1、返回目录 The Violence of Nature Module 3 返回目录 Section Writing 描述自然灾害事件的记叙文返回目录 写作技法指导佳作构建示例目录Contents 返回目录 写作技法指导写此类文章应注意以下几点:1要交代自然灾害爆发的时间、地点、情形、经过、成因、最后造成的损失及危害,有时也有必要交代救灾人员的情况。2有时也可以按照说明文的方法来写,介绍地理原因、发生的过程、造成的灾害,以及人类对这种自然灾害的认识和预防。返回目录 一、基本结构在结构上通常分三部分来写。第一部分:指明什么地方发生了什么自然灾害。第二部分:具体描写自然灾害造成的损失。第三部分:表达
2、自己的希望。返回目录 二、增分佳句1表示某地遭受自然灾害:Last week,an earthquake hit the placeLast month,a flood attacked the area2表示造成损害:It did great harm toIt was harmful toIt destroyed返回目录 3表达希望:I do hopeHoping thatI sincerely hope that返回目录 佳作构建示例题目要求2013 年 7 月 22 日,我国甘肃省发生一次地震。请根据以下信息写一篇英语短文,简单描述一下这次地震。1地震发生在上午 7 时 45 分;2交
3、通阻塞,水电供应中断;3造成近百人死亡,千余人受伤。注意:1.词数 100 左右;2可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。返回目录 审题谋篇第一步:审题构思很关键一、审题1确定体裁:本文为描写自然灾害的_;2确定人称:本文的主要人称为_;3确定时态:以_为主。记叙文第三人称一般过去时返回目录 二、构思第一部分:开门见山点明 2013 年 7 月 22 日,甘肃省发生了一次地震。第二部分:详细描述地震的情况。第三部分:表达自己的祝愿。返回目录 第二步:核心词汇想周全1_ 严重的2_ 攻击,袭击3_ 省4_ 出乎意料地,意外地5_ 损害6_ 成千上万的7_ 无家可归的8_ 阻塞9_ 供应10_ 重建ser
4、iousattackprovinceunexpectedlydo harm tothousands ofhomelessblocksupplyrebuild返回目录 第三步:由词扩句雏形现1众所周知,2013 年 7 月 22 日 7 点 45 分在我国甘肃省发生了一次严重的地震。(it 作形式主语)2更多的人无家可归,交通堵塞,供水和供电被切断。(被动语态;并列句)Its known to all that a serious earthquake attacked ourGansu Province unexpectedly at a quarter to eight oclock,Jul
5、y 22,2013.More people were made homeless,and the traffic wasblocked and the supply of water and electricity was cut off.返回目录 3地震发生后,全国各地的人们帮助受灾地区的人们重建他们的新家。(状语从句;take place)4如果我们所有人都给予帮助,我们相信他们将克服困难并将不久过上幸福的生活。(状语从句;宾语从句)After the earthquake,people all over China helped peoplein the disaster area to
6、 rebuild their new homes.We believe,if all of us give our help,they will overcomethe difficulties and will live a happy life soon.返回目录 第四步:句式升级造亮点1用 as 引导定语从句改写句 12把句 3 改写成简单句As we all know,a serious earthquake attacked our GansuProvince unexpectedly at a quarter to eight oclock,July 22,2013.After t
7、he earthquake,people all over China helped peoplein the disaster area to rebuild their new homes.返回目录 第五步:过渡衔接联成篇As we all know,a serious earthquake attacked our Gansu Province unexpectedly at a quarter to eight oclock,July 22,2013.It did great harm to the area.Nearly one hundred people lost their l
8、ives,and thousands of people were hurt.Whats worse,more people were made homeless,and the traffic was blocked and the supply of water and electricity was cut off.After the earthquake,people all over China helped people in the disaster area to rebuild their new homes.We believe,if all of us give our help,they will overcome difficulties and will live a happy life soon.