come from the orchard，they suddenly understood what the wise father had meant when he said，“There is gold hidde
16、n in the orchard.Dig for it，if you wish it.”【写作内容】1以约30个单词概括上文的主要内容。2以约120个单词就“Dig for it，if you wish it.”的话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：(1)你对这句话的理解；(2)试举例说明；(3)这个故事给你的启发。 【参考范文】The story narrates that a dying farmer instructed his three sons to dig for a pot of hidden gold in his orchard，through which they eventua
17、lly understood their hardworking fathers intention. The story sets me thinking we should be dedicated to the goal of life.However，its not uncommon in our life that there do exist many people who are dying to seek a fortune by virtue of luck rather than through steadfast diligence.Anyway，Rome is not
18、built in one day.Once a young man，Jia Zuosheng，who dropped out of middle school due to poverty，has had an unbelievable craze for English since his childhood.He took his position as a security officer at Tsinghua University，bearing the dream to improve English both at work and during the intervals.Th
19、ough living in adversity，he eventually realized his dream.Just as a saying goes，“You reap what you sow.”It is devotion and perseverance that pay off.B(2017启东中学高三检测)请阅读下面短文，并按照要求用英语写一篇150词左右的文章。One day，Zengs wife decided to go out for shopping，but her little son insisted on going with her to the mark
20、et.Thinking that she would come back very soon，and that the naughty boy would bring her a lot of trouble，she was unwilling to do so.In order to persuade the boy to stay home，she told him，“Oh，come on，good boy，if you listen to Mom and then Mom will give you a present when I am back.”“What present are
21、you going to give me，Mom？”asked the son.“We havent eaten meat for a long time，so I will kill our pig and let you enjoy a big nice dinner.”The mother comforted the boy when it happened that their pig was wandering in front of the house.Just at that time，her husband came back and heard what she said.T
22、hinking of the nice meal，the boy gave in.Not very soon，the mother came back，but what she saw shocked her.It was her husband who had killed the only pig of the poor family.“Why did you kill it? You know that it is very important for my family.”she scolded him.“I did that just for your promise！”Mr. Ze
23、ng answered.【写作内容】1以约30个词概括这则中国寓言故事中“曾子”的品质；2以约120个词，从“曾子”或者“曾子之妻”的行为任选一个角度发表你的看法，并包括如下要点：(1)你认为“曾子”或者“曾子之妻”的不同的做法对孩子的教育会导致的结果是什么样的，并说出理由；(2)叙述你一次诚实守信的经历，并谈谈你的感受。【写作要求】1可以使用实例来支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容论述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子； 2标题自定。 【参考范文】Stick to what you promiseAs described in the passage，Mr. Zeng firmly kept
24、his wifes promise to his child，from which we learn that Mr.Zeng is worth depending on and good at educating children.I cant agree more with Mr.Zengs education method.Had I been his child，I would have formed a deep impression on it and gradually cultivated this quality.Just as an old saying goes，“Act
25、ion speak louder than words.”If our parents themselves can do what they promise，we are likely to follow them.The passage so well retained me the remembrance of an experience.Once，I made a promise to myself that I wouldnt play basketball that week.Nevertheless，it is so fascinating that I even tried to persuade myself to enjoy it.In time，I resisted the temptation and kept my promise.Since then，I have realized that it is keeping our promise that makes us feel a sense of fulfillment and wins respect from others.So，please stick to your promise.【导学号：36742187】
