1、四川彭州市2016高考英语【二轮】写作品析（1）及参考范文书面表达。【高端点拨】每年高考后，我们一直在思索：英语高考中书面表达考什么、怎么考、如何写等系列高难表述问题。但是，通过与考生交流，我们发现他们的书面表达的思维能力并非不活跃，只是在他们的记忆库中存储的相应表达方式不足，或记忆有误，或根本是空白。拿到作文题目后，不愁没内容可写，只愁没词可用，或是写了不知是否正确，因此在表达过程中，要么被迫放弃，要么按照汉语的结构硬译，以致造成短文词不达意，错误地传递信息，分数也受到影响。针对考生在书面表达方面出现的问题，下面将谈谈高考书面表达的复习建议和答题技巧。一、复习建议（一）明确写作能力的培养和提
2、高是一个日积月累的过程。高考英语书面表达题是一项综合性的测试。要写好一篇短文，考生不仅要具备熟练的谴词、造句和谋篇能力，而且需要熟知不同的写作策略。如果从高三年级开始准备，则必须保证有科学、全面的训练计划和足量的写作实践，在这方面，笔者要求学生从认识句子成分，到谴词成句，到练习基本句式，再到语段语篇的这样一个过程。当然有些学生在这过程中也坚持写日记，然后笔者给他们都进行了详细批改。这样学生既听从了老师的安排和指导，也没有忽视自己的独立实践与总结。（二）注重平时的练笔。近几年考题的话题包括外国交换学生在华学习生活安排、少年健康问题、中学生业余生活、人们的生活变化、环境保护、中学生庆祝 2008年
3、奥运会申办、举办成功等。对于这些话题，每个考生都不会感到无话可说，只要平时认真进行一些写作实践，就不难具备应付这类话题所必要的写作能力。（三）明确写作方向。从近几年的情况来看，试题并没有特定的语篇或文体要求。虽然短文会用到记叙、说明或议论等表达方式，但这毕竟只是一个区区几十字的文段，远不足被称为记叙文、议论文、说明文或某种特定文体的文章。例如： 书面表达材料要求根据一首诗的内容，描述其中的一位老师，这是单纯的记叙文;或者根据提示，写毕业赠言，其中首先要求表述好友在你心中的印象，并用一两个事例加以描述，然后表达祝愿，这其实也是记叙文;或者依据要求，让学生描述一位伟人，并说明自己喜欢他或她的原因，
4、这还是记叙文。（四）注意平时的词汇积累。针对考生平时练习时出现的没词可用，写了不知是否正确等情况，建议考生们采用听、读、写相结合的办法，增加语言输入，扩大存储量。高三年级不可避免地要进行大量的听和读的练习，在做完听力和阅读理解后，可以停下来，用一点时间有意识地增加针对写作的语言输入，比如将听过或读过的表达方式回忆一下并记住，或者将有用的短语标出来，记在笔记本上，以备事后记忆之用。注意选取的资料应与考生自己的写作水平相近，还要提高记忆的准确性。二、解题技巧高考英语书面表达题解题应遵循五步骤的原则进行。2015年普通高等学校招生全国统一考试大纲英语中对写作这样要求：“要求考生根据提示进行书面表达，
5、考生应能(1)准确使用语法和词汇。(2)使用一定的句型、词汇，清楚、连贯地表达自己的意思。如何写好一篇作文分5个步骤（一）仔细审题，确定要点。在开始写作这前一定要认真阅读题目中的所有信息(中文提示、图示、注意事项等)把需要表达的全部信息要点列成提纲，列要点时，如果提示是图表，要认真审图，从图中找出要表达的信息要点，如事件发生的背景，人物的衣着、表情、动作、位置、年龄、外貌、图中的英汉文字等，如果有参考词汇，一定要用上。（二）根据要点，遣词造句。近年来高考书面表达的要求不断提高，高分文章要有较多的词汇，较高级的词汇用法。比如表达丰富可以用rich,但如果你用abundant这个词就属于较高级的词
6、汇。再比如“他强调小心驾驶的重要”这个句子 He emphasized the importance of careful driving.其中“强调”这个词如果你用 attach much importance to 效果更佳。（三）确定时态及人称，内容连贯，结构紧凑。高考书面表达评分标准明确规定，如人称错误要扣分，不同的文体一般都有基本时态。日记通常记叙发生过的事情，多用一般过去时。议论文多用一般现在时，通知等文体通常用一般将来时。每个句子写好之后，句与句之间要选择恰当的连接词。比如：(1)表示承接、递进用语，besides(并且)、whats more(并且)，moreover(而且)，
7、firstly, secondly, finally(最后)，from now on (从此)，afterwards I after that(后来)，to make things worse/ whats worse(使事情更为糟糕的是)，the worst thing of all(最糟糕的是)。(2)表示转折关系用语。But, however, otherwise, though, despite, in spite of.(尽管)on the other hand(另一方面)，as(尽管)，all the same(尽管如此)。(3)表示因果关系用语。because/because o
8、f.for(因为)，owing to (由于)，thanks to (由于)，due to (由于)，so that (结果)。(4)归纳总结用语。to summarize(总而言之)，in short/in a word(简而言之)，on the whole(从总体看)，generally speaking(一般说来)，in my view(我的观点)，in conclusion(总之)。（四）句式丰富，避免重词。英语书面表达评分标准第五档(21-25分)要求，“应使用较复杂结构，这要求学生不仅会运用基本句型，也要有意识地使用复杂句型，这是文章的亮点。如何使用复杂结构，本人认为适当运用非谓语
9、结构(分词短语、动名词或不定式短语)、适当运用各种从句(定语从句、名词性从句、状语从句)，这些都是有效的途径。比如：When he arrived in Beijing, he gave me an e-mail.(时间状语从句。一般)On arriving in Beijing, he gave me an e-mail. Having arrived in Beijing, he gave me an e-mail.(使用了介词+动名词和现在分词短语，分别作状语。高级) Hardly had he arrived in Beijing when he gave me an e-mail.(
10、改变时态，句子结构。高级)I wont believe what he says.(一般)No matter what he says, I wont believe it.(让步状从句，高级)。（五）认真答写，卷面整洁。高考书面表达评分标准中对书写有较高要求。尤其是高考英语作文网上进行阅卷以来，如果书写较差，会影响到扫描质量，因此，考生在答卷时，一定要认真、清楚规范地书写，以保卷面整洁和美观，为争取高分作文做好铺垫。三、修正小误1、审题不够仔细，遗漏要点2、语言基础知识薄弱，语法和拼写错误较多3 句子结构错误 双谓语现象句子结构混乱 4 动词使用错误 时态错误语态错误滥用be动词 5 汉语式
11、英语 6. 不规则动词及常用词拼写错误 7. 名词单复数错误 8、词义模糊，用词不够准确9、行文清晰，句子与句子间缺乏衔接. 10、逻辑错误，如：because与so或者although与but等同时出现在同一个句子里。读写任务（共1小题，满分25分）阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。Two years ago, when I was an oversea student, I worked early mornings and late nights to pay for my school fees.One day, I was seriously ill with
12、 a very high fever. I had stayed at home for a few days, and I had run out of food. Because I had been in this town just for a short time, I also had no friends nearby who could help. So I went out to get some food. I would have gone to the supermarket, but on this occasion, I went into a small stor
