1、高考资源网（） 您身边的高考专家2012届高考英语考前冲刺精品复习讲义（北师大版）：写作（七）典例请根据以下要点，适当发挥，写一篇不少于120词的英语说明文。标题： Shopping on the Internet (网上购物)要点：1.网上购物已很普遍；2.网上购物的好处；3.网上购物的缺点。【写作策略】1.仔细审题：(1)体裁：提纲式作文 (2)时态：一般现在时 (3)人称：第三人称。2.确定结构：(1)概括网上购物现状普遍。(2)文章主体:网上购物的好处与缺点。3.筛选词汇：(shopping，advantages，on the Internet，with the development
2、 of 等)4.句型搜索：(All they need to do is.；The first.is that.等。)5.组句成篇：(常用The first，the second等。)【范文赏析】Shopping on the InternetWith the development of the Internet and the popularization of computers，shopping on the Internet has become more and more common in our daily life.Shopping on the Internet has a
3、 lot of advantages，of which the most important is perhaps its convenience.People dont have to waste a lot of their energy and precious time to go from one shop to another to choose the commodities they like.This is especially desirable to the old，the sick and the busy people who cannot go to the sho
4、ps in person.All they need to do is to sit in front of the computer and click the mouse.The goods they order will be delivered to them immediately.However，shopping on the Internet also has its disadvantages.The first disadvantage is that the consumers cannot see the goods or try them on in person.So
5、metimes，the real goods may not be the same as what have been seen on the computer.The second disadvantage is that some shops on the Internet are not registered.They will never deliver anything to you after they get the money from you.Once cheated，you will find that you have nowhere to go to complain
6、.【名师点评】开篇引出话题，比较级的叠用表明网上购物的发展趋势。非限制性定语从句，增强句与句之间的连贯性。强调进一步网上购物方便的特点。从内容上转折，过渡到论述网上购物的缺点。分别论述网购的缺点。总体评价：文章结构清晰，层次分明，内容丰富真实。最后，若再加总结性语言，则文章更加完美。【写作指导】Elegance(优雅)(原文)Soso(普通)(1)Shopping on the Internet has a lot of advantages，of which the most important is perhaps its convenience.Shopping on the Inter
7、net has a lot of advantages and one of them is perhaps its convenience.(2)This is especially desirable to the old，the sick and the busy people who cant go to the shops in person.This is liked by old people，sick people and busy people because they cant go to shops by themselves.(3)All they need to do
8、 is to sit in front of the computer and click the mouse.They only need to sit in front of the computer and click the mouse.(4)However，shopping on the Internet also has its disadvantages.But shopping on the Internet has its disadvantages，too.(5)Once cheated，you will find that you have nowhere to go t
9、o complain.If you are cheated，you will find that you cant go to anywhere to complain.【临摹翻译】1.范文佳句：With the development of the Internet and the popularization of computers，shopping on the Internet has become more and more common in our daily life.临摹翻译：随着社会的发展，网络在我们的生活中起着越来越重要的作用。With the development
10、of society，the Internet plays a more and more important role in our life.2.范文佳句：Shopping on the Internet has a lot of advantages，of which the most important is perhaps its convenience.临摹翻译：网上买书有很多优点，其中之一是有很多种类的书供你挑选。Buying books on the Internet has many advantages，one of which is that there are a la
11、rge number of books for you to choose from.3.范文佳句：All they need to do is to sit in front of the computer and click the mouse.临摹翻译： 你所有能做的就是向当地的工商部门投诉这件事。All_that_you_can_do_is_to_complain_to_the_business_management_department_about_it.4.范文佳句：However，shopping on the Internet also has its disadvantage
12、s.临摹翻译： 但是，网上交友也有一些不足。However，making friends online also has some disadvantages.5.范文佳句：The second disadvantage is that some shops on the Internet are not registered.临摹翻译： 问题是如果我们网上购物时被骗该怎么办。The_problem_is_what_we_should_do_if_we_are_cheated_when_shopping_online.6.范文佳句：Once cheated，you will find that you have nowhere to go to complain.临摹翻译： 一旦通过，这条法律将开始生效。Once approved，this law will come into effect.- 4 - 版权所有高考资源网