1、Unit 3 Faster higher strongerSection Writing上周六,我去学校操场观看了我们学校一年一度的 4 100米接力锦标赛的决赛。这是一次非凡的经历,我永远都不会忘记。比赛前,每个人都很安静。我从来没有想到运动会的气氛会这么紧张。当运动员起跑后,大家都狂热起来了!我们都站起来,加油助威,赛场上充斥着紧张与兴奋。我看得出运动员们拼命地跑,同时尽量在交接棒时避免把接力棒掉在地上。比赛在一分钟内就结束了。第一个跑过终点线的是李冲,他是我们学校跑得最快的学生。大家都站起来,欢呼呐喊。我也沉浸在兴奋和欢呼中,觉得我的肺都要炸了!能成为这一运动时刻的一部分,并享受它的速度
2、和激情,真是太棒了。上周末你们班参加了高中第一次学校运动会。你目睹了接力赛的激动时刻,请你用英语为校刊写一篇短文,并表达你的感受。词数80左右。写作指导介绍一个运动时刻属于记叙文的范畴。时间、地点、人物要介绍清楚、明了。写作重心应放在运动过程(激动时刻)上,文末要简明扼要地写出感受。审题谋篇词汇储备1.take part in参加2.start with以开始3.the opening ceremony开幕式4.an exciting competition(event)激动人心的比赛(项目)5.leave sb. a deep impression给某人留下深刻的印象6.applause鼓掌
3、7.cheer for sb.为某人加油助威8.announce公布,宣布9.to ones delight令某人高兴的是10.a precious memory珍贵的记忆词汇运用1.上周末,我们参加了进入高中以来的第一次运动会。Last weekend, we took part in our first sports meeting in high school.2.首先是开幕式。It started with the opening ceremony.3.我们大家都跟着班长,排队进入运动场。We all followed our monitor and stepped into the
4、playground in line.4.开幕式后,激动人心的比赛开始了。After the opening ceremony, the exciting competition began.5.最激动人心的是接力赛,它给我们留下了深刻的印象。 The most exciting event was the relay race and it left us a deep impression.6.我们为运动员鼓掌欢呼,一些人举起相机捕捉激动人心的时刻。We applauded and cheered for the athletes and some raised their cameras
5、 to capture the exciting moments.7.最后,比赛结果宣布了。Finally, the result was announced.8.令我们高兴的是,我们班得了第一名。To our delight, our class won first place.9.这次运动会将成为我们所有人的珍贵回忆。This sports meeting will be a precious memory for all of us.句式升级1.用which引导的非限制性定语从句合并第1、2句。Last weekend, we took part in our first sports
6、meeting in high school, which started with the opening ceremony.2.将第3句改为含有现在分词短语作状语的句子。All of us stepped into the playground in line, following our monitor.3.将第5句改为含有定语从句的主从复合句。The most exciting event was the relay race, which left us a deep impression.4.将第8句改为含有what引导的主语从句的主从复合句。What made us deligh
7、ted was that our class won first place.串句成文Last weekend, we took part in our first sports meeting in high school, which started with the opening ceremony. All of us stepped into the playground in line, following our monitor. After the opening ceremony, the exciting competition began. The most exciti
8、ng event was the relay race, which left us a deep impression. We applauded and cheered for the athletes and some raised their cameras to capture the exciting moments. Finally, the result was announced. What made us delighted was that our class won first place. I believe this sports meeting will be a
9、 precious memory for all of us.(2020山东泰安期中)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。At first, Michael Surrell didnt see the black smoke or flames shooting from the windows of his neighbors home. He and his wife had just parked around the corner from their own house in Allentown, Pennsylvania, when they
10、got a call from one of his daughters: “The house next door is on fire! ” He went to investigate. Thats when he saw a woman crying desperately on their porch(走廊).“The babys in there! ” the woman cried. Though the fire department had been called, Surrell, then 64, instinctively ran inside. “The baby”
11、was 8-year-old Tiara Roberts, the womans granddaughter.“Entering the burning house was like running into a bucket of black paint,” Surrell said. The thick smoke caused him to stumble blindly around, burned his eyes, and made it impossible to breathe. The conditions would have been dangerous to anyon
12、e, but for Surrell, who has chronic obstructive pulmonary disease(慢性阻塞性肺病), they were life-threatening.After a few minutes in the smoke-filled house, he retreated outside to catch his breath. Surrell knew he couldnt hold his breath for long. Taking a deep breath, he went in a second time. The darkne
13、ss was overwhelming. Yet because the house had a similar layout(布局)to his, he found the stairs and made it to the second floor. He turned to the right and was met by intense heat. He was already out of breath.His throat and lungs burned as if hed breathed in fire instead of the smoke and soot in the
14、 air. Every blink stung his eyes. All he could hear was the crackling and popping of burning wood. Then a soft but distinct moan(呻吟声) emerged. Still unable to see, Surrell fell to his knees on the hot wood floor. He crawled toward the sound, feeling around for any sign of the girl.注意:续写词数应为150左右。Par
15、agraph 1:Finally, he touched somethinga shoe, then an ankle.He pulled Tiara toward him. Her body was weak and she wasnt breathing. He hugged her into his arms and stood. He felt the heat of the flames on his cheeks. Turning, he fought through the smoke and ran blindly into the blackness. Surrell put
16、 Tiara down on the porch. He gave her mouth-to-mouth resuscitation. Soon she opened her eyes and took a breath on her own. However, Surrell fell to the ground and lost consciousness.Paragraph 2:Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.He suffered severe burns. He spent over a week in t
17、he hospital. The fire worsened Surrells disease. As a result, it would take a long time for him to recover. “Its a small price to pay,” he said proudly. “Id do it again without hesitation and wouldnt give it a second thought.”写作指导Step 1把握主题,确定思路主旨大意:这是一篇记叙文。文章讲述了Michael Surrell家邻居的房子着火了,邻居家的孙女被困火场,M
18、ichael Surrell虽然有慢性阻塞性肺病,但他还是义无反顾地冲进火场救出了邻居的孙女,自己也受伤了。续写思路:克服大火及自身患病的困难,把Tiara救出来,及主人公受伤住院醒来后的心理活动。Step 2拓展情节,选词构句 (1)根据续写第一段的提示句(Finally, he touched somethinga shoe, then an ankle.)及文章最后一段最后一句 “He crawled toward the sound, feeling around for any sign of the girl.”,可以判断续写第一段应继续描写Michael Surrell为找到女孩
19、所做出的努力,以及找到女孩后的状态等。根据续写第二段提示句(Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.)可以判断第二段要描写Surrell救人后的心理活动。(2)分类选词人物:Surrell,Tiara;地点:the house,porch, floor;事件:not breathe, hug her, put her on the porch, give her mouth-to-mouth resuscitation, lose consciousness, suffer severe burns, worsen, rec
20、over。Step 3添加细节,注意风格(1)细节:注意动作、心理活动等细节的描绘。如:pull, breathe, hug, feel, fight through the smoke, put down, give sb. mouth-to-mouth resuscitation, open her eyes, proudly等。(2)写作风格:原文叙述语言比较朴实,多用简单句,适当使用少许简单的复合句及非谓语形式,没有使用高级复杂的词汇和句式。因此,续写也要以简单句为主,不必使用复杂的词汇和句式。Step 4润色成文,复查誊写 完成续写初稿后,学生要检查、修改、润色自己的作文。自查情节是否合理,结尾是否有创意;语法、词汇、人称、时态运用是否准确;是否有细节描写和品质词句。最后用工整、端正的字迹誊写,吸引阅卷教师的眼球。
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