13、e because it was closer.I picked up a few items. When I handed them to the shopkeeper, she said, “You are unwell.” “Yes，” I nodded.She pointed at the salami and bread I was buying and offered, “I can make you a sandwich, so you dont have to do it yourself. So, she made the sandwich and asked me to w
14、ait a moment. She went in the back room and returned with a bowl of hot soup.“It will warm you up,” she said with a genuine smile.What really warmed me up was not the soup, but her kindness. It made me want to be as kind as the shopkeeper who had been kind to me.写作内容1.请你以约30个词概括上文的主要内容。2.请你以约120个词以“
15、善举的影响”为话题谈谈你的想法，内容包括：(I )上文使你回忆起曾经有谁的爱心举动使你感到温暖；(2)在感到温暖之余，你是否受到这个举动的影响，会把这份爱心传递下去？为什么？(3)进入大学校园后，你将如何继续传递爱心？写作要求你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄 袭阅读材料中的句子。【参考范文】读写任务 When the author, an oversea student, was badly ill, a shopkeeper made him a sandwich and offered hot soup. Feeling warm with he
16、r kindness, the author decided to be as kind as her. The passage reminds me of Miss Chen, my teacher of Chemistry, she just encouraged me not to give up.she even did everything to ease my anxiety. It sounds like nothing big, but her act did make me feel warm. With such a teacher, there is no doubt t
17、hat I will act as her in future. As long as I do so, others can also feel the kindness of Miss Chen. When I enter a college, I will keep kindness in mind. If possible, I will try to become a youth volunteer, who offers help to other. No matter how hard it is, I will do my best to help those people i
18、n need.【2016高考训练题】书面表达（满分25分）下列图表反映的是某高中2010年与2013年学生健康状况调查的部分数据，请你用英语为某报写一份报告，反映你校三年间学生健康状况的变化情况，分析其中原因，并提出一些改进措施。注意事项：1. 报告必须包括图表中所有内容，但不要逐条罗列； 2. 词数120词左右。题目和开头第一句已给出，不计入总词数。HealthA recent survey shows that the health of the students in our school has been going from bad to worse in the past thre
19、e years. 【参考范文】书面表达：HealthA recent survey shows that the health of the students in our school has been going from bad to worse in the past three years. The number of short-sighted students has increased from 77% in 2010 to 93.5% in 2013, while that of overweight students from 38% to 57.2%. Nearly 15
20、% more students dont have enough sleep because of more homework. Besides, over 21% more students become mentally unhealthy.It seems to me that the reasons for this lie in heavier burden of study and more homework, thus making students unable to spare any time to take exercise or have enough sleep. T
21、o improve students health, we call for less homework. Only in this way can students get plenty of sleep and be more healthy. Proper diets and exercise should also be paid attention to so that they wont easily put on weight. With their heavy burdens removed, students can then keep in normal mental he
22、alth.【2016高考训练题】面表达（满分25分）假如你是荣光中学的学生李华，你偶然看到在你市求学的美国学生Tom在网上发帖，要大家给他推荐一本学习汉语的书。你手头正好有一本合适的书可以借给他。请你给他发一封电子邮件，要点如下：1.说明写信原因； 2.描述书的情况； 3.约定见面时间和地点。注意：1.词数100左右； 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯； 3.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。Dear Tom, Im Li Hua, a student of Rongguang Middle School. 【参考范文】Dear Tom, Im Li Hua, a student of Rong
23、guang Middle School. I learned quite by chance that you needed a book to improve your Chinese. I happen to have one, which I think might help you.The book, entitled New Practical Chinese, is intended for beginners at your level. Not only does it include the basic conversations in our daily life, it
24、is also a window through which you can get to know Chinese culture and customs. Edited by three language experts, it is widely used by many foreign learners. If it is convenient to you, lets meet at the entrance to Jiangnan Park at 3 p.m. this Sunday. If not, try to find another time that is suitable for both of us. Yours, Li Hua