1、Section_Writing_an_observational_journal学范文背佳句它山之石,可以攻玉范文诠释教材原文名师论道Week 1 The daffodil bulbs have been planted side by side in soil, with the pointed ends facing up.Water has been added and the container was put in a cool,dark place.The bulbs are being watered regularly.Week 3A single stem has sprou
2、ted from each of the bulbs.On each stem are two leaves,which are long and narrow with a waxy texture.The container has been moved to a sunny, but cool place.Week 6The stems have grown to around 20 centimetres tall and each has produced a single flower.The flowers are yellow and white,and shaped like
3、 trumpets.使用with复合结构作状语,使句式表达更加简洁。使用被动语态,使表达富于变化。使用非限制性定语从句,生动地描写出叶子的形态。使用并列连词and连接上下两句话,使表达衔接自然、流畅。学结构前段生长周期所见或所做中段生长周期所见或所做后段生长周期所见或所做佳句背诵1.It grows 10 to 40 feet high and has enormous, broad green leaves that are sometimes 10 feet long.它长到10到40英尺高,有时有10英尺长的宽大的绿叶。2Another stem, which grows through
4、 the hollow stem, bears the flowers and the fruits.另一根茎,长在中空的茎上,结出花朵和果实。3As it grows it slowly unfolds and shows about 100 small blossoms, which are long and narrow and grow together in clusters or groups.随着它的生长,它慢慢地展开,开出大约100朵小花,这些花又长又窄,簇生在一起。4On each stem are two leaves, which are long and narrow
5、with a waxy texture.每个茎上有两片叶子,又长又窄,有如蜡一般的质地。5Each bunch is called a “hand” because it looks almost like a hand with the separate bananas like fingers.每一串都被称为一只“手”,因为它看起来就像一只手,分开的香蕉就像手指一样。仿佳作找差距巧借外力,事半功倍题目要求仔细观察下列有关竹子种植的图画,写一篇有关竹子成长的观察日记。仿写步骤Step 1一仿结构布局合理 第一段:植物的前段生长周期所见或所做:在每个花盆的中央种上一粒种子,然后加水。把花盆放置
6、在间接日照1216小时的地方。给每个花盆每天浇水。芽从土里冒出来。第二段:植物的中段生长周期所见或所做:茎上有几片又长又窄的叶子。花盆被放置在间接日照至少6小时的地方。第三段:植物的后段生长周期所见或所做:茎已经长到大约30厘米高,每个茎上都有一些绿叶。竹子从花盆中移植到开阔的土壤中。竹子一周浇水23次。Step 2二仿语言规范美观 1在每个花盆的中央种上一粒种子。(in the center of)A_single_seed_has_been_planted_in_the_center_of_each_pot.2加水,把花盆放置在间接日照1216小时的地方。这样做的目的是防止种子被晒伤。(a
7、dd, protect . from ., 非限制性定语从句)Water_has_been_added_and_the_pots_were_put_in_a_spot_with_1216_hours_of_indirect_sunlight,_the_purpose_of_which_is_to_protect_the_seeds_from_burning.3每个花盆每天都浇水。(daily)Each_pot_has_been_watered_daily.4茎上有几片叶子,叶子又长又窄。(倒装句)On_the_stem_are_several_leaves,_which_are_long_an
8、d_narrow.5花盆被放置在间接日照至少6小时的地方。(at least)The_pots_have_been_placed_in_a_location_with_at_least_6_hours_of_indirect_sunlight.6直接照射的阳光会灼伤竹子幼苗。(burn)Direct_sun_will_burn_the_bamboo_seedlings.7确保植物得到半阳半阴的环境。(make sure)Make_sure_that_the_plants_get_about_half_sun,_half_shade.8它的茎已经长到大约30厘米高,每个茎上都有许多绿叶。(a n
9、umber of)The_stems_have_grown_to_around_30_centimetres_tall_and_each_has_a_number_of_green_leaves.9竹子已经从花盆中移植到开阔的土壤中。(transplant)The_bamboo_plants_have_been_transplanted_from_pots_to_open_soil.10新种的竹子每周要浇水23次。(被动语态)The_new_bamboo_plants_are_watered_23_times_a_week.Step 3三仿句间过渡自然 1把句6和句7用适当的连接词进行合理地过
10、渡。Direct_sun_will_burn_the_bamboo_seedlings,so_make_sure_that_the_plants_get_about_half_sun,_half_shade.2把句9和句10合并为并列句。The_bamboo_plants_have_been_transplanted_from_pots_to_open_soil_and_the_new_bamboo_plants_are_watered_23_times_a_week.Step 4誊写 Week 1A_single_seed_has_been_planted_in_the_center_of_
11、each_pot.Water_has_been_added_and_the_pots_were_put_in_a_spot_with_1216_hours_of_indirect_sunlight,the_purpose_of_which_is_to_protect_the_seeds_from_burning.Each_pot_has_been_watered_daily.Before_long,_the_sprouts_start_to_pop_out_of_the_soil.Week 5To_my_delight,_on_the_stem_are_several_leaves,_whic
12、h_are_long_and_narrow.The_pots_have_been_placed_in_a_location_with_at_least_6_hours_of_indirect_sunlight.Direct_sun_will_burn_the_bamboo_seedlings,_so_make_sure_that_the_plants_get_about_half_sun,_half_shade.Week 8The_stems_have_grown_to_around_30_centimetres_tall_and_each_has_a_number_of_green_leaves.The_bamboo_plants_have_been_transplanted_from_pots_to_open_soil_and_the_new_bamboo_plants_are_watered_23_times_a_week.