1、第五篇 书面表达 明确标准、升级表达,助你妙笔生花(1)高屋建瓴明晰评分原则与标准 6步写作成篇【高考写作阅卷评分原则与标准】(一)评分原则1.本题总分为25分,按5个档次给分。2.评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次,最后给分。3.词数少于80个或多于120个的,从总分中减去2分。4.评分时应注意的主要内容:内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的连贯性。5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。(二)评分标准第五档(21-25分):完全完成了试题规定的任务,
2、完全达到了预期的写作目的。1.覆盖所有内容要点。2.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。3.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误,主要是由于尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇;具备较强的语言运用能力。4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。第四档(16-20分):完全完成了试题规定的任务,达到了预期的写作目的。1.虽漏掉1、2个次重点,但覆盖所有主要内容。2.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。3.语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确,些许错误主要是由于尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇。4.应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑。第三档(11-15分):基本完成了试题规定的任务,整体而言,基本达到了预期的写作目
3、的。1.虽漏掉一些内容,但覆盖所有主要内容。2.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。3.有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,但不影响理解。4.应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文内容连贯。第二档(6-10分):未恰当完成试题规定的任务,信息未能清楚地传达给读者。1.漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容,写了一些无关内容。2.语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。3.有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响了对写作内容的理解。4.较少使用语句间的连接成分,内容缺少连贯性。第一档(1-5分):未完成试题规定的任务,信息未能传达给读者。1.明显遗漏主要内容,写了一些无关内容,原因可能是未理解试题要求。2.语法结构单调、词汇项
4、目有限。3.较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误,影响对写作内容的理解。4.缺乏语句间的连接成分,内容不连贯。(2020全国卷)假定你是李华,你和同学根据英语课文改编了一个短剧。给外教Miss Evans写封邮件,请她帮忙指导。邮件内容包括:1.剧情简介;2.指导内容;3.商定时间地点。注意:1.词数100个左右;2.结束语已为你写好。高考阅卷评分掌握高分标准【五档作文写作】Dear Miss Evans,I am Li Hua,one of your students.I am writing to ask for your guidance on a short play,which is ada
5、pted from one of our texts.The text we have chosen is titled The Story of Atlanta.It tells a story about a girl in ancient Greece named Atlanta,whose father held a race to decide who could marry this beautiful princess.Weve made up most of the story,but we need you to give some expert guidance on so
6、me details,such as dialogues between characters,body-action,plots,history information,background musicand so on.Could we meet in our school art hall at 8:00 a.m.this Sunday if it is convenient for you?We sincerely hope you can do us this favour and help improve our performance.I am looking forward t
7、o your reply.Yours,Li Hua【四档作文写作】Dear Miss Evans,I am Li Hua.I am writing to ask for your guidance on a short play.We adapted it from one of our texts.The title of the text we adapted is The Story of Atlanta.It tells a story about a girl in ancient Greece,whose name is Atlanta.Her father held a race
8、 to decide who could marry this beautiful princess.We need you to give some expert guidance on the story that we made up.Could we meet in our school art hall at 8:00 a.m.this Sunday if it is convenient for you?Wed greatly appreciate it if youcould help improve our performance.I am looking forward to
9、 your reply.Yours,Li Hua【三档作文写作】Dear Miss Evans,I am Li Hua.I am writing to hope you can help us.We chose a text.Its title is The Story of Atlanta.It tells a story about a Greek girl.Her father held a race to look for the girls husband.We need you to help us on something that we are not sure of,for
10、example,the history.Because we really dont know the background history about the three gold apples.We hope to meet you in our school art hall at 8:00 a.m.this Sunday.We sincerely hope you can come at that time.I am looking forward to your reply.Yours,Li Hua(2020全国卷)上周末,你和同学参加了一次采摘活动。请你为班级英语角写一篇短文,介绍
