1、写作进阶提升之五教你如何行文及润色写作进阶提升五个步骤1、审题（文体、主题、内容、人称、时态）2、提炼要点，思考关键词3、紧扣要点，连词成句4、连句成文：主语和谓语背景（增加时间、地点条件等）逻辑关系开头与结尾5、检查修改，规范抄写语篇衔接 Some students think it is not good for people to keep pets in cities,because it will cause pollution to our environment.And the pets always make a noise that will disturb others.H
2、owever,others think we should see the positive aspectsof keeping animals.It is very necessary for the lonely old people to have company and pets can be a good choice.If we can get on well with the animals,it will enrich our life,too.I think if we really love animals,we neednt show our love to them b
3、y keeping them,because the pets are not free and its not fair to the animals.If we donate the money used in keeping pets to some animal organizations,it will be more helpful to the animals.(By Dong Shuoyi)Some say that dogs make a big noise in the community,and sometime they even hurt people.Besides
4、,animal drops also pollute the environment.They dont agree to have pets in cities.Although I admit all the disadvantages they mentioned,compared to the highlights,pets bring such shortcomings seem to be as small as a pencil tip.As we see,a lovely kitty always keeps the old in company.It may bring go
5、od health to the old,as well as joy.And nowadays the harmonious society is being constantly promoted.We humans should live with animal friends in harmony as well.Only in this way can we make our earth a paradise for all the living.So,choose an animal friend and be a friend to animals.(By Zhuang Chen
6、xi)1.增加较复杂的句子结构2.使用丰富的词汇3.适当运用结构词和关联词:however,therefore,thus,after a while,all of asudden,at last,as a result,in fact 等,使句子 更为流畅。As far as I am concerned,I strongly hold the opinionthat this plan should be carried out continually not onlybecause it gives us more space to develop our criticalthinking
7、 and independent ability but also because wereally feel much happier than ever before.书面表达注意事项My parents praised Ah Fu warmly.It had bravely saved mylittle sister.My parents praised Ah Fu warmly.It was our brave Ah Fuwho had bravely saved my little sister.I met an old friend in the street.The street
8、 was very crowded.I met an old friend in the street,which was very crowded.We can make progress in English only in this way.Only in this way can we make progress in English.(1)强调句(2)倒装句(3)复合句(4)介词短语My mother sat in a chair with a newspaper in her hand.My mother sat in a chair.There was a newspaper i
9、n her hand.（with 复合结构）She left and did not say goodbye.She left without saying goodbye.(5)分词短语Satisfied with the result,he decided to go on with a new experiment.He was satisfied with the result,so he decided to go on with a new experiment.（分词做状语）并列and;as well as;also;选择or;eitheror;or else;otherwise
10、 原因because;owing to;due to;on account of;thanks to 结果so;therefore;thus;as a result 时间when;soon after;before;later;first;and then;next;finally;afterwards.比较on the contrary;on the other hand;like 转折but;yet;however;although;in spite of;instead;递进besides;moreover;even;in addition 举例for example/instance;
11、such as;that is;namely ;总结after all ;in short;in general;generally speaking 语篇衔接的过渡词语润色提升示例 你的英国朋友正在做一个课题；世界各地的生日庆祝方式。他请你介绍中国学生过生日的方式。请你根据以下要点写一篇短文：一、通常方式 1生日聚会 2生日礼物 3生日祝福 二、我认为更有意义的庆祝方式和理由 *词数100-120 1729即时训练你班同学参加了“二十一世纪中学生英文报组织的一场讨论。讨论的主题是:城市内是否可以豢养宠物(狗和猫)。请你根据下表所提供的信息，用英语给报社投稿，介绍讨论情况，并说明自己的观点和建
12、议。反对饲养宠物的同学认为支持饲养宠物的同学认为造成环境污染安慰孤寡老人吵闹声，甚至伤人人与动物和谐相处，增添生活情趣注意：1.信的开头已为你写好;2.词数100左右。Recently we have had a heated discussion on whether people should keep pets at home in cities.书面表达（满分30分）饲养宠物keep pets污染环境pollute the environment吵闹声，甚至伤人be noisy and may even attack people安慰孤寡老人give lonely elderly people comfort和谐相处live in harmony with增添生活情趣add fun to.