1、2014高考英语专题（20）书面表达（2）（答案）第三部分写 作专题二十书面表达第一讲提纲式书面表达(文字信息类)角度1 记叙文Passage 1(2013福建)孩子的成长和教育是社会热议的话题，现今父母包揽一切、孩子过度依赖等现象十分严重。请阅读下面的漫画，按要求用英文写一篇短文。内容要求：1描述漫画内容；2分析漫画揭示的问题；3提出你的看法。注意：1.短文开头已给出，不计入总词数；2考生可适当发挥，使文章内容充实、连贯；3词数120左右。参考词汇：铺路pave the wayFrom the picture we can see a family of three walking on a
2、 long red carpet. 【思路点拨】漫画反映了当今家庭“以孩子为中心，父母是臣仆”这一社会现象，发人深省。文章应分为三段，一是描述图画内容，二是揭示本质，三是提出自己的看法并提出合理建议。【范文赏读】From the picture we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet.The son，well dressed，waves proudly in the middle while the father behind bends forward to hold the jacket and the mothe
3、r in front rolls out the carpet，sweating.It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that children are the focus of families，shouldering the hope of their parents.Parents arrange everything for their children and spare no effort to pave the way for their success.As a consequence，children become so reliant
4、 on their parents that they have no independent thought or creative ideas.Such a situation is of great concern.In my opinion，overprotection and too much care are extremely bad for childrens development.Instead of doing everything for them，parents should encourage their children to overcome difficult
5、ies and inspire them to develop by themselves.Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful.【亮点揭示】本文覆盖全部写作要点，语言规范，论证有力，是难得的佳作。写作亮点：一是段落清晰，首段描述漫画内容，第二段深入分析其社会、家庭原因，第三段提出针对性很强的建议。二是高级词汇和短语俯拾皆是，如proudly，sweating，nowadays，shouldering，independent，overprotection，extremely
6、，reliant on，spare no effort以及of great concern等。三是复杂句式应用得当，如第一段中的sweating和第二段中的shouldering the hope的非谓语作伴随状语，so reliant on their parents that.引导结果状语从句，Only in this way.构成的倒装句式等。四是衔接自然：第一段while表示前后对比，第二段的as a consequence，第三段的in my opinion，instead of都为本文增色不少。Passage 2(2013江苏)请根据你对以下两幅图的理解，以“Actions Spe
7、ak Louder than Words”为题，用英语写一篇作文。参考词汇：banner(横幅)stump(树桩)你的作文应包括以下内容：1简要描述两幅图的内容；2概述你对两幅图中不同做法的理解；3举例说明两幅图对你的启示。注意：1可参照图片适当发挥；2作文词数150左右；3作文中不得提及有关考生个人身份的任何信息，如校名、人名等。Actions Speak Louder than Words 【思路点拨】此篇书面表达要求我们运用夹叙夹议的写作手法：第一段我们先对两幅图进行简单的描述；第二段对图片内容进行分析；最后一段将分析的结果运用到我们生活实际当中，此段是重点，应当多用一些笔墨。【范文赏读
8、】Actions Speak Louder than WordsPeople celebrate Earth Day differently.In Picture 1，a man is trying to put up a banner on a lonely tree surrounded by stumps，but in vain，while Picture 2 shows a couple happily planting trees.The message conveyed here is clear：“Actions speak louder than words.”Our eart
9、h is suffering severe damage.Should we just pay lip service or take practical measures to protect it？The answer is definitely the latter.Immediate actions should be taken，like stopping cutting down trees to better the environment.Actions are important in other fields，too.Instead of shouting empty sl
10、ogans，it is more meaningful to donate books and sports goods to children in need.We should strictly and voluntarily follow traffic rules，stopping at the red light rather than complaining about traffic jams.Only when we match our words with actions can we make a difference in whatever we hope to acco
11、mplish.【亮点揭示】本文语言规范，条理清楚，脉络清晰。过渡性词汇In Picture 1，while Picture 2等的使用使文章内容更连贯，逻辑更严密。每段的第一句都是此段的主题句，这使文章看起来重点突出。最后一段中的“stopping at the red light rather than complaining about traffic jams”(现在分词短语作状语)和“Only when we match our words with actions can we make a difference in whatever we hope to accomplish.”
12、(倒装和宾语从句)是此篇文章高级句式的亮点。Passage 3(2013北京)假设你是红星中学高三(1)班的学生李华，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，用英语写一篇周记。记述爸爸出差期间，妈妈生病，你照顾她的过程。注意：1.周记的开头已经为你写好。2词数不少于60。Last Monday， 【思路点拨】四幅图是一个完整的小故事，因而内容要点中应包括告别、生病、照顾、夸奖四个要点。时态要用一般过去时，人称为第一人称。【范文赏读】Last Monday，my father said goodbye to my mother and me and went on a business trip.He wo
13、uld be away for three days.Just the next morning，I found my mother wasnt feeling well.She had a cold.I immediately went to get her some medicine and then prepared some noodles for her.With my special care，my mother recovered quickly.When my father came back home，my mother told him what had happened.He praised me for what I had done.I feel very happy that I have done something for my mother.【亮点揭示】短文恰如其分地运用想象和过渡巧妙地将四幅图贯穿起来。本文句式灵活，长短句交替使用，语言地道优美。
