1、2021届高考英语读后续写深度解读（五）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Daniel Hernandez always knew he wanted to help people. Before hed even graduated from high school, he trained to be a certified nursing assistant and volunteered at a nursing home. A big kid with a gentle, efficient manner, he learned to use needles
2、to draw blood, to lift patients in his strong arms, and to respond swiftly and calmly to every emergency.He never quite got around to taking the exam to become fully certified, though, because by then hed decided he wanted to work in public service. He felt inspired by the good that responsible lawm
3、akers can do, so in his junior year at the university, he declared a major in political science and began volunteering in political campaigns. One hero of his was his local congresswoman (国会女议员), Gabrielle Giffords, the kindest, warmest human being he thought he had ever met in his entire life.He wa
4、s overjoyed when he was picked for an internship (实习期) with her, and he gladly gave up a part-time sales job for the chance to work on her team. So eager was he that he started work four days earlier than he was supposed to. On Saturday morning, he arrived at his workplace, where about 30 people wer
5、e gathering to meet Giffords. It was Hernandezs job to sign people in and guide them into a queue in order to get each to have a photo taken with the congresswoman.At 10:10 a.m., Hernandez heard loud sounds. “Gun!” someone yelled. He heard people screaming and saw them falling to the ground. Hernand
6、ez was standing 30 feet away from Giffords when she fell down. In seconds, figuring there was danger to the congresswoman, he was at her side. Before the doctors came, Hernandez tried his best to remain calm at that fateful moment. Giffords was lying on the sidewalk with blood streaming down her fac
7、e from a bullet wound to her head. Gently, Hernandez lifted her into a sitting position against his shoulder so she wouldnt choke on her blood. Then, with his bare hand, he applied pressure to the wound on her forehead to stop the bleeding. 续写要求：1. 所续写短文词数应为150左右；2. 至少使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3. 续写部分分为两段
8、，每段的开头语已为你写好；4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Minutes later, ambulances and doctors arrived on the scene._Paragraph 2:Six out of nineteen victims died while Giffords, though seriously wounded, survived. _【思路点拨】1. 文本细解读，确定续写结局本文是一篇记叙文，讲述了一位有责任感和使命感的青年Daniel Hernandez高中毕业之前就参加了医护人员培训，还没有完全合格就投入了社
9、会服务（组织）。令他开心的是，实习期的他加入了他的偶像国会女议员Gabrielle Giffords的团队。一次枪击事件中，他沉着冷静、应对敏捷从容，挽救了他心目中的英雄国会女议员Gabrielle Giffords的故事。续写部分是救护车来之后他的做法（根据文章人物形象，他很有责任感、使命感，营救的又是他心目中的英雄，可以推知他必将尽力而为），以及营救成功之后的社会反响（借此升华人物品格，乐于助人，不图虚名）。2. 段首句解读，确定续写方向续写第一段首句写道“几分钟后，救护车和营救人员赶到现场”，第二段首句写道“十九个伤者中六人死亡，尽管Gabrielle Giffords伤势严重，却存活下
10、来”。由此可知，第一段应该描述救护车和救护人员到来之后，Daniel Hernandez没有推脱撒手，依旧尽自己之力帮助营救。第二段应该重点描述Gabrielle Giffords幸存之后，社会对英雄人物Daniel Hernandez的褒奖。3. 划线词解读，规划续写细节1）分类划线词人物Hernandez，Giffords，doctors事件emergency责任was supposed to状态swiftly，calm事物blood，life 称号hero2）构思具体细节第一段情节：几分钟后，救护车和营救人员赶到现场把Giffords放入救护车Hernandez在援救过程中一直陪伴，尽力
11、给Giffords安全感他所做的在危急（emergency）情况下很奏效。第二段情节：Gabrielle Giffords存活下来Hernandez受到褒奖Hernandez不视之为英雄（hero）事迹Hernandez认为医者 (doctors) 和公仆们在必要情况下理应舍身救人，升华文章主题。【范文欣赏】Paragraph 1:Minutes later, ambulances and doctors arrived on the scene. They gently put Giffords into one ambulance. Still Hernandez stayed with
12、her, holding her hand and talking to her constantly when she was conscious on the way to hospital. He told her not to be afraid and he would be with her until her husband came. He repeated she wouldnt be alone and would surely survive. His words were really helpful to her situation in that emergency
13、.Paragraph 2:Six out of nineteen victims died while Giffords, though seriously wounded, survived. Everything is OK now. Obviously, people give the credit to Hernandez who did quick and selfless actions. They are grateful Daniel Hernandez felt driven to be of service, but he himself refuses to mentio