11、这次活动,内容包括:1.农场情况;2.采摘过程;3.个人感受。注意:1.词数100个左右;2.题目已为你写好。题目:My Weekend写作思维模板6步完美成篇Step 1 三审定题:审体裁、人称、时态 体裁人称时态命题作文(格式与套用语,三段论)第一人称为主,第三人称为辅一般过去时Step 2 列明要点:全而不漏 1活动简要介绍(文章第一段)2农场情况第二段3采摘过程4个人感受5最后一段:结束套语Step 3 斟词酌句:列关键词、重点短语和重要句型 词汇experience,organize,scenery,pick,thrilled/excited,fruit,importance,ben
12、efit短语in the countryside,various/a variety of/a wide range of,be located in/lie in,on arriving,paid off/be worth it句型非谓语动词、倒装、强调、三大从句Step 4 衔接过渡:串词成句,联句成文 衔接词firstly/first of all,additionally/besides/whats more,moreover,furthermore过渡句on the way to the farm,on arriving the farm,during the processStep
13、 5 档次升级:高级词汇,句式灵活,长短结合 词汇提升(普通高级)1.know_ 2.have_3.see_4.excited/happy_5.many/a lot of_句子整合(简单复杂,主动被动,陈述倒装,动词/形容词抽象名词,分词短语从句)1.We gathered fresh fruit and learned._,but also learned.(陈述倒装)2.This activity was good for all the students.this activity,_.(定语从句代替)3.The farm lies in the suburbs of our city.
14、It has.The farm,_.(分词短语作状语)词汇提升1.experience e into view4.thrilled/delighted5.a wide range of/a wide variety of句子整合1.Not only did we gather fresh fruit2.which benefited all the students3.located in the suburbs of our city,has.Step 6 完美成篇:认真工整,誊写在卷In order to let us experience the life in the countrys
15、ide,our school organized a fruit-picking activity on a farm last weekend.On the way to the farm,fantastic scenery came into view,making the whole class thrilled.The farm,located in the suburb of our city,has a wide range of crops such as fruit and vegetables.On arriving the farm,our class were assig
16、ned to pick grapes.During the process,the farmers explained to us a lot about the fruit we picked.Although our clothes were wet with sweat,we didnt mind it atall because it paid off.Not only did we gather fresh fruit,but also learned the importance of hard work.We all hoped our school could organize
17、 more activities like this one,which really benefited all the students.【考场演练提升实战素养】Test 1 假定你是李华,你写信邀请朋友Henry参加China Daily为庆祝中华人民共和国成立72周年举办的艺术展。内容包括:1.作品类别:摄影、书画、诗歌等 2.截止日期:9月9日 3.投稿邮箱: 注意:1.词数100个左右;2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。参考词汇:中华人民共和国成立the founding of the Peoples Republic of ChinaTest 1Dear Henry,China
18、 Daily is going to hold an art exhibition on its web page to celebrate the 72nd anniversary of the founding of the Peoples Republic of China.I bet youll be excited at the news,since you have such a keen interest in China and Chinese culture.The details are as follows.Your works can either be photos,
19、paintings,calligraphy,poetry or something else with the theme of China in your eyes.I remember you have taken some fantastic pictures,most of which are exactly on that theme.This is surely a good opportunity for you.If you want to participate,you can send your works to news before the deadline Septe
20、mber 9th.Looking forward to hearing from you soon.Yours sincerely,Li HuaTest 2 假定你是李华,最近,在英语课上学习了有关急救的一些常识,同学们都认为学校有必要提供相关课程,作为班长请你给校长写一封信,提出建议。内容包括:1.学习急救知识的意义;2.具体建议及原因;3.重申建议的重要性。注意:1.词数100个左右;2.可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。Test 2Dear Mr Principal,Our class has gained some knowledge about first aid.We are all
21、interested in it and feel that being able to give first aid when needed can make a difference before proper medical treatment is given.Therefore,we suggest that courses on first aid should be offered in our school.Posters about the treatment for different injuries can be put up in our campus.Whats more,our school can organize the rescue drills to provide a stage for students to practice and gain experience in first aid.I believe having a knowledge of first aid is of vital importance.I would appreciate it if you could take our suggestions into consideration.Best regards!Yours sincerely,Li Hua