1、Section Writing an ending to a story 学范文背佳句它山之石，可以攻玉范文诠解教材原文名师论道Stepping out of jail into the cold wind, Bob, now 58, felt lost and helpless.“Twenty years is a long time，” he smiled bitterly, not knowing where to go.He had no family, and had never heard a word from Jimmy again since that cold, dark
2、night.“Was he ashamed of having a friend like me？”Bob longed for an answer.“Excuse me, sir, are you Bob? ”Bob heard the voice of a young man.“Yes.” He turned around and was surprised to find a familiarlooking man in his thirties.“Have we met before？”“No，sir，” replied the man.“My father told me to me
3、et you today.I have a note for you from him.”Doubtfully, Bob unfolded the note.His hands were shaking by the time he had finished reading.Bob, the doctor says Ive only got three months.Im afraid I wont be able to meet you this time, but youll always be my dear friend.Jimmy“Youre Jimmys son？！” Bob sh
4、outed in surprise.“Yes，sir，” the young man smiled. “And my name is Bob.”学语言本文是一篇读后续写，原文是欧亨利的二十年后，文章主要续写的是两个失去联系的好友是如何实现二十年之约的。范文中，作者添加了新的人物好友的儿子赴约给父亲送信，最终实现了两人的二十年之约。文章开头作者运用cold wind，cold, dark night等环境描写衬托出了主人公Bob的心境；运用心理描写表现出了主人公Bob的无助、无奈、困惑的心情；运用自言自语道出了主人公Bob对朋友的渴望以及对自己的自我安慰。最后，在朋友儿子出现后，作者通过shak
5、ing等动作描写表现出了主人公的感动之情；通过surprised，doubtfully, shouted等词对人物进行了生动地刻画。最后通过朋友儿子的自我介绍对文章主题进行升华，使文章回味无穷。学结构范文的主要线索为主人公Bob的情绪变化：lost and helplessnot knowing where to go surpriseddoubtfully shouted in surprise佳句背诵语言描写1.“Here, Mum! Here！” Reuben exclaimed as he ran to her side.“在这里，妈妈！这里！”鲁本一边跑向她一边大叫着。2.“How
6、can I let you throw away the thing that means the most to you？” I pleaded with him.“我怎么能让你丢掉对你来说最重要的东西呢？”我恳求他。3.“I havent finished; I need more time，” he begged.“Thats what Michelangelo said，” Mr Edgar joked.“我还没说完，我需要更多的时间，”他恳求道。“米开朗基罗就是这么说的，”埃德加先生开玩笑说。情感描写1.The smile on her face shone like a diamo
7、nd.她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发光。2.A smile of understanding flashed across his face.他脸上露出了一种会心的微笑。3.He stood silently, tears rolling down his cheeks.他静静地站着，眼泪顺着脸颊流了下来。心理描写1.I immediately picture/imagine him walking through the door, wearing a shining smile.我立刻想象出他面带微笑穿过门的样子。2.Most days I hope that maybe he will t
8、urn up at my doorstep one day.大多数时候，我都希望有一天他会出现在我的门口。3.He was determined to tell people the truth, but no one could hear his voice.他决心告诉人们真相，但是没有人能听到他的声音。动作描写1.Stunned, I stood up and gave her an awkward hug/hugged her in an awkward way.我惊呆了，站起来尴尬地拥抱了她。2.Speechless, she smiled radiantly and gathered
9、 her son into her arms.她说不出话来，把儿子一把揽入怀中，脸上洋溢着动人的光彩。3.Wanting to appear agreeable, I bent down, picked up the ball and, eyes halfshut, threw it back as hard as I could.我想显得和和气气，便弯下腰捡起球，半闭着眼睛，用尽全力把它扔了回去。仿佳作找差距巧借外力，事半功倍题目要求阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写一段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。When I was a teenager, I got a monthlong tr
10、ip in Berlin, Germany.One night, expecting to explore Berlin at night, I went out alone.I visited lots of major attractions around the city that night.When the exhaustion began to set in, I checked the time on my watch.I was surprised to see that it was two oclock in the morning!As I walked to a sub
11、way station, I realized that it was my dads birthday.This would be the first birthday I couldnt celebrate with him because he died a few months earlier.Before I could begin thinking of my dad, I heard train wheels stop.I rushed onto the train.At first, I was thankful to have made it onto the train.B
12、ut that joy quickly turned to panic when I noticed that the train was heading in the wrong direction!I looked around the nearly empty train.I saw a young woman sitting quietly by the window and approached her.“Hi, do you speak English? Im lost.Can you help me？” I asked.The woman understood.She told
13、me how to return to where I had first gotten on the train.But my anxious mind couldnt follow her guidance.Without thinking, I asked, “Can you come with me？”Her face froze at my stupid request.After a long second of hesitation, she agreed to help me.At that moment, I was grateful for the kindness fro
14、m a stranger.On the journey back to the train station I got on, she and I chatted. 语篇布局(1)已知线索：what, when, where, who, why, how等信息定位。作者心不在焉搭错地铁，请求一位女士将其送回，犹豫之后，女士答应帮忙，作者心存感激(2)续写线索：所给首句“On the journey back to the train station I got on, she and I chatted.”中的chat是我们的着手点。两人会交谈什么？如何交谈？我们如何去描写？最后又会如何？根据
15、原文作者因为想起父亲，心不在焉而搭错车，这可以作为两人交谈的内容，可以运用语言描写、动作描写等，使文章更加生动、形象。最后，作者可以抒发感想，使文章得到升华。参考范文：On the journey back to the train station I got on, she and I chatted.She asked why I was on the wrong train.Embarrassed, I told her that I was thinking my dad before the train arrived.“He died a few months ago, and t
16、oday it is his birthday，” I said quietly but tears began to fill in my eyes.Not knowing how to respond to my sadness, she patted me on the shoulder in sympathy.I was completely overwhelmed by the sudden warmth.Finally, we reached my stop.We said goodbye and went away in different directions.I havent seen her ever since, but the warmth from a stranger remains the same.