1、第21讲 书面表达二经典精讲(下)题一：下面四幅图片描述的是李明和爷爷从养鸟到放鸟的一段经历。请根据图片所提供的信息以第三人称用英语写一篇短文。注意：短文必须包括所有图片的主要内容，短文的内容要连贯、完整；短文单词数：100左右（开头已给出的单词不计入单词总数）。 题二：假定你是许晨，请根据下面的图画内容，叙述你和林昊上星期日外出时遇到的一件事。 注意：1. 写作必须用第一人称；2. 词数在100左右。题三：请根据下面提示，写一篇短文，词数不少于50。题四：请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于50。In your English class, your teacher shows you t
2、he following picture. Youre asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it. 参考词汇：cactus 仙人掌（可数名词）第21讲 书面表达二经典精讲(下)主讲教师：林斌 北京八十中学英语高级教师题一： One Monday morning, Li Ming and his grandpa were feeding the bird in the cage. The bird was unhappy though it had enough feed and water. Li Ming
3、did not know why.The next morning on his way to school, Li Ming saw some birds flying in the sky. Then be thought of the lonely bird in the cage, He decided to persuade his grandpa to set the bird free. When he got home, he said to his grandpa ,“Birds also need friends!” To his delight, his grandpa
4、agreed.The bird was set free. Grandpa and the children were very happy to see the bird flying away into the sky.点评：本文有如下的优点：叙述完整，包括了所有的要点；语言简明，过渡自然，结构紧凑，行文流畅。 题二：Last Sunday my classmate, Lin Hao, and I went to the bookstore. At a counter we noticed that a foreigner was asking a man for help, but th
5、e man didnt know a word of English. So we went up to him and offered help. After knowing what he really wanted, we took him to the counter where tapes and disks of Chinese folk music are sold and gave him some advice on which to choose. With our help, the foreign guest got some music tapes. He gave
6、his hearty thanks to us and left.Though it took us some time to help him, we were happy anyway.点评：本文包括了图中所有的情节并且符合记叙文的写作要求；本文使用了较多的语法结构，使得文章的表达手段丰富多彩。如：At a counter we noticed that a foreigner was asking a man for help, but the man didnt know a word of English.（but连接的并列句，一个并列分句中含有that引导的宾语从句）；After
7、knowing what he really wanted, we took him to the counter where tapes and disks of Chinese folk music are sold and gave him some advice on which to choose.（含有what引导的宾语从句，含有的定语从句，含有疑问词which+不定式作宾语）；Though it took us some time to help him, we were happy anyway.（含有though引导的让步状语从句）题三：As is shown in the
8、picture, a boy is shouting at his dad, who looks upset and doesnt know what to do with his son. Their relationship seems difficult.The picture reminds me of one of the problems that many families with teenagers face. Although it seems that the kid does not respect his dad, it is their communication
9、that has gone wrong. A good relationship between a parent and a child requires much effort to make it strong. Open and frank communications help to ensure parents and their children stay close together.So why dont the dad and his son sit together, face to face, calm down and talk through their probl
10、ems? This way, I believe that they will gradually have a positive relationship and become the father and son that we all really admire. 点评：本文有如下的亮点：1.本文结构合理、脉络清晰：作者首先描述图画中的内容，然后解释自己对这幅画的理解，把图片和生活结合起来，谈论图片的深层意义。2.使用了高级词汇和短语，如shout at, remind sb. of sth., face, respect, communication ,go wrong ,ensure
11、, face to face, calm down等。4.使用了复合句，如As is shown in the picture（as引导的非限制性定语从句），who looks upset and doesnt know what to do with his son（who引导的非限制性定语从句）, Although it seems that the kid does not respect his dad (although引导的让步状语从句)等。题四： Looking at the picture, I can see two cactuses growing in a large a
12、rea of desert. The mother cactus is holding an umbrella to protect the baby cactus from the baking sun. But against her good wish, the baby cactus is bending down and turning weak in the shade of the umbrella. This makes me think of what happens in our daily life. Like the mother cactus in the pictu
13、re, parents are making every effort to create a comfortableenvironment for their children. But unfortunately, they have forgotten one important fact. No one can grow up without experiencing pain and difficulties. Too much protection from parents has a side effect on children. Just like the baby cact
14、us in the picture, how can it grow up healthily without sunlight? So parents, please throw the umbrella away. Let children face whatever may lie ahead of them so that they will be able to grow naturally.点评：本文有如下的亮点：1.本文结构合理、脉络清晰：作者首先描述图画中的内容，然后解释自己对这幅画的理解，把图片和生活结合起来，谈论图片的深层意义。2.使用了非谓语动词，如Looking at the picture，to create a comfortable environment for their children等。 3.使用了高级词汇和短语，如protectfrom, bend down, in the shade of , think of, make every effort等。4.使用了过渡词，如but, so等。5.使用了复合句，如what引导的宾语从句、so that引导的状语从句等。