14、n those horrible minutes. Actually, he doesnt see himself as a hero. He always thinks it a duty for doctors and public servants to spend their lives helping others, even if sometimes they give their lives that way. 亮点积累：1. 词汇：obviously adv. 显然、明显地；conscious adj. 神志清醒的；grateful adj. 感激的2. 短语：on the w
15、ay to 在去的路上；feel driven to do sth. 义不容辞做某事；see sb./sth. as 把看作；give the credit to. 归功于3. 提分句式： He always thinks it a duty for doctors and public servants to spend their lives helping others, even if sometimes they give their lives that way.分析 本句是一个主从复合句。主句中，think it a duty for sb. to sth.意为“认为做某事是某人
16、的职责所在”，spend ones life doing sth意为“倾注一生做某事”；even if 引导让步状语从句，表示“即便是”。译文 他认为医护人员和公仆们倾注一生帮助别人是职责所在，哪怕他们可能会因此牺牲。课后练习阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 A wave of loneliness overcame her. Had it really been 12 months since her darling Donald had died? This was the first time shed visited the beach and the ho
17、liday house they shared. The memories were overwhelming. She ran outside and didnt stop until she reached the surfs edge. Her eyes were innocent and starring out to sea. She wished life could be pre-packaged so that she could have it all.With Donald she thought she did. But that hadnt happened and n
18、ow it never would. Donald was dead. They had known each other for 20 years. No blonde babies would be born. Donald wouldnt age, or have grey hair. There would be no midlife crisis to overcome. No sunshine years or traveling.Irene had that all ahead of her, alone. She was very depressed. But she was
19、stronger than the pain she was feeling. She just needed a moment to remember all the good times they had shared.The shifting sands of time saw her as a lonely woman. Her whitened blonde hair had the first layer of silver. The wind whistled around her. “Is there someone who can rescue me, bring color
20、 into my world and remind me theres more to life than pain? Show me a sign, please.” she implored, sinking to her knees as tears ran down her cheeks.The sea surged (涌动), wetting her whole body. It was cold and powerful. The surge sucked the sand away from her toes. She could taste the salt as she li
21、cked her dry lips.The cold sea suddenly became cool and calm. Irene began breathing easier. She stopped and stepped water. Beside her a dolphin surfaced. He threw back his head and began babbling to her. Donalds spirit seemed to be telling her that everything would be okay. Just as he appeared the d
22、olphin disappeared.Irene swam strongly back to shore. She grabbed a stick and began writing on the sand. She wandered over to a rock and began sifting (过滤) the sand through her fingers. She scooped sand into her palm, then squeezed her fingers shut, trying to prevent it from dripping out. The sand t
23、o her left was like a blank page demanding to be remembered.续写要求： 1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右； 2. 至少使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1:She began crossing the sand covering it in footprints. Paragraph 2: The sun was hot on her face lifting her spirits as t
24、he breeze played with her hair. 【范文欣赏】Paragraph 1:She began crossing the sand covering it in footprints. Irene felt calm and in control. She felt the broken shells and rocks scratching her feet until she again reached smooth sand. She watched the sea-rolling wave after waves up onto the beach. She c
25、ould feel as though Donald was walking with her as the gulls yelled overhead. She could smell the seaweed and see the sea glittering.Paragraph 2:The sun was hot on her face lifting her spirits as the breeze played with her hair. Irene took one last look at the blue sea and surf as she slowly walked
26、back to the beach. She could feel the love all around her as she entered the front door. Love that lasts through everything, through pain, deception, even loss. She tasted its incredible power. Irene knew that Donalds loss had left a big hole in her heart but now believed she had the strength to survive. No longer would she avoid the places where they had spent so many happy hours. The sands of time had shifted. She had the strength to move on. No more mourning, it was time to celebrate the joy of being alive.